My Dream of Utopia
We all have a picture of a perfect world17 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is a wonderful dream that I hope comes true. Sadly though, I really doubt it. I loved this well rhymed poem and appreciate the sentiment. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is a wonderful dream that I hope comes true. Sadly though, I really doubt it. I loved this well rhymed poem and appreciate the sentiment. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Well we have to keep trying. Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. Take care and keep wishing for the better world.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from June Sargent
So true! There is nothing wrong for wishing for something better. We all need to feel peace within our hearts - now more than ever. I enjoyed your positive sentiments.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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So true! There is nothing wrong for wishing for something better. We all need to feel peace within our hearts - now more than ever. I enjoyed your positive sentiments.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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June,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Yes it is indeed a time of many troubles in the world. But onward we must go and still hold positive thoughts. Take Care
Barry Penfold
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry in the rhyming contest. Your rhyme scheme was consistent throughout. The message of hope in your poem is shared by me and many others. There is for sure nothing wrong with wishing for something better. Your font size could be a bit larger, and it would be great in one of the shades of green in your visual. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is a good entry in the rhyming contest. Your rhyme scheme was consistent throughout. The message of hope in your poem is shared by me and many others. There is for sure nothing wrong with wishing for something better. Your font size could be a bit larger, and it would be great in one of the shades of green in your visual. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Sandra,
Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. We should all pursue positive thoughts in a troubled world. Take your point on the font size. Take care and have a good day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
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Amen, pursue even if not found. You are welcome.
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Thanks.Perhaps you will come across another of my poems one day.I hope you do. In the meantime keep smiling.
Barry Penfold.
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I will visit your page.
Comment from Ricky1024
"My Dream of Utopia"
This is a Rhyming Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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"My Dream of Utopia"
This is a Rhyming Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Doctor Ricky,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. It ran in third in the contest. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very nicely done. If only...
This line has issues:
And bitterness,a word
(No need for the comma, but if you keep it you still need a space)
Good work. I shall see you on the field of linguisting battle!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Very nicely done. If only...
This line has issues:
And bitterness,a word
(No need for the comma, but if you keep it you still need a space)
Good work. I shall see you on the field of linguisting battle!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Doug,
Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem.Glad you enjoyed it and I agree with your suggestion of the space after the word bitterness. Take care and have a good day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore the sentiments and I wonder if it was all true would mankind be happy? We never seem to be satisfied and content with out lot, a well rhymed and skilful write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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I adore the sentiments and I wonder if it was all true would mankind be happy? We never seem to be satisfied and content with out lot, a well rhymed and skilful write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Dolly,
Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. I wish it could become true but we must keep trying. Take care and have a good day.
Barry Penfold
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a truly lovely poem describing the perfect world. It is so wonderful to dream of everyone finding happiness, food, and comfort. If only it could be true.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is a truly lovely poem describing the perfect world. It is so wonderful to dream of everyone finding happiness, food, and comfort. If only it could be true.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Wow. Thanks Carol for the six star rating. Lets all keep dreaming.It just might come true one day. Take Care and have a great day.
The poem came in third.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
