Revenge
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL! I got my answer from the last chapter in this one! Brilliant, but things are really heating up. Sam played her game really well, now Vito/ James will have to go after her! LOL, I thought you wrote this part so well, Carol. Well done my friend. :)) love and hugs. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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LOL! I got my answer from the last chapter in this one! Brilliant, but things are really heating up. Sam played her game really well, now Vito/ James will have to go after her! LOL, I thought you wrote this part so well, Carol. Well done my friend. :)) love and hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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I so hate that it will take so many chapters to really show what's happening. i want to write and post it all, but that certainly can't happen. LOL Hope all is well with you. I need to find time to answer back all the reviews. I apologize that it's taking me so long, but writing makes me feel in charge... something I need right now.
Love ya, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Humm an interesting take. I am wondering how this fits into the search for Jasmine and the problems with the FBI. Also previously mentioned Samatha vs Sam.
Marian leaned against his chest and sighed, (sighed is not a speech tag, period needed after it.)
Marian wiggled her fingers at Samantha and smiled, "Goodbye." (smiled is not a speech tag, period needed after it.)
Bewildered by their guest's abrupt exit, Cheryl mumbled, "Sorry, sir, Lady Marian says she wants to delay today's filming."
"Whatever!" With no further comment, he walked into the garden, wondering how he'd lost the game twice in one day. (Two peoples' dialogue new paragraph for each)
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Humm an interesting take. I am wondering how this fits into the search for Jasmine and the problems with the FBI. Also previously mentioned Samatha vs Sam.
Marian leaned against his chest and sighed, (sighed is not a speech tag, period needed after it.)
Marian wiggled her fingers at Samantha and smiled, "Goodbye." (smiled is not a speech tag, period needed after it.)
Bewildered by their guest's abrupt exit, Cheryl mumbled, "Sorry, sir, Lady Marian says she wants to delay today's filming."
"Whatever!" With no further comment, he walked into the garden, wondering how he'd lost the game twice in one day. (Two peoples' dialogue new paragraph for each)
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I find my mind walks easier through a dark fictional murder mystery than it can through reality at the moment. Please know that without your support and constant encouragement, I doubt that I could exist. The only glimmer of hope I find is with you and others like you on this site. I am so appreciative of your time and effort to review my story and I apologize for always being behind with my thank yous. please know that I read each and everyone when they arrive though I lag far behind in the thank you department.
Your support is my silver lining. Thank you! Carol
Comment from BethShelby
You creative imaginative amazes me. I kind of figured those women were working together but I don't know where their game leading. I don't know if they know James is really Vito. It seems a lot of people have an alternate identity, and they are all actors pretending to be someone they are not.
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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You creative imaginative amazes me. I kind of figured those women were working together but I don't know where their game leading. I don't know if they know James is really Vito. It seems a lot of people have an alternate identity, and they are all actors pretending to be someone they are not.
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Samantha and Marian have known each other since childhood (thirty years to be exact). Scarlett Marian Carrington is well aware that James is Vito Moretti. You'll learn more about that situation soon.
Vito thinks he can outsmart everyone and be involved in bad things, but no one will ever suspect the reputable and rich Carrington family. Besides, he believes he has a "lucky wild card" in his pocket
Yes, several of the characters are pretending to be someone else, believing that everyone will be on board with it. Give our team a chance to weed it out.
Thanks so much...Carol
