God On Deen
God whispers to Deen's son Jeen35 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
So many people have lost loved ones during this pandemic. In our country, it is the unvaccinated who ended up in hospitals and dying. It's good that you focus on the happy afterlife as new life is given by God beyond our earthly life. Best wishes in the contest!
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So many people have lost loved ones during this pandemic. In our country, it is the unvaccinated who ended up in hospitals and dying. It's good that you focus on the happy afterlife as new life is given by God beyond our earthly life. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
Comment from Frank Malley
This poem, "God on Deen," has a troubling title that implies we are hearing what God has to say about Deen, whose son prays for him after he dies from Corona virus. The poem not only tells us about the son's communication with God, but it also undertakes to make a political point about vaccination. This duet plays poorly in this recognized poem: I have to think that the poem is being recognized for the sad news it bears about a death, and its critical political attitude. The language of the poem is ordinary, and the miracle story has no novelty or distinctiveness. Simply putting death and an angel and a devoted child into a poem doesn't make it better than good, which is generous.
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This poem, "God on Deen," has a troubling title that implies we are hearing what God has to say about Deen, whose son prays for him after he dies from Corona virus. The poem not only tells us about the son's communication with God, but it also undertakes to make a political point about vaccination. This duet plays poorly in this recognized poem: I have to think that the poem is being recognized for the sad news it bears about a death, and its critical political attitude. The language of the poem is ordinary, and the miracle story has no novelty or distinctiveness. Simply putting death and an angel and a devoted child into a poem doesn't make it better than good, which is generous.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
Comment from jwsteele
Excellent write. The evidence that an afterlife exists is far more overwhelming than the so-called evidence that it does not. "Journey of Souls" Dr. Michael Newton is an excellent book on the subject of reincarnation and the various circumstances associated with rebirth in Samsara. Good job.
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Excellent write. The evidence that an afterlife exists is far more overwhelming than the so-called evidence that it does not. "Journey of Souls" Dr. Michael Newton is an excellent book on the subject of reincarnation and the various circumstances associated with rebirth in Samsara. Good job.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I was wondering if the coronavirus needed to be mentioned in this post. It would have worked just as well without the contentiousness, but each to his own.
Best of luck to you
GMG
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Hi there,
I was wondering if the coronavirus needed to be mentioned in this post. It would have worked just as well without the contentiousness, but each to his own.
Best of luck to you
GMG
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt with us. So many people are dying and some from the vaccination. It doesn't make sense, but I keep reminding myself God is in charge.
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt with us. So many people are dying and some from the vaccination. It doesn't make sense, but I keep reminding myself God is in charge.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Alcreator LItt Dear, I hope this review finds you well. Conveying a message in 39 words is quite the challenge. I think you executed well. Good job and good luck in the contest. Have a great day!
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Hello Alcreator LItt Dear, I hope this review finds you well. Conveying a message in 39 words is quite the challenge. I think you executed well. Good job and good luck in the contest. Have a great day!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
Comment from dmt1967
This poem touched my heart and portrayed the pain a child feels when they loose a parent. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Have a great week.
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This poem touched my heart and portrayed the pain a child feels when they loose a parent. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Have a great week.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Perfect entry for the 39 Word Spiritual Fiction writing prompt and best of wishes in the contest my friend! I enjoyed reading this well written piece;-)
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family!
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Perfect entry for the 39 Word Spiritual Fiction writing prompt and best of wishes in the contest my friend! I enjoyed reading this well written piece;-)
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
Comment from Raul1
This is a very creative story. It is as if God would really do that. Interesting and entertaining story. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
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This is a very creative story. It is as if God would really do that. Interesting and entertaining story. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
Comment from Irish Rain
I like this.
I'm sorry Deen died, but he didn't die
forever, the soul is eternal.
Great entry, I like the way you've
written this,
blessings...
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I like this.
I'm sorry Deen died, but he didn't die
forever, the soul is eternal.
Great entry, I like the way you've
written this,
blessings...
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022