Comment from Douglas Goff

Excellent

True dat! There is a lot of law enforcement/ military terms in this piece.

I enjoyed this and found it ... mental stimulating. Makes my trigger-finger itch!

Great work!

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022

Thanks, Douglas

Comment from Celyn

Excellent

This seems a strange thing to write a poem about but it does work well. It fulfills the requirements of a cinquain and reads very well as there are no obvious prepositions missing that would make it read oddly. I can't think of anything that I would want to change so good luck with it.
Celyn

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022

Thanks, Celyn

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I think I probably missed the depth of the meaning to this excellent cinquain, not that it matters, you've written it perfectly according to the rules of the form, well done, a great post, good luck, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 16-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022

Thanks, Roy

reply by royowen on 16-Nov-2022

Welcome

Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot

Excellent

You definitely followed the prompt. Well written. My own personal preference is not reading the word bullet. It shivers my soul, with all the violence in this world.
The topic of your story is completely your choice, I shall not judge that.
Write On

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 Comment Written 16-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022

Thanks, Barbara