Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Death By Murder - Chap 18"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
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Comment from prettybluebirds
So, you are back writing again. I hope you had a wonderful Thanksgiving day with your family. This chapter is every bit as good as the previous ones. Keep writing and I will keep reading.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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So, you are back writing again. I hope you had a wonderful Thanksgiving day with your family. This chapter is every bit as good as the previous ones. Keep writing and I will keep reading.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Good morning...
I have finally pulled myself back to where I want to be and am enjoying writing again. Thank you so much. Though life put me on a plane to my grandchildren in need, I am managing to get in some time on FS. My apologies for my delay.
Have a great day!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So, we still don't know what's in that box. I hope Sandy comes clean. I feel Hank and Emmy could be of help to her. Once again you have a good story on your hands. Thank you for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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So, we still don't know what's in that box. I hope Sandy comes clean. I feel Hank and Emmy could be of help to her. Once again you have a good story on your hands. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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You are in my thoughts this morning, Barbara. I hope all is well and thank you for always being there for me, both in my writing and my personal life.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Hank and Emmey make a good team. They both seem to come to the same conclusion about the coffee cups. Sandy does intent to give out further information unless she has too. I'm wonding what is in the package left on the front porch.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Hank and Emmey make a good team. They both seem to come to the same conclusion about the coffee cups. Sandy does intent to give out further information unless she has too. I'm wonding what is in the package left on the front porch.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much Beth. So sorry for being so far behind...Finally was able to catch up on reading everyone and now I hope I can clear all the reviews so I can post again.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from JoannaN
Hello, I liked this part of a story. One remark - you write this story from multiple points of view. Some authors, who use this technique, put the name of the POV character at the beginning of each POV, to help their readers to follow the story.
EMMY
(the scene, Emmy's pov)
SANDY
(another scene from Sandy's point of view).
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Hello, I liked this part of a story. One remark - you write this story from multiple points of view. Some authors, who use this technique, put the name of the POV character at the beginning of each POV, to help their readers to follow the story.
EMMY
(the scene, Emmy's pov)
SANDY
(another scene from Sandy's point of view).
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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My apologies for my delay in responding. I appreciate your support and suggestions. Life keeps throwing me these curve balls and I don't want anyone to think their time is not appreciated.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. Poor Sandy, I hope she does not get hurt. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter. I pray things are going well with you.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. Poor Sandy, I hope she does not get hurt. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter. I pray things are going well with you.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Sandy comes from a rough background but her heart is good. She tried to keep Fenton's name out of the mix since she realizes life is already tough for him. And now she will carry Rudy's problems on her shoulder as well.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from dellsworthpoet
Having not read any other portion of the book, it seems your character development is good. The pace and flow work well. The dialogue is believable. You have set up two crises and we are left with a cliffhanger.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Having not read any other portion of the book, it seems your character development is good. The pace and flow work well. The dialogue is believable. You have set up two crises and we are left with a cliffhanger.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy the chapter. I will hope that you are intrigued enough to return to read more.
Have a great day! Carol
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You are welcome.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
You are a great writer. I love the way you keep the story moving with fast-paced writing and changes in scenes throughout the post. Well done. I hope you had a great holiday.
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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You are a great writer. I love the way you keep the story moving with fast-paced writing and changes in scenes throughout the post. Well done. I hope you had a great holiday.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Good morning
My apologies for being so late in responding but life has thrown this old lady a curve as usual and I am struggling to catch up. You warmed my heart with your words "great writer". Though I'm probably not great but good, a few months ago I thought I'd never try to write again. I've been blessed to return and so thankful.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
