Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Death By Murder - Chap 4"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
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Comment from Teri7
Oh wow! Now I can't hardly wait to read the next chapter! You used very good descriptive and mysterious words to keep us hanging on. Another great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Oh wow! Now I can't hardly wait to read the next chapter! You used very good descriptive and mysterious words to keep us hanging on. Another great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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I am so glad I can keep you on the edge of your seat Teri. It makes my heart smile.
Appreciate your thoughtfulness and comments.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
How interesting, you're developing quite a collection of characters in your story Carol. The marvellous thing is, which I always admire about the writers of novels is their ability to produce an eclectic collection of characters, and interlink them, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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How interesting, you're developing quite a collection of characters in your story Carol. The marvellous thing is, which I always admire about the writers of novels is their ability to produce an eclectic collection of characters, and interlink them, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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I am thrilled that you are finding my characters intriguing ... some good and definitely some not so good. We'll root for the good guys and hope for the best.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Well done Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Well written. Enough background detail to allow the reader to visualise the scene and characters very well.
It must be the missing jewellery and now he has a huge ethical dilemma! I do like how each chapter so far has set a different angle to your book. Can't wait for the next.
Wendy
Typo:"A loud gasp exploded from his mouth" not "gas".
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Well written. Enough background detail to allow the reader to visualise the scene and characters very well.
It must be the missing jewellery and now he has a huge ethical dilemma! I do like how each chapter so far has set a different angle to your book. Can't wait for the next.
Wendy
Typo:"A loud gasp exploded from his mouth" not "gas".
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Hi Wendy,
Made a correction and dropped the 'P" on gasp.... glad it wasn't liquid or the story would have gotten stinky. LOL Just me being crazy this morning. Thanks for helping. I appreciate it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
You know how to set up a cliffhanger, that's for sure! The box is heavy, hmmm?
Guess it's all going to be revealed, so I can't hazard a guess.
I do know that bank employee was pretty nosy!
Check: "A loud gas exploded from his mouth." Could be...more likely a GASP though?
(wink)
Karenina
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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You know how to set up a cliffhanger, that's for sure! The box is heavy, hmmm?
Guess it's all going to be revealed, so I can't hazard a guess.
I do know that bank employee was pretty nosy!
Check: "A loud gas exploded from his mouth." Could be...more likely a GASP though?
(wink)
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Hi sweet girl,
Seems everyone noticed or smelled the "P", lol. I dropped the 'P" on gasp.... glad it wasn't liquid or the story would have gotten stinky. LOL Just me being crazy this morning.
Love you girl. Tell me you are okay.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! This is really getting exciting! I'm wondering if the stolen jewels are in this bank safe box??? I don't know how you dream up so many characters and keep them straight but the "Satan" name is hysterical since he seems to be such a nice guy. Poor lawyer is in a quandary - does he do his duty or does he tell the police?
A loud gas exploded from his mouth. (really a gas? not a gasp? )
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Wow! This is really getting exciting! I'm wondering if the stolen jewels are in this bank safe box??? I don't know how you dream up so many characters and keep them straight but the "Satan" name is hysterical since he seems to be such a nice guy. Poor lawyer is in a quandary - does he do his duty or does he tell the police?
A loud gas exploded from his mouth. (really a gas? not a gasp? )
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Hi Helen
Yes, Lance has found himself in the middle of a mess and it's just going to get worse. As for the "P"... thanks for letting me know. I hope it wasn't too smelly at your end, LOL
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, that's not fair! What's in the box that has filled Lance with trepidation? A lot of money? Diamonds? A severed head/hand/foot? Whatever is in there, it has shaken Lance a lot. Now we need to read more. Well done, again, Carol, fabulous plot! Love you lots. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Oh, that's not fair! What's in the box that has filled Lance with trepidation? A lot of money? Diamonds? A severed head/hand/foot? Whatever is in there, it has shaken Lance a lot. Now we need to read more. Well done, again, Carol, fabulous plot! Love you lots. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Good day, Sandra
I always smile when I see your name appear. Even though you aren't here, it gives me a warm feeling, like a hug. Silly me, huh? I hope you think this story is as rewarding as the other ones. I know it is to me because of where I was the past few months. I was sad about all the deaths (5 in 6 months) but Penny and I spoke every single day at 6AM. It's how we started our day. It got me wondering if my number was next.... I didn't want to go out like I was... I had things to accomplish and writing is a big part of it.
I am smiling and pleased with my efforts. And I feel pleased by everyone's reactions to my return and the story. It's a good feeling.
Love you, girl friend. Smiles and hugs, CC
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is great! You stopped at the perfect point, leaving the reader suspended in mid-air. What's in the box? Is it an obnoxious sum of money, or a body part? Where should it be delivered. Rupert is already dead, so Lance can't ask questions or back out of the deal. This story is developing in true Carol style. Can't wait to see what happens.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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This is great! You stopped at the perfect point, leaving the reader suspended in mid-air. What's in the box? Is it an obnoxious sum of money, or a body part? Where should it be delivered. Rupert is already dead, so Lance can't ask questions or back out of the deal. This story is developing in true Carol style. Can't wait to see what happens.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Hi Lorraine,
Trying to keep up with the reviews before my eyes give out, but I am thrilled to see you are enjoying the story. Secrets beget secrets and the pot is bubbling.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Maria Millsaps
Oh no, not fair, I want to know what's in the box! How could you leave me in suspense with no closure? There must be something more in the box than money. Great job!
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Oh no, not fair, I want to know what's in the box! How could you leave me in suspense with no closure? There must be something more in the box than money. Great job!
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Oh, there is something much bigger than money in the box, Maria. Now that we have piqued your interest, I hope you will continue to follow.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Curiosity killed the cat, 😂
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait to see what's inside that box and how all of this fits into the previous posts. I know it'll all fit in.
The body spoke. "I'm not dead, Mr. Fenway. (comma after 'spoke')
"It's like playing that board game. Clue, I think. (comma needed after 'game')
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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I can't wait to see what's inside that box and how all of this fits into the previous posts. I know it'll all fit in.
The body spoke. "I'm not dead, Mr. Fenway. (comma after 'spoke')
"It's like playing that board game. Clue, I think. (comma needed after 'game')
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Thank you, as always. The one with the board game, I questioned myself. In my mind, she was stating like a board game and then after a moments thought, she recalled the name Clue. Guess it doesn't matter. It wasn't that important. LOL I changed it.
Smiles, Carol