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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from amahra
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So, Gabriel thinks he's got a little competition. I think this is a pleasant addition to the story. It really spices it to the next level. This was a good chapter. I can feel the wanting between them.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Another fine chapter as always, this one is extra cute with the jealousy showing. Although, jealousy isn't good, if a person didn't get a little jealous, they don't care enough. Thanks for sharing. I'm glad your healing, slowly but surely!

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
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I love that you have introduced a possible contender for Katherine's affection. Even though it is clear that she prefers Gabriel, it does not hurt to make him aware that nothing is guaranteed. He must continue working to win over Katherine and convince her that he is her guy. I absolutely love the direction this story is going in.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement.
reply by nomi338 on 02-Nov-2021
    Yu are most welcome. I think also that it is important for Katherine to receive attention from another man in order to determine if her feelings for Gabriel are more than gratitude or mere friendship.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-A lovely rose to go with
the chapter, barbara.
-This was a good one showing
the steps Gabe and Katherine
are taking in their relationship.
-The beginning was good with the
added mystery of who this gentleman was,
and Gabe's feelings and reactions to it.
-Interesting that there was a misinterpretation
by Gabe, and Katherine had felt the same
way when the woman had kissed him.
-It was resolved and the agreed about
the nature of their relationship, which
was smart on their parts.
-I liked the ending with the
inclusion of Gabe when the
attorney comes to see his
relationship with the boys.
-I'm glad you are doing better, too!

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Pam (respa) on 01-Nov-2021
    You are welcome.
Comment from Ben Colder
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You are doing a good job being a southpaw. Give it time, it will heal. Our body normally heals itself. Enjoying your story. These two are on the edge of discovery. LOL. Steam rising.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
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Everything seems to be in keeping with the rules and norms established within the world your characters inhabit. Very short chapter. 37 days??

notes:

Her eyes met Gabriel's, as she said, "Good morning. Is there [a] problem?"

- missing word

"I'll get my own coffee."

- this statement is odd.

"I know. The only options I see are to {stopping} seeing each other or give in to them."

- stop

PS:"I know. The only options I see are to stopping seeing each other or give in to them." She stared at him. "I don't want to do that either, so I guess we ignore them."

I would rewrite this line. It sounds incredibly selfish. No normal man would stay with her after hearing that.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
    They would if they cared about the larger picture and not about their own selfish desires. There is much more to relationships than sex. Katherine needs to instill moral values in her children. I have seen results the of mothers not being good role models. Children do suffer. Thank you for the kind review. I have made the corrections.
Comment from Jay Squires
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First of all, it's good to hear about the improvement in your wrist. The increased time between icings sounds encouraging.

As usual, you've written a warm and engaging chapter. It's good to see Gabriel's self-control in face of his jealousy and the Katherine thinks it's cute. I'm anxious, as I'm sure all your readers are, to have their romance consummated.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. The romance will NOT be consummated until after marriage.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Hi Barbara, so sorry to hear about your wrist, I know recovery is a lenghty process. I had problems with my left leg and I did physio in Canada didn't help, I got lucky during the summer to get to some hot springs and fo phyisio and it healed:) I like how you stroy gets into the normalcy of a family that is building up from the ashesh because both Katherine and Gabe had some shadow to carry on their shoulders. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AJ McCall
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Aww! This was so sweet... but SHORT! I was expecting it to be a little longer but, it's fine. Your wrist isn't back to itself yet, and I will respect that, LOL. At first, I thought Katherine was going on a date; I was soooo worried. Then, when she said she declined his offer, I was RELIVED! Thank God, lol. And I didn't spot any typos! All good! Can't wait til the next chapter!

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by AJ McCall on 01-Nov-2021
    You're welcome!
Comment from Wendy G
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Ah, so Gabriel is a little jealous?! But who is the lawyer? Not anyone to do with her ex in-laws I trust. That would be quite deceitful of him. Each chapter is interesting. I hope your wrist continues to improve steadily. Thank you for keeping your story going for us. We enjoy it.
Wendy

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.