Doing my duty
Going to the voting booth22 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
You did your civic duty casting your vote to express your opinions through the candidate you voted for. You demonstrated your determination by voting prior to going to work. This post is listed as fiction. However, I hope you are actually committed to participating in elections. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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You did your civic duty casting your vote to express your opinions through the candidate you voted for. You demonstrated your determination by voting prior to going to work. This post is listed as fiction. However, I hope you are actually committed to participating in elections. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Raul1
This story meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and unique. I have enjoyed reading it. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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This story meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and unique. I have enjoyed reading it. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well, that was certainly very short indeed. I'm getting almost professional rates for reading it which is nice.
I did find it a little perfunctory and you could have played around with some emotions or trepidation along the way given you had considerably more words to play around with, but it does the job.
Best of luck to you
GMG
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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Hi there,
Well, that was certainly very short indeed. I'm getting almost professional rates for reading it which is nice.
I did find it a little perfunctory and you could have played around with some emotions or trepidation along the way given you had considerably more words to play around with, but it does the job.
Best of luck to you
GMG
Comment Written 22-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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There is a lot that can happen here. Union vote, What's for lunch, Where will we go on vacation.
Comment from Wendy G
Short, clear and interesting. You voted, and felt your vote made a difference, so that made it worthwhile. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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Short, clear and interesting. You voted, and felt your vote made a difference, so that made it worthwhile. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork.
-You described your voting process well.
-You create a good word picture of the voting booth.
-I also check my ballot a second time and feel
proud when it is accepted, too.
-I like your conclusion, and am glad you didn't feel regrets!
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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-Nice artwork.
-You described your voting process well.
-You create a good word picture of the voting booth.
-I also check my ballot a second time and feel
proud when it is accepted, too.
-I like your conclusion, and am glad you didn't feel regrets!
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
I remember having a discussion with a fellow Christian, about voting, he thought it important, but what if you know nothing of the candidates, or their character, or their ambition or plans, what then? He looked a little confused, I didn't want to say, I've been so disillusioned and disappointed in the past! Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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I remember having a discussion with a fellow Christian, about voting, he thought it important, but what if you know nothing of the candidates, or their character, or their ambition or plans, what then? He looked a little confused, I didn't want to say, I've been so disillusioned and disappointed in the past! Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
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Most welcome
Comment from Write Right Writer
Your work is simple and concise, yet complete as a short narrative. Much like a poet committing to a disciplined or limited poetry format, 50-word flash fiction requires concise language and efficient word choices. You have done both. Congratulations.
You present a specific and clearly defined setting (back-covered voting booth at City Hall), definitive plot action (casting ballot, pulling lever), character insight (deep breath, feeling proud), climax (pulling lever), and denouement (heard results, felt no regrets).
Your theme is clear and focused. Your content is strong and the flow of your story is excellent. In summary, your work is very good and I like it. Well done.
My sole recommendation for improvement (thus the 4-star rating) would be related to the lack of conflict and resolution, which as you know are foundational literary elements. The introduction of an antagonist would create such an opportunity.
Even with strict word count limitations, a element of hesitancy, doubt, nervousness, or fear being eclipsed by pulling the lever or absolved by seeing the results could be included without a net increase in word count.
Antagonists and conflict can be implied. As an example, changing the word, "proud" in S-3 (S=sentence) to "unsure" or "fearful" and modifying S-4 (12 words) to something like:
Unsure: "The next day's results were reassuring. I knew that all was well."
Fearful: "The next day's results allayed my fears. I knew all was well."
Please know that my intention is not to rewrite your work. That would be overstepping. Rather, I hope to demonstrate how the critical elements of tension/conflict and resolution can exist by implication, without being overt.
Again, you did a great job of including many of the critical literary elements in your story. Well done! I trust my perspective, input, and suggested recommendations are helpful.
Thanks for sharing your story with us. And keep up the good work.
Blessings...
Curt
Mid-day Wednesday I heard of the results and felt no regrets.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Your work is simple and concise, yet complete as a short narrative. Much like a poet committing to a disciplined or limited poetry format, 50-word flash fiction requires concise language and efficient word choices. You have done both. Congratulations.
You present a specific and clearly defined setting (back-covered voting booth at City Hall), definitive plot action (casting ballot, pulling lever), character insight (deep breath, feeling proud), climax (pulling lever), and denouement (heard results, felt no regrets).
Your theme is clear and focused. Your content is strong and the flow of your story is excellent. In summary, your work is very good and I like it. Well done.
My sole recommendation for improvement (thus the 4-star rating) would be related to the lack of conflict and resolution, which as you know are foundational literary elements. The introduction of an antagonist would create such an opportunity.
Even with strict word count limitations, a element of hesitancy, doubt, nervousness, or fear being eclipsed by pulling the lever or absolved by seeing the results could be included without a net increase in word count.
Antagonists and conflict can be implied. As an example, changing the word, "proud" in S-3 (S=sentence) to "unsure" or "fearful" and modifying S-4 (12 words) to something like:
Unsure: "The next day's results were reassuring. I knew that all was well."
Fearful: "The next day's results allayed my fears. I knew all was well."
Please know that my intention is not to rewrite your work. That would be overstepping. Rather, I hope to demonstrate how the critical elements of tension/conflict and resolution can exist by implication, without being overt.
Again, you did a great job of including many of the critical literary elements in your story. Well done! I trust my perspective, input, and suggested recommendations are helpful.
Thanks for sharing your story with us. And keep up the good work.
Blessings...
Curt
Mid-day Wednesday I heard of the results and felt no regrets.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Thank You!
Comment from jessizero
This was a nice, short story. I think you did a great job with the prompt. I can relate to double-checking the vote and being nervous. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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This was a nice, short story. I think you did a great job with the prompt. I can relate to double-checking the vote and being nervous. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Thank You!
Comment from jp88
Nicely done! Flash fiction is so hard to write, and it's brilliant how much you managed to say in so few words, and how it is a complete story. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Nicely done! Flash fiction is so hard to write, and it's brilliant how much you managed to say in so few words, and how it is a complete story. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Thank You!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Error free, but...
Except for feeling no regrets, it reads like you rose and brushed your teeth.
Having no regrets could mean that you voted for the losing candidate, or it could mean that your side prevailed, either way.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Error free, but...
Except for feeling no regrets, it reads like you rose and brushed your teeth.
Having no regrets could mean that you voted for the losing candidate, or it could mean that your side prevailed, either way.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2022
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Thank You!
