Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Death By Murder - Chap 6"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'd dig a big hole and bury it, or take a boat into the ocean and dump it overboard. It's a death sentence whoever finds out Lance and Benny have it. But we also have the teller, she saw what was in the box. I think the whole world will know that Lance has the jewels soon. Another excellent chapter, my friend. I look forward to the next part. Love and hugs, Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
I'd dig a big hole and bury it, or take a boat into the ocean and dump it overboard. It's a death sentence whoever finds out Lance and Benny have it. But we also have the teller, she saw what was in the box. I think the whole world will know that Lance has the jewels soon. Another excellent chapter, my friend. I look forward to the next part. Love and hugs, Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
Lance shows Benny the letter which explains the jewel heist, and the actual explanation declares that Frank O'Hara was there with his men, there was a lot of commotion, and the bag of jewels happened to finish in Lance's possession beautifully written my friend, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
Lance shows Benny the letter which explains the jewel heist, and the actual explanation declares that Frank O'Hara was there with his men, there was a lot of commotion, and the bag of jewels happened to finish in Lance's possession beautifully written my friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
Interesting. That would sure be a tough spot to find oneself in. It would be a significant temptation to take a few of the jewels. I'm glad I'm not in that spot. I will be looking forward to the next chapter. You have me hooked and mostly reeled in now. LOL.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
Interesting. That would sure be a tough spot to find oneself in. It would be a significant temptation to take a few of the jewels. I'm glad I'm not in that spot. I will be looking forward to the next chapter. You have me hooked and mostly reeled in now. LOL.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
I hope this updated review will eliminate that four that was never intended. I don't know how that happens, but it does, I've heard lots of people say. I'm just glad you brought it to my attention so I could fix it. Have a wonderful rest of your weekend!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
I hope this updated review will eliminate that four that was never intended. I don't know how that happens, but it does, I've heard lots of people say. I'm just glad you brought it to my attention so I could fix it. Have a wonderful rest of your weekend!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Oh my...I appreciate the review as always, but you must tell me what you didn't like... four stars rattle my cage. What do I need to fix? Set me straight my dear friend. Were my two Shanty Town boys over the top for you?
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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What? I could never give you a four on anything. I'm so glad you stopped to let me know. I can guarantee it wasn't intentional and I'll do whatever I can to update and fix it right now. I don't give anyone a four on anything, and especially you. I even give the worst writing on the site fives. I mean, who the heck am I do discourage anyone. We're here to encourage. And even those of you who don't need it, have to like it. LOL. :-) Hugs.
Comment from JoannaN
Your story has a good structure. It begans with a short scene, which is dynamic and full of tension. The passage from the beginning to the conclusion is logical and makes sense. The inclusion of a letter inside the scene was a good idea. Well done :)
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
Your story has a good structure. It begans with a short scene, which is dynamic and full of tension. The passage from the beginning to the conclusion is logical and makes sense. The inclusion of a letter inside the scene was a good idea. Well done :)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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First and foremost, I want to thank you for continuing to read and enjoy the story. You put a smile on my face. I appreciate your time and your thoughtfulness.
Sorry for the delay but we have just had our 7th death in our family and close friends this year and it's taking a serious toll on all of us. Thank you for understanding.
Apologize for the standard post.... Hugs, Carol
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I am sorry for your loss. Keep writing.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This was a tightly-written chapter that packed a lot of information and excitement. However, I had the impression that there was perhaps slightly too much dialogue. The reader would have benefitted from the occasional slowing of pace. Still, I'll be looking for the next chapter with interest. Kate xx
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
This was a tightly-written chapter that packed a lot of information and excitement. However, I had the impression that there was perhaps slightly too much dialogue. The reader would have benefitted from the occasional slowing of pace. Still, I'll be looking for the next chapter with interest. Kate xx
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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First and foremost, I want to thank you for continuing to read and enjoy the story. You put a smile on my face. I appreciate your time and your thoughtfulness.
Sorry for the delay but we have just had our 7th death in our family and close friends this year and it's taking a serious toll on all of us. Thank you for understanding.
Apologize for the standard post.... Hugs, Carol
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What to do? He does have a huge problem. No matter what he does it might turn out to be the wrong thing and he is only an innocent person in possession of the biggest Jewelry Heist in history. Scary to say the least. Well done! Nancy:)
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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
What to do? He does have a huge problem. No matter what he does it might turn out to be the wrong thing and he is only an innocent person in possession of the biggest Jewelry Heist in history. Scary to say the least. Well done! Nancy:)
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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First and foremost, I want to thank you for continuing to read and enjoy the story. You put a smile on my face. I appreciate your time and your thoughtfulness.
Sorry for the delay but we have just had our 7th death in our family and close friends this year and it's taking a serious toll on all of us. Thank you for understanding.
Apologize for the standard post.... Hugs, Carol
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I understand, Carol. My family have had a very hard time this year. So far every one of us have been in the Hospital, except Nancy Jean who had a bout with Covid and was quarantined away from home but thankfully she survived.
My girls just left for Las Vegas where Rhonda will probably undergo a very dangerous procedure cleaning out the arteries in her neck. (Say a little prayer, please. Have a nice day, Dear. Nancy:)
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I feared Bennie would be a bad influence. It will be interesting where you take all of this. I can't wait for more. You're doing a good job. I sure hope my Cowboy comes and solves the problem. LOL
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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
I feared Bennie would be a bad influence. It will be interesting where you take all of this. I can't wait for more. You're doing a good job. I sure hope my Cowboy comes and solves the problem. LOL
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol