Despised
a free verse19 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
A surprise ending--but it shouldn't be. I find myself downgrading my achievements sometimes. But then I remember we learn from our mistakes and concentrate on the lesson. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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A surprise ending--but it shouldn't be. I find myself downgrading my achievements sometimes. But then I remember we learn from our mistakes and concentrate on the lesson. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Shari.
Comment from judiverse
This is stunning. Probably a lot of people would say the same things about themselves. The narrator focuses on the things he hates most about this person--his lies and back-stabbing are among the short-comings. Then we find out he is thinking about himself. Why do we keep doing those things if we hate ourselves for them. Wonderful presentation, excellent word choices. Best of luck in the free verse contest. judi
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This is stunning. Probably a lot of people would say the same things about themselves. The narrator focuses on the things he hates most about this person--his lies and back-stabbing are among the short-comings. Then we find out he is thinking about himself. Why do we keep doing those things if we hate ourselves for them. Wonderful presentation, excellent word choices. Best of luck in the free verse contest. judi
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Judi. I appreciate your exceptional and thorough review. Bill
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You're welcome. This reveals just what a lot of people feel about themselves. judi
Comment from Tina Crute
"which stands where the actual person...lies." What a moving soliloquy and self- analysis. Hollow Man is worth reading more than once to get the full effect. The skin color used in the presentation adds to the full effect of analyzing what is truly under one's skin. Great job!
Tina
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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"which stands where the actual person...lies." What a moving soliloquy and self- analysis. Hollow Man is worth reading more than once to get the full effect. The skin color used in the presentation adds to the full effect of analyzing what is truly under one's skin. Great job!
Tina
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Tina
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Welcome, Bill, much enjoyed!
Tina
Comment from nomi338
There is no person more qualified to criticize me than me. Only I know all my shortcomings. I alone know about the shortcuts taken, the lies and deceptions. While I hate the bad things I have done, I do not hate me, for I fully realize that I am not perfect, never have been and it is a pretty sure bet that I never will be.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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There is no person more qualified to criticize me than me. Only I know all my shortcomings. I alone know about the shortcuts taken, the lies and deceptions. While I hate the bad things I have done, I do not hate me, for I fully realize that I am not perfect, never have been and it is a pretty sure bet that I never will be.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thanks, nomi, for giving this a look.
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting! It seems the narrator has a very strong conscience. However, to be at such odds with one's self could make it hard to live in peace. He needs the Joy of Christ.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Interesting! It seems the narrator has a very strong conscience. However, to be at such odds with one's self could make it hard to live in peace. He needs the Joy of Christ.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you, lyenochka, for the great review.
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
Bill - OUCH! This poem is a real zinger and packs a lot of punch that most of us can relate to. Sometimes we are our own worst enemies. Stay well - Jerry
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Bill - OUCH! This poem is a real zinger and packs a lot of punch that most of us can relate to. Sometimes we are our own worst enemies. Stay well - Jerry
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Jerry.
Comment from robyn corum
Billy-buddy,
This is a passionate and powerful poem - which I did NOT like. Sorry. I often think of the fact that you've been here a long time but I only started following recently. Hugs-
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Billy-buddy,
This is a passionate and powerful poem - which I did NOT like. Sorry. I often think of the fact that you've been here a long time but I only started following recently. Hugs-
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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This is not autobiographical. It was inspired by this picture of Kevin Bacon in the film Hollow Man.
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Thank you
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Be easy on yourself. We are not perfect and we should all be glad that we are healthy and can move around at our age. This is a self-depreciatingly funny.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Be easy on yourself. We are not perfect and we should all be glad that we are healthy and can move around at our age. This is a self-depreciatingly funny.
Well done.
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Lisa. Not autobiographical. : )
Comment from royowen
It's funny how scripture reminds us that if we hate ourselves, it's impossible to love others, but then I do know people who are so good to others, but put themselves down, beautifully written Bill, well done, (hope you love yourself, or at least care) well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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It's funny how scripture reminds us that if we hate ourselves, it's impossible to love others, but then I do know people who are so good to others, but put themselves down, beautifully written Bill, well done, (hope you love yourself, or at least care) well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Roy. I need to note that this is not autobiographical.
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Of course not.