Revenge
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Comment from BethShelby
I'm glad you allowed you characters to rescue Jaz and the rest of the girls but getting them off the Island leaves two of the main character still there and unconscious. When one thing goes right something else goes wrong. I guess that is what makes thrillers sell.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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I'm glad you allowed you characters to rescue Jaz and the rest of the girls but getting them off the Island leaves two of the main character still there and unconscious. When one thing goes right something else goes wrong. I guess that is what makes thrillers sell.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Hello, Beth... Can you believe the story is about to wrap. the ending is written in three parts - Chap 41 thru 43. I have posted the first part and the following two will be tomorrow. Fingers crossed hoping everyone will enjoy the finish. Thanks for all your support.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Vito got them all. This is a
Low point of the book. It seems that Vito outsmart the FBI. How did they know about the tunnel and boat waiting there?
I hope Garth will come soon to rescue the girls.
Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Vito got them all. This is a
Low point of the book. It seems that Vito outsmart the FBI. How did they know about the tunnel and boat waiting there?
I hope Garth will come soon to rescue the girls.
Well done.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Vito and Charles don't know about the tunnel and boat. Charles entered through the normal boat dock with Allie and Vito drove to the house and brought Sam through the front door. Hopefully the rescue is going to happen before things really go south.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's all happening! Now, Max has to get Sam and find Allie! Vito is going to go ape when he finds the girls and Jaz have escaped, that will be a fun scene. Love this chapter, Carol. We are nearly at the end, I can see it coming. Well done, my dear friend. Bring on the next! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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It's all happening! Now, Max has to get Sam and find Allie! Vito is going to go ape when he finds the girls and Jaz have escaped, that will be a fun scene. Love this chapter, Carol. We are nearly at the end, I can see it coming. Well done, my dear friend. Bring on the next! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Thank you for always being in my cheering section. I am writing as we speak and I think tomorrow might be the last chapter. Not sure it will take one or two. Thank you as always. I am looking forward to getting things ready so I can publish them. that's my only goal for the new year. Hugs to you as always...Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Great job. I really like it. Help is on the way.
Max offered a few instructions. "Watch out for the trap door and gather close. (pretty sure a comma is needed after 'instructions')
I don't know what they are planning, but it will not be good. (I'd write 'they're' and 'it'll' I feel under the circumstances he'd be speaking quickly.)
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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Great job. I really like it. Help is on the way.
Max offered a few instructions. "Watch out for the trap door and gather close. (pretty sure a comma is needed after 'instructions')
I don't know what they are planning, but it will not be good. (I'd write 'they're' and 'it'll' I feel under the circumstances he'd be speaking quickly.)
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Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Hello, Barbara... Can you believe the story is about to wrap. the ending is written in three parts - Chap 41 thru 43. I have posted the first part and the following two will be tomorrow. Fingers crossed hoping everyone will enjoy the finish. Thanks for all your support.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Excruciating. As always, you leave us tantalized. Masterful pacing and narration--vivid imagery and great dialog.
The two women stepped into the hall, listened, and moved forward a few steps. Max pulled the panel shut behind him. "No sense showing anyone how she escaped. They'll find [it=>OUT?] soon enough."
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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Excruciating. As always, you leave us tantalized. Masterful pacing and narration--vivid imagery and great dialog.
The two women stepped into the hall, listened, and moved forward a few steps. Max pulled the panel shut behind him. "No sense showing anyone how she escaped. They'll find [it=>OUT?] soon enough."
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Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Hello, Liz... Can you believe the story is about to wrap. the ending is written in three parts - Chap 41 thru 43. I have posted the first part and the following two will be tomorrow. You will be jumping for joy not to see another chapter begging you to read. Fingers crossed hoping everyone will enjoy the finish. Thanks for all your support.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from lancellot
Good chapter. Like most rescue plans there is always things that happen, that are unexpected and it allows the tension and the story to continue towards that needed confrontation with added life and death stakes.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Good chapter. Like most rescue plans there is always things that happen, that are unexpected and it allows the tension and the story to continue towards that needed confrontation with added life and death stakes.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Oh, you've made my day Lance. Thank you so much. When it gets down to the end and the action scenes, I always get nervous, wondering if others can sense the tension I want them to feel. You were my first post, and I am thrilled by your positivity. You are such an excellent writer when you lead a reader forward so I appreciate all you comments. Thank you!