Football - A Novel
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Comment from Jay Squires
I was wondering if I missed something. I don't remember hearing about her lump. And how did Angie hear about it? I'm just a little confused.
Jeremy cuddled beside Coach. "Please, Mom, please." [Cuddled or huddled? Cuddling implies an object cuddled.]
I'm really happy to hear your broken wrist is healing well.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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I was wondering if I missed something. I don't remember hearing about her lump. And how did Angie hear about it? I'm just a little confused.
Jeremy cuddled beside Coach. "Please, Mom, please." [Cuddled or huddled? Cuddling implies an object cuddled.]
I'm really happy to hear your broken wrist is healing well.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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This is the first introduction of the lump. I assumed that females would discuss it, so didn't think I needed to explain that. Females talk and their friends. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, so far so good. Another chapter in and everything is going according to your plan. You characters are behaving as made and expected. The scenes are well written and edited. Kate's life is going as predicted. Gabe is true to from and acts according the world rules.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Hmm, so far so good. Another chapter in and everything is going according to your plan. You characters are behaving as made and expected. The scenes are well written and edited. Kate's life is going as predicted. Gabe is true to from and acts according the world rules.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
And they are still in love and dancing around what people think and measure. They better get together soon and stop this non-sense. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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And they are still in love and dancing around what people think and measure. They better get together soon and stop this non-sense. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
Oh no, I see that this may be headed towards breast cancer which will add a whole new dimension to whether she can care for her boys, and maintain custody. Interesting turn of events. Well written. Hope the rehab helps your wrist quickly for you. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Oh no, I see that this may be headed towards breast cancer which will add a whole new dimension to whether she can care for her boys, and maintain custody. Interesting turn of events. Well written. Hope the rehab helps your wrist quickly for you. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
A good chapter in which Gabriel gets a chance to play the knight in shining armour. The foreshadowing of Katherine's tumour and the possible consequences of her unwillingness to share the information with Gabriel warns of life issues still to come.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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A good chapter in which Gabriel gets a chance to play the knight in shining armour. The foreshadowing of Katherine's tumour and the possible consequences of her unwillingness to share the information with Gabriel warns of life issues still to come.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
A lovely chapter. Nicely progressing to whatever. I still wait impatiently each week for another chapter from you. I love my three favourites, possibly four favourite writers. No spags.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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A lovely chapter. Nicely progressing to whatever. I still wait impatiently each week for another chapter from you. I love my three favourites, possibly four favourite writers. No spags.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
I'm wondering if this Ivory fellow is a set up by hard working miscreants hoping to catch Katherine out as some sort of floozie, but I don't think they ate by the sounds of things, not if I am reading this correctly. Beautifully written, blessings, Roy
Typo : Thursday(,) as Katherine 2 : don't touch me again(,) 3: when (are) you going to tell him...
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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I'm wondering if this Ivory fellow is a set up by hard working miscreants hoping to catch Katherine out as some sort of floozie, but I don't think they ate by the sounds of things, not if I am reading this correctly. Beautifully written, blessings, Roy
Typo : Thursday(,) as Katherine 2 : don't touch me again(,) 3: when (are) you going to tell him...
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the catches. I added Thursday as I posted and forgot the comma.
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I have made the corrections. Thank you.
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Well done
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Well done,
Comment from Judy Lawless
I like the flow of this chapter, Barbara. The connection between Katherine and Gabriel is coming together nicely. I don't think I like Milton Ivory. He's rather pushy and doesn't take no for an answer. Makes me wonder if he has ulterior motives. Well done.
One thing, I'm a little confused about who's driving where. You have Gab confirming with Katherine that she's driving, presumably to the football game? But then he confirms the time for the track meet and offers to pick up her boys in her car. Did I miss something?
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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I like the flow of this chapter, Barbara. The connection between Katherine and Gabriel is coming together nicely. I don't think I like Milton Ivory. He's rather pushy and doesn't take no for an answer. Makes me wonder if he has ulterior motives. Well done.
One thing, I'm a little confused about who's driving where. You have Gab confirming with Katherine that she's driving, presumably to the football game? But then he confirms the time for the track meet and offers to pick up her boys in her car. Did I miss something?
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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She's driving to the football game. Then her cross country meet is the next day and he's driving to it. Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you. Katherine drove to the football and then Gabe's going to drive to the cross country meet the next day.
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Ah, okay. I didn?t catch that they were on different days.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Thanks for sharing another chapter in your story. I am glad that the therapy is helping your fingers, and trust that your wrist will soon return to normal.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thanks for sharing another chapter in your story. I am glad that the therapy is helping your fingers, and trust that your wrist will soon return to normal.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and well wishes.
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You are welcome
Comment from Begin Again
Sorry that your wrist is acting up, Barbara. I hope the therapy helps you recover faster. Between my head spinning from five girls and my keyboard typing random letters when it feels like it (most of the time), I don't know which way is up... except I must buy a new keyboard fast.
Loved the touchy-feely emotions between Gabriel and Katherine. I guess I am looking for the warm side of life in stories since there's not much in my life... I love the story and its tender moments. I keep waiting for the other shoe to drop. Ugh!
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Sorry that your wrist is acting up, Barbara. I hope the therapy helps you recover faster. Between my head spinning from five girls and my keyboard typing random letters when it feels like it (most of the time), I don't know which way is up... except I must buy a new keyboard fast.
Loved the touchy-feely emotions between Gabriel and Katherine. I guess I am looking for the warm side of life in stories since there's not much in my life... I love the story and its tender moments. I keep waiting for the other shoe to drop. Ugh!
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.