Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Death By Murder Chap 23"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
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Comment from royowen
Ah these two, Mason and Paddy are in seemingly in trouble and Paddy got out of the car to escape the police perusal, while Mason has been busy illegally breaking and entering and barely escaped noticed himself, a most entertaining episode Carol, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Ah these two, Mason and Paddy are in seemingly in trouble and Paddy got out of the car to escape the police perusal, while Mason has been busy illegally breaking and entering and barely escaped noticed himself, a most entertaining episode Carol, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Mason and Paddy aren't what you would refer to as professional criminals... they drew the short straw and seem to be bungling their way through life. Thank you so much.
Smiles, Carol
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That?s true
Comment from Shirley McLain
Excellent chapter that I enjoyed reading. You did a great job as always. I'm always ready to read more. You built tension in the story with the cops searching the cars and Paddy hiding in a field. Enjoy your Sunday. Shirley
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Excellent chapter that I enjoyed reading. You did a great job as always. I'm always ready to read more. You built tension in the story with the cops searching the cars and Paddy hiding in a field. Enjoy your Sunday. Shirley
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Oh I feel so special and lam thrilled by your review and the shiny stars. I am so happy you enjoyed the story and continue to follow. Just got home from North Carolina so trying to get caught up and writing again. Thank you so much.
Hugs, Carol
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Where did you go in North Carolina? I used to live there and usually go back at least once a year.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hi, Carol! There have been so many great chapters involving this story, but unfortunately, I'm so far behind it would be impossible for me to catch up. Let alone try to piece together what is going on. I wanted to let you know I'm still here and a super fan of yours. You are a talent, and I will be waiting in the wings for something new that I can sink my teeth into. Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Hi, Carol! There have been so many great chapters involving this story, but unfortunately, I'm so far behind it would be impossible for me to catch up. Let alone try to piece together what is going on. I wanted to let you know I'm still here and a super fan of yours. You are a talent, and I will be waiting in the wings for something new that I can sink my teeth into. Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Just so you have an update my dear... Lance (a lawyer) and Bennie (a lifetime friend) are headed to Tennessee as directed in a client's will to give the diamonds to Ethan (who knows nothing about them).
Mason and Paddy overheard a conversation about the diamonds while in a "watering hole" and beat Rudy (Bennie's pop) trying to get the diamonds. They stole a car and are following Lance and Bennie.
Peter Costello (following in his father's footsteps is a gangster) wants the diamonds. He's being helped by a crooked cop who just wants to retire.
Hank and Emmy are detectives with a budding romance.
Hopefully that will help ease you into the upcoming chapters. (
Thanks so much for the review, for jumping into the middle of a story (with a lot more action to come) and for the stars. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
I'm surprise that Mason and Paddy aren't already in prison. There are such bunglers. It is not wonder Mason almost got caught. You story is full and of twists and turns. I'm enjoying the journey.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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I'm surprise that Mason and Paddy aren't already in prison. There are such bunglers. It is not wonder Mason almost got caught. You story is full and of twists and turns. I'm enjoying the journey.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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I like to show all sides of the world. Some people who commit crimes aren't really meant to be criminals and others just tend to find themselves on the wrong side of the law even when they really aren't all bad people. Glad you recognize the differences in my characters. Thank you
Carol
Comment from JoannaN
It was a good idea to show this scene from Paddy and Mason's point of view. It often pays off to present your antagonists from the "human side" sometimes. Many stories are written in black and white (bad vs good), which makes them too flat. The relationship between Paddy and Mason looks good (and you can possibly develop it in further parts).
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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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It was a good idea to show this scene from Paddy and Mason's point of view. It often pays off to present your antagonists from the "human side" sometimes. Many stories are written in black and white (bad vs good), which makes them too flat. The relationship between Paddy and Mason looks good (and you can possibly develop it in further parts).
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Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and your kind comments regarding the developing story. I like to make my characters have dimension because no one is simply black and white.
Smiles and hugs for enjoying the story.
Carol
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like this chapter. It's full of action. Two thugs are escaping and I guess that they must have stolen the Jewries. I'm sorry that I missed a few chapters. I was so busy working and skiing in the last week. I like toread more of your novel from now on.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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I like this chapter. It's full of action. Two thugs are escaping and I guess that they must have stolen the Jewries. I'm sorry that I missed a few chapters. I was so busy working and skiing in the last week. I like toread more of your novel from now on.
Excellent.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Just so you have an update my dear... Lance (a lawyer) and Bennie (a lifetime friend) are headed to Tennessee as directed in a client's will to give the diamonds to Ethan (who knows nothing about them).
Mason and Paddy overheard a conversation about the diamonds while in a "watering hole" and beat Rudy (Bennie's pop) trying to get the diamonds. They stole a car and are following Lance and Bennie.
Peter Costello (following in his father's footsteps is a gangster) wants the diamonds. He's being helped by a crooked cop who just wants to retire.
Hank and Emmy are detectives with a budding romance.
Hopefully that will help ease you into the upcoming chapters. (If you stay off those ski slopes. lol)
Thanks so much for the review, for jumping into the middle of a story (with a lot more action to come) and for the shiny stars. I am flattered!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I always enjoy reading your books. Thank you so much for the update.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I so enjoy reading this story. I can see where Paddy and Mason have a problem, but they just might lead the Hank and Emmy to Lance and Benny. Good writing.
"Mason, I'm hungry. "Paddy rubbed his stomach. (move quotation marks closer to 'hungry.')
It was doubtful that anyone would be foolish enough to maneuver through the menagerie (omit 'that')
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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I so enjoy reading this story. I can see where Paddy and Mason have a problem, but they just might lead the Hank and Emmy to Lance and Benny. Good writing.
"Mason, I'm hungry. "Paddy rubbed his stomach. (move quotation marks closer to 'hungry.')
It was doubtful that anyone would be foolish enough to maneuver through the menagerie (omit 'that')
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Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Working on another chapter as we ease ourselves closer to Tennessee. No sightings of the cowboy yet. The FBI must be busy with bigger crimes I suppose.
Thanks for pointing out my errors. I have fixed them and appreciate the heads up.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I need a good doze of my cowboy right now. LOL
