Breaking Up with You
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Comment from LJbutterfly
Sending wrong signals will cause a break-up every time. Your words adequately deliver the message, and your chosen artwork gives the perfect visual. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Sending wrong signals will cause a break-up every time. Your words adequately deliver the message, and your chosen artwork gives the perfect visual. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Spitfire
While you have the correct syllable count, I can't see much in the way of poetic devices. You do have alliteration with send and signals. Off and wrong is near rhyme. Still, this 'poem' doesn't read smoothly.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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While you have the correct syllable count, I can't see much in the way of poetic devices. You do have alliteration with send and signals. Off and wrong is near rhyme. Still, this 'poem' doesn't read smoothly.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from dragonpoet
Signal crossing is a big problem in some relationships. If a good discussion on the mixed messages happens and the problem can't be solved, then it would be time to go separate way.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Signal crossing is a big problem in some relationships. If a good discussion on the mixed messages happens and the problem can't be solved, then it would be time to go separate way.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest
Joan
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
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You are most kindly welcome.
Joan
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is one of those heartbreaking poems where the love didn't last and the break-up was the only course of action to take. It happens all the time, but that's how we learn to know the right one when it happens. Well done, this is a very expressive short poem. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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This is one of those heartbreaking poems where the love didn't last and the break-up was the only course of action to take. It happens all the time, but that's how we learn to know the right one when it happens. Well done, this is a very expressive short poem. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is heartbreaking to hear of couples splitting up and it happens all too often these days, I wish you luck with the contest, a sad fact of life here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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It is heartbreaking to hear of couples splitting up and it happens all too often these days, I wish you luck with the contest, a sad fact of life here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from karenina
Fifteen words, you did it! It seems so fitting, this theme in brief!
Is it me or do couples tend to call it quits faster these days??
Not working? On to the next!
Smile...
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Fifteen words, you did it! It seems so fitting, this theme in brief!
Is it me or do couples tend to call it quits faster these days??
Not working? On to the next!
Smile...
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for kind review!
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Welcome!
Comment from nomi338
A universal truth is, understanding is the best thing in the world. If you and your mate do not understand each other, you may not be able to successfully communicate. This leads to the kind of problems that lead to breakups.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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A universal truth is, understanding is the best thing in the world. If you and your mate do not understand each other, you may not be able to successfully communicate. This leads to the kind of problems that lead to breakups.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I can see this being said, directly or on a card. Sad for sure but staying the course may be more dreaded, I'm sure. .......................................................................
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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I can see this being said, directly or on a card. Sad for sure but staying the course may be more dreaded, I'm sure. .......................................................................
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Michaela Moore
I love the way that the tone of this poem is perfect for the subject. When it gets to that point, no emotion and short and sweet is what is needed to do the job!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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I love the way that the tone of this poem is perfect for the subject. When it gets to that point, no emotion and short and sweet is what is needed to do the job!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your fifteen words to describe one of the most common and most painful human experiences. Unrequited love is indeed devstating.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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You have made excellent use of your fifteen words to describe one of the most common and most painful human experiences. Unrequited love is indeed devstating.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
