Tyrannical time
A pantoum poem.39 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
hi Roy, you never cease to amaze me. You write one beautiful poem after another and always with me an important message to be us all. Well, the clock ticks and we all know where it's going. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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hi Roy, you never cease to amaze me. You write one beautiful poem after another and always with me an important message to be us all. Well, the clock ticks and we all know where it's going. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Ulla, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from Frank Malley
Mr. Owen employs a demanding poetic form called a pantoum to make and respond to questions about the cruelty of time. The rhymes and structure impose a regularity that was no doubt difficult to achieve but ended up somewhat banal to read. I think that tetrameter is most suitable to lighter themes, and that a tone for solemn themes is more effectively established by less sing-song meters that include pentameter and heptameter. The author executed a complex rhyme scheme correctly, but not compellingly. I persuaded myself to award it a five because of its technical adeptness.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Mr. Owen employs a demanding poetic form called a pantoum to make and respond to questions about the cruelty of time. The rhymes and structure impose a regularity that was no doubt difficult to achieve but ended up somewhat banal to read. I think that tetrameter is most suitable to lighter themes, and that a tone for solemn themes is more effectively established by less sing-song meters that include pentameter and heptameter. The author executed a complex rhyme scheme correctly, but not compellingly. I persuaded myself to award it a five because of its technical adeptness.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks Frank, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
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You're welcome, Roy
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There are plenty of tetrameter and pentameter that have solemn themes, you are very wrong, you really shouldn't leave yourself open.
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Hi Roy. I don't know what you mean by "leaving myself open." I didn't include pentameter as being a lighter meter; in fact I stated that pentameter more effectively establishes solemn tones. Tetrameter tends to produce a marching beat, a clear 4/4 type meter that embodies a song-like character. No big deal, anyway. I tend to write reviews that are too serious for fanstory writers.
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When you use Banal, that is insulting and cruel, It?s the adjectives you use. So would you call ?In Flanders fields? banal? that?s in a tetrametric rondeau? Remember, your speaking of an ?opinion? not a fact, I don?t think your ?serious?, just arrogant.
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It's true good poetry doesn't exist as a fact. It's an art; and as an art, it is subject to opinion. However, I stand by my review. I won't be reviewing any more of your work, but all the best,
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Good onya
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. I can understand reading your poem. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. I can understand reading your poem. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Raul, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from victor 66
Roy, you've written another great poem to add to the volume of your book or books. If I get the gist of your poem, when you die old or young, it is an end... or is it. I suspect that it is not too far away for me. Then I'll find out if it really is the end. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Roy, you've written another great poem to add to the volume of your book or books. If I get the gist of your poem, when you die old or young, it is an end... or is it. I suspect that it is not too far away for me. Then I'll find out if it really is the end. Best wishes.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Victor, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
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Always my pleasure, Roy.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Time is the only constant in life, it never stops, slows or speeds up. It has no feeling for what we want. I don't know how you managed to write this one with the repeating line fitting so perfectly, Roy. They aren't forced or out of place. I enjoyed reading it, my friend. Well done. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Time is the only constant in life, it never stops, slows or speeds up. It has no feeling for what we want. I don't know how you managed to write this one with the repeating line fitting so perfectly, Roy. They aren't forced or out of place. I enjoyed reading it, my friend. Well done. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Sandra, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Roy a merry Monday to you. I hope this finds you well. There is really nothing I can say about your work that I haven't said already, except thank you for introducing another style of poetry to me: Pantoum, I might have to give this one a try. Have a great day!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Hello Roy a merry Monday to you. I hope this finds you well. There is really nothing I can say about your work that I haven't said already, except thank you for introducing another style of poetry to me: Pantoum, I might have to give this one a try. Have a great day!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, although I seldom adhere to specific writing forms, this write is but another example of this writer's prolific ability, beautifully and seamlessly executed...
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In my opinion, although I seldom adhere to specific writing forms, this write is but another example of this writer's prolific ability, beautifully and seamlessly executed...
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Eve, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
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You are very welcome, Roy, and may you and yours be blessed as well...Eve
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Thank you Eve
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You're welcome, Roy...Eve
Comment from June Sargent
This tyrant casts its shadow far and wide causing fear and anxiety that it will catch up with us sooner, rather than later. As a result, people tend to live for today, because tomorrow we may die. How sad. The results are bad decisions based on fear of dying rather than joy of living.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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This tyrant casts its shadow far and wide causing fear and anxiety that it will catch up with us sooner, rather than later. As a result, people tend to live for today, because tomorrow we may die. How sad. The results are bad decisions based on fear of dying rather than joy of living.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much June, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Wow AWESOME POEM Roy, as usual my friend! Your lovely words flow smoothly throughout the well written piece! I enjoyed this poem a lot;-)
Thank you for sharing this piece with us and may God bless you!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Wow AWESOME POEM Roy, as usual my friend! Your lovely words flow smoothly throughout the well written piece! I enjoyed this poem a lot;-)
Thank you for sharing this piece with us and may God bless you!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Melodie, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This pantoum is excellent! You ask deep and probing questions of time and I do not know the answers but it is fun to think about and ponder. This poetry format appears difficult but you make it look easy. I like the way it returns to the same point in the last stanza.
Well written and inspiring to behold. Thank you for asking the questions that need to be asked.
Take care,
Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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This pantoum is excellent! You ask deep and probing questions of time and I do not know the answers but it is fun to think about and ponder. This poetry format appears difficult but you make it look easy. I like the way it returns to the same point in the last stanza.
Well written and inspiring to behold. Thank you for asking the questions that need to be asked.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Jesse, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
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You're welcome, Roy.
Have a nice evening,
Jesse
