Haiku (I Woke to a World)
Haiku53 total reviews
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Well done and a nice nostalgic flashback to the origin of your writing career. The image is beautiful and all the more amazing since it was your first take on poetry. Have a great Christmas
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Well done and a nice nostalgic flashback to the origin of your writing career. The image is beautiful and all the more amazing since it was your first take on poetry. Have a great Christmas
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hi Tim. Thanks so very much!!
Melissa
Comment from Terry Broxson
A beautiful haiku for this contest, good luck. The picture is wonderful and your imagery in line 2 and 3 are just right on the money. I think it takes real talent to do this so well with so few words. Good work.
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A beautiful haiku for this contest, good luck. The picture is wonderful and your imagery in line 2 and 3 are just right on the money. I think it takes real talent to do this so well with so few words. Good work.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hi Terry. Thank you so very much for your lovely comments.
Melissa
Comment from Janet Foor
You paint an amazing picture with this beautiful haiku.
The first two lines are skillfully connected snd the satori line add to the beauty.
Blessings
Janet
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You paint an amazing picture with this beautiful haiku.
The first two lines are skillfully connected snd the satori line add to the beauty.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hi Janet. Thank you for your insight and lovely comments!!
Melissa
Comment from Ben Colder
Interesting. Every morning, as I awake to the meaning of this poem, I think of today as the first day of the rest of my life. Thanks for sharing. Hope you win the contest.
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Interesting. Every morning, as I awake to the meaning of this poem, I think of today as the first day of the rest of my life. Thanks for sharing. Hope you win the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hello Ben. Thank you so very much! I am jealous that you get to wake up to a misty morning and enjoy that unique experience and ambiance!!
Melissa
Comment from RGstar
Nicely penned. All the emotions of the moment woven in but a few lines.
Nature seen in its own light. The form well represented.
My best wishes.
RGstar
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Nicely penned. All the emotions of the moment woven in but a few lines.
Nature seen in its own light. The form well represented.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hello RG. Thanks so much for your insight and comments on this Haiku. Short verses make me dig deep to find just the right depth. :)
Melissa
Comment from jenintorre
What a lovely picture you paint with your words. I enjoyed reading this lovely Haiku and the beautiful artwork that you have chosen to accompany it. Best wishes. Jen.
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What a lovely picture you paint with your words. I enjoyed reading this lovely Haiku and the beautiful artwork that you have chosen to accompany it. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hi there Jen! Thank you for your lovely comments and review.
Melissa
Comment from SimianSavant
Very beautiful use of words, with a well matched image. I think your writing nicely captures the feelings of a sunrise near the ocean, or superimposes it elsewhere. Well done!
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Very beautiful use of words, with a well matched image. I think your writing nicely captures the feelings of a sunrise near the ocean, or superimposes it elsewhere. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hello Harambe... thanks so much for your lovely review!
Melissa
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The image is gorgeous; kind of foggy, misty scenery. Like your poem because it mentions that after we pass, we will see the sunset again, if we go to heaven.
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The image is gorgeous; kind of foggy, misty scenery. Like your poem because it mentions that after we pass, we will see the sunset again, if we go to heaven.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hi there Rosemary! Thanks for your words of insight and understanding.!!
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is so well crafted. I use the word "crafted" a lot with you because that is what you do. I like the simplicity and the alliteration in the first line. But I like even better the personification of your world adrift in the second line. I also like the juxtaposition of the mist and the liquid sky.
It's got it all. It used to be that haikus did not use a lot of imagery and poetic devices, but I do not think that is the case anymore. This is just lovely the way that it is written.
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This is so well crafted. I use the word "crafted" a lot with you because that is what you do. I like the simplicity and the alliteration in the first line. But I like even better the personification of your world adrift in the second line. I also like the juxtaposition of the mist and the liquid sky.
It's got it all. It used to be that haikus did not use a lot of imagery and poetic devices, but I do not think that is the case anymore. This is just lovely the way that it is written.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Hello Debbie. Thank you, dear friend, for your wonderfully encouraging comments and the insightful points you mention. I love writing poetry and hope to improve with more depth in my work... even the short ones... If only I had more time where I wasn't distracted!!! But, I am grateful for what I have. Thank you so much! Your thoughts are deeply appreciated.
Fondly, Melissa
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very nice haiku. You mastered the art of the form saying a lot with only a few words. It conveys the mood, the feeling very well. I like the last words the best.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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very nice haiku. You mastered the art of the form saying a lot with only a few words. It conveys the mood, the feeling very well. I like the last words the best.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you Jake. I appreciate your thoughts in this review. :)
Melissa
