haiku ( bright crescent moon)
A 4-7-6 Haiku for the club challenge15 total reviews
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting poem. The flow is good. The presentation is elegant. The language is simple with a calm undertone.
Thanks for sharing. A very pleasant read.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
An interesting poem. The flow is good. The presentation is elegant. The language is simple with a calm undertone.
Thanks for sharing. A very pleasant read.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for sharing the "armchair view of the stars." I always wished we had an easy way to gaze at the stars but since it's mostly cloudy here we don't get to see them anyway.
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content among nights beauty ~ (night's)
The preposition "among" usually implies between multiple things so maybe even: content among night's beauties ~
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
Thanks for sharing the "armchair view of the stars." I always wished we had an easy way to gaze at the stars but since it's mostly cloudy here we don't get to see them anyway.
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content among nights beauty ~ (night's)
The preposition "among" usually implies between multiple things so maybe even: content among night's beauties ~
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much, I will have to learn to trust myself, I first had content then change it, I think your advice and help are sinking in and I don't realize it yet, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Kahpot, the night sky is just beautiful. Your haiku is filled with good imagery. I especially liked:
armchair view of the stars
(I can see it)
Well done. Great photo choice. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
Hi Kahpot, the night sky is just beautiful. Your haiku is filled with good imagery. I especially liked:
armchair view of the stars
(I can see it)
Well done. Great photo choice. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thank you and yes wouldn't it be great to have that view, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Hi kahpot,
I really like this! Your imagery is spectacular and your satori is really clever. I liked the way you personified the crescent moon in your second line. I can just see myself sitting back in that moon with a martini and enjoying the stars. Lol
Thank for such a wonderful read.
Katiemae Dead
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
Hi kahpot,
I really like this! Your imagery is spectacular and your satori is really clever. I liked the way you personified the crescent moon in your second line. I can just see myself sitting back in that moon with a martini and enjoying the stars. Lol
Thank for such a wonderful read.
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Wow! Thank you very much, I really like the way you say why and what you like about the works you read, it is very encouraging and helpful, as always so very much appreciated****kahpot PS. martini sounds good
Comment from Theodore McDowell
This is a fine haiku. The last line is a great twist to the poem and a very vivid image: armchair view of the stars. I love it. Great entry for the club. Well done.
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
This is a fine haiku. The last line is a great twist to the poem and a very vivid image: armchair view of the stars. I love it. Great entry for the club. Well done.
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot