Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Wishes-in-Waiting
by Debra White

Great entry for the Lune Poetry Contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Pretty presentation. Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Gypsy, for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate it :)
I'm glad you enjoyed reading my poem.
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Val Crisson

Excellent

Nice, I like you sticking with black and white. I am not sure about "parachutes" I know you're going for alliteration, but I "wishes" might be more poetic. Just a thought-its your poem after all.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Val :) I always appreciate your feedback and suggestions. Best wishes, Debra

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great description of dandelion seeds as parachutes! They float around like parachutes and somehow find their way into my yard ! Nicely done line poem!

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Helen :) Glad you enjoyed the read!
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I adore dandelions and I once saw a light made out of dandelion seeds, it was thousands of pounds and evidently dandelion seeds are very hardy, you brought them to life here, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022

Thank you, Dolly :) Glad you enjoyed the read! Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Carolyn Dooley

Excellent

As a child, I would go out into the woods or an open field and pick these things and blow on them. I had not thought about this until I saw the picture. Which is a great likeness. They look like fireworks. Thank you for posting.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022

Thank you of ryour kind feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra

reply by Carolyn Dooley on 08-Apr-2022

You are welcome.

Comment from Liz O'Neill

Exceptional

Do you realize almost every one of your chosen words is meaningful to your message. They are onomatopoetic or create an experience the reader may be unaware of. The alliteration helps with this experience. Your f's & s's have a fluffy air sound. I learned this the other day and I love it. Watch your lips as you pronounce the p's. You see. This is a brilliant poem. I have to give it A+

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022

Hello Liz :) Thank you so much for your lovely comments and generous star rating. I appreciate both - especially your thorough feedback on what you enjoyed.
Have a lovely evening :)
Best wishes, Debra

reply by Liz O'Neill on 08-Apr-2022

***smile***

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

This is so clever, both in careful observation and imaginative interpretation..I'm used to whirling sycamore seeds being compared to helicopters. But dandelion fluffy seeds as parachutes sailing through the air - that never entered my mind..

An exceptional lune, Debra

Good luck in the contest

Stay safe and blessed

Julia

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 Comment Written 08-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Julia, for your lovely feedback :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

You did a good job describing the picture in your poem. I liked your title "Wishes-in-Waiting." Thank you for choosing to share this here, and best of luck to you.

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 Comment Written 08-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022

Thank you for your kind feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)