Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Death By Murder"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
24 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Good to see you back, Carol!! I had to wait until I could earn a pump before reviewing. I'm glad you're starting a new book. Your characters are engaging and the plot is laid out well. And you end this chapter with a prayer so we know who we are rooting for!
One metaphor didn't quite work for me:
an octave or two above a whisper (octave is a pitch reference not volume)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Good to see you back, Carol!! I had to wait until I could earn a pump before reviewing. I'm glad you're starting a new book. Your characters are engaging and the plot is laid out well. And you end this chapter with a prayer so we know who we are rooting for!
One metaphor didn't quite work for me:
an octave or two above a whisper (octave is a pitch reference not volume)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Dear Helen, I can't find the words to thank you for all you have done for me. You will never know how important your card was during my darkest hours. Knowing that some one really cared.
Thanks for setting me straight on "Octave". I am not trained in the likes of music and I always thought it meant volume... You know like when they say you want to turn it up an octave.
Appreciate the review and appreciate you for being you!!!
Smiles and hugs, CC
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Ah! I see! That colloquialism is something I didn't think about. I am such a literalist! Then keep it if you like it. Others will be fine with it. Just our music-types might react. Lol.
Comment from eliz100
I am so glad you are back. I will continue to pray for you and yours. This is another excellent chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Again, very glad to see you. The picture you chose works well with the story.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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I am so glad you are back. I will continue to pray for you and yours. This is another excellent chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Again, very glad to see you. The picture you chose works well with the story.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you my dear sweet friend. I hope my eyes will let me start reading a little bit so I can catch up on all I've missed. Thank you so much for your kind thoughts. Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, it is so great to seeing you back but you've caught me at a bad moment, because I have no more sixes left for you. I can assure you, your writing is as strong as ever. I'm looking forward to what's next..Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Hi Carol, it is so great to seeing you back but you've caught me at a bad moment, because I have no more sixes left for you. I can assure you, your writing is as strong as ever. I'm looking forward to what's next..Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Ulla, Not to worry about the stars. Right now, I am a giddy old lady who is happier than I have thought possible in the past eight months. I am thrilled my friends are here, and they still enjoy what I write. It's been a dark time, but I pray it's behind me. Thank you so much for believing in me. Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Hugs back to you!!!
Comment from karenina
Prayers are answered. I click on FanStory every day and wonder if perhaps you'll have come back. Know I have been praying for your health and for the many trials you and your family have been through.
Shake off the nerves, Carol because your writing is as intriguing and interesting as ever. Your "voice" is always distinctive and I'm quite excited to get in on the ground floor of this new book!
Six stars and mega-hugs from one of your biggest fans!
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Prayers are answered. I click on FanStory every day and wonder if perhaps you'll have come back. Know I have been praying for your health and for the many trials you and your family have been through.
Shake off the nerves, Carol because your writing is as intriguing and interesting as ever. Your "voice" is always distinctive and I'm quite excited to get in on the ground floor of this new book!
Six stars and mega-hugs from one of your biggest fans!
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Karenina, I have tears in my eyes. I prayed you would be here. My computer froze/crashed and I lost everything. All the information you'd given me. I have a new computer sitting in the box because my son has been "too busy" to help. I did set up the new laptop by myself but nothing was stored in it of course.
I hope you are well and things are going okay for you. I missed you so much. It's taken me a long time but I think I am in a good spot finally. At least the mental block is gone and I seem to be able to write. That's all I wanted anyhow. I am thrilled beyond words to hear from you and see that you like the first chapter. I have 16 actually written and the entire book outlined (not that it will stay as such).
Thank you for the stars and all the encouraging words, but most of all, thank you for the mega-hugs and being my friend. Smiles and lots of love, Carol
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That explains why all emails have gone unanswered. We're all prisoners to technology I fear! I prayed it you'd somehow be in touch again...and look! I'm thrilled to see you here again! Same email? PM me! Hugs, girlfriend! Always!
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Here I am...an old lady actually giddy because I heard from you. Silly ole me! But it's me again.... not the woman who stood at the edge of the cliff and wanted to jump. I'll take it! CC
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You are a mighty warrior! I had every hope that God was seeing you through...
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I was blessed! I know I would have fell off that edge except for his hand holding mine.
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Amen!
Comment from robyn corum
CAROL!!
Huzzah! Yay! Skippity-do-da!! Hallelujah! I have been thinking about you lately and wondering how you were and if you'd EVER come back to us -- your other family. It's so good to see you.
I'm truly sorry for all that you've had to deal with. It's far too much. The thing is I know how strong you are -- a double curse AND blessing. Your family members know it too and expect to lean on you. --sigh--
Okay - this story begins with a very intriguing premise. You've already set up the foreshadowing so we know that Peter will play a big part in this production. Your flashbacks offer us enough information so we get the idea of what was going on with dear old dad. YIKES!
I look forward to more!!! Hugs and kisses and hugs and kisses!
XOXOXOXOXOXOXOXO!!!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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CAROL!!
Huzzah! Yay! Skippity-do-da!! Hallelujah! I have been thinking about you lately and wondering how you were and if you'd EVER come back to us -- your other family. It's so good to see you.
I'm truly sorry for all that you've had to deal with. It's far too much. The thing is I know how strong you are -- a double curse AND blessing. Your family members know it too and expect to lean on you. --sigh--
Okay - this story begins with a very intriguing premise. You've already set up the foreshadowing so we know that Peter will play a big part in this production. Your flashbacks offer us enough information so we get the idea of what was going on with dear old dad. YIKES!
I look forward to more!!! Hugs and kisses and hugs and kisses!
XOXOXOXOXOXOXOXO!!!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Hello, Robyn... I am happy to see your smiling face again and so pleased that you enjoyed the first chapter. There aren't words to explain where I was at and how difficult it was to come back to being me. But here I am and I am so happy. Writing again and sharing it with you and the others is a blessing. Thank you for all your kindness. I am smiling from ear to ear.... not actually a pretty sight but it feels good. LOL Smiles, hugs and lots of love, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Goodness knows what you'll be like when you have the whole of your confidence back, Carol, this is a great start to your new novel. It has so much going for it, I can't wait to read how it all unfolds. You are a natural at this writing lark!!! Lol. Welcome back my wonderful friend, I'm so happy to see you in my messages again. Keep them coming!! Love and hugs, :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Goodness knows what you'll be like when you have the whole of your confidence back, Carol, this is a great start to your new novel. It has so much going for it, I can't wait to read how it all unfolds. You are a natural at this writing lark!!! Lol. Welcome back my wonderful friend, I'm so happy to see you in my messages again. Keep them coming!! Love and hugs, :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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My dear sweet Sandra, Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the stars and your kindness, but most of all, for being who you are and being my friend. It was your constant encouragement that brought me back from the edge. I am beyond thrilled that you like the first chapter. Your opinion means so much to me. Thank you...thank you...thank you!! Smiles, hugs, and lots of love, Carol
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It was a great start, and you are more than welcome for the golden star, Carol. You deserved it. I'll always be there for you. Love you lots my dear friend. xxxx
Comment from Carol Clark2
A great beginning to a new book with strong characters. I'm so glad you're back. Prayers for your health issues and family drama. I hope the girls are safe now. Looking forward to reading your book, and so glad you're ready to 'begin again.' Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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A great beginning to a new book with strong characters. I'm so glad you're back. Prayers for your health issues and family drama. I hope the girls are safe now. Looking forward to reading your book, and so glad you're ready to 'begin again.' Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Hello, Carol Thank you for stopping by to read my first chapter and for thinking about the girls. They are safe at home, but their heads were messed with so much. Carissa is looking for help for them and not the therapist their father slept with. Oops! Begin Again has and will always be my motto. Smiles and hugs, Carol
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That's a rather big Oops! Prayers. Carol
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I meant on his part.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
You are such a competent writer. I enjoy reading your writing and love your word choices. I'm so glad you are back with another interesting thriller. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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You are such a competent writer. I enjoy reading your writing and love your word choices. I'm so glad you are back with another interesting thriller. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Excellent.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Oh my dear friend, I thank you so much for reading my story and enjoying it. I appreciate the stars, but I appreciate you more!!! It feels so good to be able to write again. I believe I am finally free to be me again. Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I love your writing. Hugs.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Please know that my prayers have remained with you. I am glad you're writing again. Please find the peace it brings.
I enjoyed reading this story and can't wait for more. It's a great storyline. I do have a question - Who is Elizabeth's husband, Copper's father, or are we not to know at this time. I saw a hint is it Peter Costello?
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Please know that my prayers have remained with you. I am glad you're writing again. Please find the peace it brings.
I enjoyed reading this story and can't wait for more. It's a great storyline. I do have a question - Who is Elizabeth's husband, Copper's father, or are we not to know at this time. I saw a hint is it Peter Costello?
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Hello, Barbara....I must thank you for keeping me in your prayers because I honestly know as I teetered on that edge of no return, our Lord heard all the prayers and held my hand so I didn't fall over the edge. It's strange how one morning could be so different than the last eight months. I woke up happy with this story whizzing around inside my head .... a gift, for sure.
Your questions - Elizabeth didn't have a husband. Cooper is listed as her illegitimate son. The story hasn't gone there, but the character list does. You are one smart cookie to catch that, but then I always knew that. And you popped into my mind every time I wanted some one to sit "down"... Good teacher you are!
Hope you continue to enjoy and please know how much I appreciate you. My eyes give me fits but I honestly intend to get back to your story. I was enjoying it so much. Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
It's good to see you again. I was wondering whatever became of you. I knew you had some personal issues, but I never dreamed of a kidnapping. I hope the children were found and returned. The same thing occurred with my brother's daughter, but they caught the father with the children just before he left the states. Your writing appears as excellent as ever.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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It's good to see you again. I was wondering whatever became of you. I knew you had some personal issues, but I never dreamed of a kidnapping. I hope the children were found and returned. The same thing occurred with my brother's daughter, but they caught the father with the children just before he left the states. Your writing appears as excellent as ever.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Good morning and hugs to you! Life has been beyond words, but the girls are safe now. They'll need counseling because their ordeal was difficult, but at least they are with us. Thank you for your kid words and thoughtfulness. Smiles to you! Carol