Interpretations For Consideration
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Unwavering"An Ekphrastic Poetry Collection for NaPoWriMo 2022
14 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
Heavens, another one. Good for you.
You've certainly got the correct numbers of syllables in each line, and now you've got my curiosity up: why is she standing firm against an oncoming storm? Does she have a death wish? Or she must have been tested before and found lacking in bravery. She's a little wisp of a thing. Strong will, though. Muy bueno.
Katharine
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
  |
Heavens, another one. Good for you.
You've certainly got the correct numbers of syllables in each line, and now you've got my curiosity up: why is she standing firm against an oncoming storm? Does she have a death wish? Or she must have been tested before and found lacking in bravery. She's a little wisp of a thing. Strong will, though. Muy bueno.
Katharine
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
-
LOL! The back story is up to you!
Thanks for your great feedback, Katharine :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
I enjoyed this poem. I wasn't aware of Ekphrastic poetry, and I think I like it. I have been there, in the wind with my skirts flying around me, but unlike the lovely picture, mine was always exposing parts I didn't want exposed. It's a romantic idea, and I like the opposition of strength and frailty. Good job!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
|
I enjoyed this poem. I wasn't aware of Ekphrastic poetry, and I think I like it. I have been there, in the wind with my skirts flying around me, but unlike the lovely picture, mine was always exposing parts I didn't want exposed. It's a romantic idea, and I like the opposition of strength and frailty. Good job!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
-
LOL! I've been in that situation too!
Thanks so much for your great feedback - glad you enjoyed the read :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Sarah Tummey
I like how you've crafted an etheree. I can imagine someone standing outdoors in a chiffon dress. Maybe after a special event, she's had an argument with somebody? But please solve a mystery for me. What does ekphrastic mean? I've never heard of it before.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
 |
I like how you've crafted an etheree. I can imagine someone standing outdoors in a chiffon dress. Maybe after a special event, she's had an argument with somebody? But please solve a mystery for me. What does ekphrastic mean? I've never heard of it before.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
-
Hi Sarah :)
Thank you for your feedback.
Ekphrastic poetry is poetry that describes a visual work of art, either a literal description or an interpretation of the artwork. Hope that solves the mystery!
Do you have any suggestions how I can improve on the poem to earn an upgrade on stars?!
Best wishes, Debra :)
-
Yes, thank you. That does solve the mystery, but I'm probably not the best person to tell you how to describe something, as I'm blind, so I was just reading your words without being able to see the picture. I imagine it was a picture of a woman in her 20s or 30s, dressed in chiffon, on a windy evening perhaps? But I don't know.
-
Hi Sarah, I?m sorry, I didn?t realise?
The picture is of the black silhouette of a woman on a white background, I can?t put an age to her but I would guess by her stature, anywhere between 20-40? she is standing upright and poised, the layers of her skirt are transparent and blowing behind her.
Best wishes, Debra :)
-
Well, I think you described her poise very well when you said she was standing firm in the face of the building storm and enough is enough.
-
Thank you, Sarah, have a lovey weekend.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Chiffon and a steadfast, badass, take no prisoners woman. Love it! I am a huge fan of the Etheree poem and I really enjoyed yours. Nicely matched to the picture.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
|
Chiffon and a steadfast, badass, take no prisoners woman. Love it! I am a huge fan of the Etheree poem and I really enjoyed yours. Nicely matched to the picture.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
-
Thank you so much, Pam :)
It was my first time writing and Etheree, I'm so happy you enjoyed it!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
