His Great Love and Mercy!
Jesus freed me of my sins so I could begin again In Him!42 total reviews
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Fonda, why have we not met before? Well I am so very happy that we are meeting now. Your poem is enlightening and beautiful, as your profile is, my friend. I am so delighted for you that you felt Jesus pull you up and give you another chance. As he did for me and countless others. It isn't easy when life makes sin a priority in our life. But knowing that your sins are washed white as snow, is the greatest gift to man. I will be promoting a Halloween story that I wrote, called "I was a ghost and a goblin," this next week. However it is an autobiography of how alcohol inheritance destroyed so part of my family and almost me. We use a lot of the same words describing the Freedom that we can only find through Christ our Lord and Savior. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us and once again, it is nice to meet another Christian friend!
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Fonda, why have we not met before? Well I am so very happy that we are meeting now. Your poem is enlightening and beautiful, as your profile is, my friend. I am so delighted for you that you felt Jesus pull you up and give you another chance. As he did for me and countless others. It isn't easy when life makes sin a priority in our life. But knowing that your sins are washed white as snow, is the greatest gift to man. I will be promoting a Halloween story that I wrote, called "I was a ghost and a goblin," this next week. However it is an autobiography of how alcohol inheritance destroyed so part of my family and almost me. We use a lot of the same words describing the Freedom that we can only find through Christ our Lord and Savior. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us and once again, it is nice to meet another Christian friend!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am glad you have found some happiness in life and some direction and I hope you do good things with it as our behaviour shows our true ways, you opened up your heart here, love Dolly x
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I am glad you have found some happiness in life and some direction and I hope you do good things with it as our behaviour shows our true ways, you opened up your heart here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
Comment from Paul McFarland
A great testimony in a poem. It is always nice to see the story of a saved soul. It is amazing what the spirit of the Lord can accomplish. Good luck in the contest.
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A great testimony in a poem. It is always nice to see the story of a saved soul. It is amazing what the spirit of the Lord can accomplish. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Hi my young friend Fonda! I'm blessed that you posted again, after almost two years away. I love your testimony and the Bible verse in your picture (it's one of my favorites).
I began making suggestions for improvements in grammar. Even though technically a poem isn't subject to all the grammatical rules of prose, it does flow better if you follow them. However, I didn't make suggestions about the whole poem, but stopped part of the way through, because it is time consuming, and I don't know yet, how you will receive my suggestions. Here they are:
as the devil, my friends,
was all of my days,
=>
as the devil, my friends,
was in all of my days.
OR
as the devil, my friends,
plagued all of my days.
[To say that the devil WAS all of your days doesn't make sense. The devil can do a lot of harm (although God is MUCH stronger), but he can't BE a day. The devil may have been IN all of your days, or may have PLAGUED your days or RUINED your days, but anyway I've given you several suggestions here. It's also a complete thought and I recommend a period, allowing the next sentence to begin another thought.]
and with each sin,
I dug deeper down,
until I lost sight,
of solid ground,
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Then with each sin,
I dug deeper down,
until I lost sight,
of solid ground. [Another complete thought.]
and by myself alone,
this I couldn't quit,
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By myself alone,
this I couldn't quit,
Through all of my,
self-inflicted,
anguish and misery,
my soul so longed,
and yearned to be free,
=>
Through all of my
self-inflicted
anguish and misery,
my soul so longed,
and yearned to be free. [You don't need so many commas. Also, if an adjective (among several adjectives) is NECESSARY to describe your noun, or if there's only one adjective, you don't need a comma between the adjective and the noun. For example, "It was a bright, sunny day" vs. "It was an ordinary sunny day."]
so with all of my being,
I called out,
on bended knees,
'Jesus, Oh Lord,
save me please!'
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So with all of my being,
I called out
on bended knees,
"Jesus, Oh Lord,
save me please!"
[If you did put a period at the end of the previous sentence, you could start this one with a capital letter on "So". Also, no comma is needed before "on bended knees". You can use double quotes in those last two lines, if you took the quotation marks off the entire poem. You don't need the quotation marks around the entire poem. You are the poet. You don't need to quote your own writing.]
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Let me know if you want suggestions about the rest of the poem, and I'll answer with the rest of the list.
YES, Jesus is VERY merciful to His followers! He could indeed destroy us, in our utter sinfulness, but instead, He makes us a new creation, because His love for us is so great and awesome.
I am sometimes away from FanStory myself, because of the difficulties and responsibilities in my life, but lately I've been a little more active. It's good to see you here again.
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Hi my young friend Fonda! I'm blessed that you posted again, after almost two years away. I love your testimony and the Bible verse in your picture (it's one of my favorites).
I began making suggestions for improvements in grammar. Even though technically a poem isn't subject to all the grammatical rules of prose, it does flow better if you follow them. However, I didn't make suggestions about the whole poem, but stopped part of the way through, because it is time consuming, and I don't know yet, how you will receive my suggestions. Here they are:
as the devil, my friends,
was all of my days,
=>
as the devil, my friends,
was in all of my days.
OR
as the devil, my friends,
plagued all of my days.
[To say that the devil WAS all of your days doesn't make sense. The devil can do a lot of harm (although God is MUCH stronger), but he can't BE a day. The devil may have been IN all of your days, or may have PLAGUED your days or RUINED your days, but anyway I've given you several suggestions here. It's also a complete thought and I recommend a period, allowing the next sentence to begin another thought.]
and with each sin,
I dug deeper down,
until I lost sight,
of solid ground,
=>
Then with each sin,
I dug deeper down,
until I lost sight,
of solid ground. [Another complete thought.]
and by myself alone,
this I couldn't quit,
=>
By myself alone,
this I couldn't quit,
Through all of my,
self-inflicted,
anguish and misery,
my soul so longed,
and yearned to be free,
=>
Through all of my
self-inflicted
anguish and misery,
my soul so longed,
and yearned to be free. [You don't need so many commas. Also, if an adjective (among several adjectives) is NECESSARY to describe your noun, or if there's only one adjective, you don't need a comma between the adjective and the noun. For example, "It was a bright, sunny day" vs. "It was an ordinary sunny day."]
so with all of my being,
I called out,
on bended knees,
'Jesus, Oh Lord,
save me please!'
=>
So with all of my being,
I called out
on bended knees,
"Jesus, Oh Lord,
save me please!"
[If you did put a period at the end of the previous sentence, you could start this one with a capital letter on "So". Also, no comma is needed before "on bended knees". You can use double quotes in those last two lines, if you took the quotation marks off the entire poem. You don't need the quotation marks around the entire poem. You are the poet. You don't need to quote your own writing.]
***
Let me know if you want suggestions about the rest of the poem, and I'll answer with the rest of the list.
YES, Jesus is VERY merciful to His followers! He could indeed destroy us, in our utter sinfulness, but instead, He makes us a new creation, because His love for us is so great and awesome.
I am sometimes away from FanStory myself, because of the difficulties and responsibilities in my life, but lately I've been a little more active. It's good to see you here again.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a beautifully written testimonial. Your faith in God and your devotion shine through. I am very happy for you. Without faith we are lost and alone. I thoroughly enjoyed your lovely poem. Gretchen
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This was a beautifully written testimonial. Your faith in God and your devotion shine through. I am very happy for you. Without faith we are lost and alone. I thoroughly enjoyed your lovely poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
Comment from Sugarray77
What a lovely faith-filled verse that is so inspirational and encourages our hearts. Thank you for following the call of the Lord on your life and sharing it with us here on FS. :)
Melissa
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What a lovely faith-filled verse that is so inspirational and encourages our hearts. Thank you for following the call of the Lord on your life and sharing it with us here on FS. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
Comment from godlucifer
i think you gotta have respect for yourself before you have respect for the next man. have respect in the lord and yourself and you will be the savior of all sins. your poem was well structure and well written. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
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i think you gotta have respect for yourself before you have respect for the next man. have respect in the lord and yourself and you will be the savior of all sins. your poem was well structure and well written. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
Comment from karenina
I'm blessed to come upon your work, which is beautifully penned and a true testament to the power of faith! I'm so happy that you've been three years and ten months clean and sober. You were, indeed, pulled from the pit ~ but look! First, you gave all glory and faith to the Lord who was always there for you! I wish this poem were available at every twelve-step meeting and rehab center... Rock bottom is only an indication it's time to look UP! You did! Now you are paying it forward by spreading the good news. Awesome! I must dash off and become your fan!
Karenina
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I'm blessed to come upon your work, which is beautifully penned and a true testament to the power of faith! I'm so happy that you've been three years and ten months clean and sober. You were, indeed, pulled from the pit ~ but look! First, you gave all glory and faith to the Lord who was always there for you! I wish this poem were available at every twelve-step meeting and rehab center... Rock bottom is only an indication it's time to look UP! You did! Now you are paying it forward by spreading the good news. Awesome! I must dash off and become your fan!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
Comment from newilk
Lately I've been looking for God again and I don't believe it's just coincidence I came across this and decided to read, this was lovely to read and I'm glad to consider you a part of my journey <3
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Lately I've been looking for God again and I don't believe it's just coincidence I came across this and decided to read, this was lovely to read and I'm glad to consider you a part of my journey <3
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
Comment from Write Right Writer
Fonda...
Congratulations on 3+ years clean and sober. Your poem is a story of God's hope found at the end of your rope. It is indeed a powerful tribute to your faith in God and his faithfulness in your life. Your poem expresses your gratitude and directs attention to the source of your power. Well done. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Blessings...
Curt (WRW)
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Fonda...
Congratulations on 3+ years clean and sober. Your poem is a story of God's hope found at the end of your rope. It is indeed a powerful tribute to your faith in God and his faithfulness in your life. Your poem expresses your gratitude and directs attention to the source of your power. Well done. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Blessings...
Curt (WRW)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022