God And War
6 Sentence 120 Word Spiritual Fiction Contest Entry45 total reviews
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow writer a good day to you. I hope this review finds you well. As a poet/writer it is always interesting to see the different takes on these contest/writing prompts. I think your take is definitely a good one, and you executed on the word usage well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Hello fellow writer a good day to you. I hope this review finds you well. As a poet/writer it is always interesting to see the different takes on these contest/writing prompts. I think your take is definitely a good one, and you executed on the word usage well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from amahra
You did a great job incorporating all of the words necessary for the contest. None of the words used seemed forced. So that was impressive. Anyway, good job and best wishes in the contest.
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You did a great job incorporating all of the words necessary for the contest. None of the words used seemed forced. So that was impressive. Anyway, good job and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from Briony Gavars
This is really well written considering the constraints on this competition. I think that the conditions makes it hard to specific but you've managed to be specific anyway. The use of the color red was also very interesting though I'm not quite sure of the purpose.
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This is really well written considering the constraints on this competition. I think that the conditions makes it hard to specific but you've managed to be specific anyway. The use of the color red was also very interesting though I'm not quite sure of the purpose.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from Jane Jane King
A very powerful piece...the last lines sums up the message so well...God, you are good....something we all need to remember in these trying times...That 12 year old boy has the Faith and wisdom that a lot of adults lack. Well done!
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A very powerful piece...the last lines sums up the message so well...God, you are good....something we all need to remember in these trying times...That 12 year old boy has the Faith and wisdom that a lot of adults lack. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from Ricky1024
"God and War"
This is a six sentence spiritual contest entry.
Rich in Theme and y.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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"God and War"
This is a six sentence spiritual contest entry.
Rich in Theme and y.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from Aubree Lorraine
This contest had so many requirements and restrictions, I commend you for having done it.
This sentence : In the evening, he, his parents and three sisters watched the World News @9pm on television showed the Live War Breaking News: 999,999 people have been saved in three countries in 12 hours today.
It's very awkward, and I'm not sure you should use the @ symbol in a story (but I don't know the official rules on that)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2022
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This contest had so many requirements and restrictions, I commend you for having done it.
This sentence : In the evening, he, his parents and three sisters watched the World News @9pm on television showed the Live War Breaking News: 999,999 people have been saved in three countries in 12 hours today.
It's very awkward, and I'm not sure you should use the @ symbol in a story (but I don't know the official rules on that)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
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Comment from Spitfire
Maybe, I read this wrong but I found it humorous especially with the exact number the boy tells God who seems to be a genie here as He grants the boy one wish. Love the boy's compliment to God based on his parents' and sister's definition. Using the vernacular for his say on the subject is brilliant.
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Maybe, I read this wrong but I found it humorous especially with the exact number the boy tells God who seems to be a genie here as He grants the boy one wish. Love the boy's compliment to God based on his parents' and sister's definition. Using the vernacular for his say on the subject is brilliant.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
Comment from Raul1
A job well done with this story. You have written it excellent for it is much difficult to write it with lots of words and in 120 words. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
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A job well done with this story. You have written it excellent for it is much difficult to write it with lots of words and in 120 words. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Interesting and different - and you showed creativity despite the challenge of needing to conform to a page full of requirements! Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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Interesting and different - and you showed creativity despite the challenge of needing to conform to a page full of requirements! Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
Comment from LJbutterfly
I love this story and wish it were not fiction. I especially like the definitions of the omniscient, omnipotent, and omnipresent God. You met the challenges of the contest well. Best wishes.
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I love this story and wish it were not fiction. I especially like the definitions of the omniscient, omnipotent, and omnipresent God. You met the challenges of the contest well. Best wishes.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
