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The Tree

Trees live in all seasons.

27 total reviews 
Comment from jaded831
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The words are great, they create a wonderful image. The lines could use a bit editing, and your picture compliments your words. Together they make a great presentation. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. It placed second in the contest. Take care and have a great day.
    Cheers
    Barry Penfold
Comment from Wendy G
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Your poem has some good ideas and expressions, but the punctuation lets it down.
Suggestions:
Punctuation "All that's left ..." Need an apostrophe here as it is short for "that is".
Spaces are needed before "buds", "in", "gloriously", and the next "in".
"Its majesty" (no apostrophe needed here, as "it's" is an abbreviation for "it is".
Hope this is helpful. Best wishes.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Wendy,
    Once again you provide sound suggestions and you have certainly made me happy that you regularly read my efforts. The poem ran in second in the contest. You have a great day.
    Barry Penfold.
Comment from Gloria ....
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This is a fine entry into the 10 line poem contest. Trees are definitely worthy of a poem, and yours is subtle with a strong flow, occasional rhyme and imagery.

Just one small typo here:

A new tree is born,in all it`s (its) majesty.

Wishing you much luck with the voters.

Gloria

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Gloria,
    Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and FYI it ran in second in the contest.
    Have a great day and take care.Thanks for picking the error.
    Regards
    Barry Penfold.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
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a nice tribute to the trees all around us. It would also work in the Ode poetry contest. I like the way you build to the ending = with a plea to take care of the trees all around us.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Jake,
    Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it . It was placed second in the contest.
    Take care and have a great day.
    Regards
    Barry Penfold.
Comment from Aussie
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"New branches grow when spring awakes." Just a thought (with respect) I like poems about nature. It is wonderful to see a tree sprout green and grow once more. Well done. K xx

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Thanks for your suggestion and also for taking time to read and review my poem. Much appreciated.
    Take care and have a great day.
    Regards
    Barry Penfold.
Comment from GWHARGIS
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I'm glad I read a poem by someone who obviously loves trees. It's not so much the leaves that I like. I'm drawn to the bark. Each tree has a unique bark. I can look at tree bark for hours. But the leaves in spring and fall ain't bad. This was a great rhyming poem. It read smoothly. Great job. Gretchen

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Gretchen,
    Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. It ran into second place in the contest. I am speaking as if it was a horse race lol
    Take care and have a great day.
    Barry Penfold.
reply by GWHARGIS on 17-Nov-2022
    You got my vote. Glad you did well but had no doubt. Gretchen
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
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A touching poem about a tree reemerging from its winter slumber. A couple of aggressive rhyme choices but they work. The 4 line and 6 line stanzas were an interesting twist.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Charles,
    Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem.Glad you liked it. Take care and have a great day.
    Regards
    Barry Penfold.
Comment from royowen
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Yes, when the tree loses its leaves it goes into fallowed inactivity, a sort of renewal, where the ground recovers in preparation for the new birth this comes in spring, as Christ rose from the dead, this is beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Roy,
    Thanks again for your support. The poem ran second which I am happy about. Keep up your wondeerful writing and also have a great day.
    Regards
    Barry Penfold.
reply by royowen on 17-Nov-2022
    Bless you, congratulations Barry.
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words are nature based, descriptive and creative. I thought
a lot about the gift of nature and how trees are such a big part of it. Thank you for the author's notes - I liked the statement made in the last sentence! The artwork goes well with the words of this poem.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Harmony,
    Once again thanks for supporting my poem. It came in second. You take care and have a great day.
    Cheers
    Barry Penfold.
Comment from Begin Again
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Trees, like people, go through phases. They have their glorious moments in the sunshine and their dismal days when leaves fall, and they stand alone in the darkness. Kindness to nature and to humans is the secret of longevity for all.

Hugs, Carol

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
    Carol,
    How true your words are and I would like to thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
    Take care and have a great day.
    Regards
    Barry Penfold.