Revenge
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Revenge - Chap 9"Evil stalks the dynamic crime team
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Comment from Mary Shifman
When I start a book, and I really like it, I've been know to stay up all night to finished it. This is that kind of book and I'm finding it a tad frustrating to stop just when the going is getting good. This is a great chapter and it contains enough mystery to keep a reader coming back. Great story.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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When I start a book, and I really like it, I've been know to stay up all night to finished it. This is that kind of book and I'm finding it a tad frustrating to stop just when the going is getting good. This is a great chapter and it contains enough mystery to keep a reader coming back. Great story.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest into the plot.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's horrible that these poor girls are being murdered just because Vito wants to upset Allie. But, I'm sure he's get his comeuppence at the end. I hope so, anyway!! You've copied and pasted this over twice, Carol, and it's joined as if it's one story. You can easily delete the bottom half. I did that three time, and to this day I don't know how it happened. Lol Wonderful chapter my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2021
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It's horrible that these poor girls are being murdered just because Vito wants to upset Allie. But, I'm sure he's get his comeuppence at the end. I hope so, anyway!! You've copied and pasted this over twice, Carol, and it's joined as if it's one story. You can easily delete the bottom half. I did that three time, and to this day I don't know how it happened. Lol Wonderful chapter my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2021
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Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Six more days and I hope a decision is made. Love you, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another excellent chapter, Carol. I like the strained interaction between the Sherriff and Garth, and the light-hearted addition of pastry shopping. However, it seems that you've repeated some parts. For instance, your opening paragraph is repeated further down, and much of what you wrote from "crossing the crime tape,,," is repeated. This probably happened in editing and rearranging. Hope you're doing okay. Hugs.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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This is another excellent chapter, Carol. I like the strained interaction between the Sherriff and Garth, and the light-hearted addition of pastry shopping. However, it seems that you've repeated some parts. For instance, your opening paragraph is repeated further down, and much of what you wrote from "crossing the crime tape,,," is repeated. This probably happened in editing and rearranging. Hope you're doing okay. Hugs.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest. It's tough to be able to read, review, answer, and write...but I am trying to do my best. Thank you for understanding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
There appears to be several paragraphs repeated on this page dear Carol, I've done that myself before now Carol. An excellent post my friend there seems to be someone intent on throwing the powers that be, to mistake these victims as Jasmine, but of course Garth wasn't letting on to the self satisfied sherif that. Beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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There appears to be several paragraphs repeated on this page dear Carol, I've done that myself before now Carol. An excellent post my friend there seems to be someone intent on throwing the powers that be, to mistake these victims as Jasmine, but of course Garth wasn't letting on to the self satisfied sherif that. Beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest. It's tough to be able to read, review, answer, and write...but I am trying to do my best. Thank you for understanding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol. I was beginning to wonder where you were, but here you are with a new chapter and that is good, Now the story is moving along at a nice pace. it was a bit long if you don't mind me saying. How many more killings are we gong to see? I love the story.Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2021
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Hi Carol. I was beginning to wonder where you were, but here you are with a new chapter and that is good, Now the story is moving along at a nice pace. it was a bit long if you don't mind me saying. How many more killings are we gong to see? I love the story.Ulla:)))
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2021
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It's about to get far more interesting than just killing women to torment Allie...I believe there will be on more - a man this time. Each time wondering if its her sister, but then his plot gets more sinister.
Things are rough right now and I am trying to keep up with the posts, reviews, etc. but I am not doing a good job. I have to write around 3 or 4 am to claim any time for myself. I try to remain around 1200 words - Bob Mastery's suggestion -- but sometimes it runs over when I need to stop at a certain point.
Thank you so much for your thoughts, the review, and your kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
The diabolical killer prolongs the torture of Allie. How many more will he kill before he kills the real Jaz, I wonder. Brilliant.
crueler=>CRULLER with the raspberry filling
Crossing the crime tape was [more accessible=>sugg EASIER] than Garth expected. OR
The crime scene was more accessible than Garth had expected.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2021
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The diabolical killer prolongs the torture of Allie. How many more will he kill before he kills the real Jaz, I wonder. Brilliant.
crueler=>CRULLER with the raspberry filling
Crossing the crime tape was [more accessible=>sugg EASIER] than Garth expected. OR
The crime scene was more accessible than Garth had expected.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2021
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Thanks Liz... I am having difficulties with my software. I fix things and then it automatically changes it again. Not to mention it gives one post to someone and another person gets the revised one with other things wrong. I can't exactly figure it out yet.
Appreciate the thoughts, the review and the help... though somewhere those changes were already made.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
You've slowed up on post a little, so I'm hoping you've just been taking some time out for other things you can enjoy. I hadn't heard anything, but I hope Matt's next movie is getting on track after the last setback. Any way, just hoping everything is going well with you and yours. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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You've slowed up on post a little, so I'm hoping you've just been taking some time out for other things you can enjoy. I hadn't heard anything, but I hope Matt's next movie is getting on track after the last setback. Any way, just hoping everything is going well with you and yours. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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I wish I could say it's been good, but unfortunately, it just seems to get worse and more complicated. Still looking for that light at the end of the tunnel.
Hugs, Carol
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I hope you find that light at the end of the tunnel soon! Squeezzzzze, Ric
Comment from Jasmine Girl
You need to update it very quickly. You have paste the following section twice:
Crossing the crime tape was more accessible than Garth expected.
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Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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You need to update it very quickly. You have paste the following section twice:
Crossing the crime tape was more accessible than Garth expected.
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Well done.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks for pointing that out to me, Lisa. Don't know how I managed it, but I did. My mind is gone I guess. Appreciate the help and the review.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Gert sherwood
Revenge - Chap 9
Begin Again,
let me tell you without any doubt; you know how to make your writing as a nice way to have us readers feel that we can see what is going like it was actually taking place.
Gert
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Revenge - Chap 9
Begin Again,
let me tell you without any doubt; you know how to make your writing as a nice way to have us readers feel that we can see what is going like it was actually taking place.
Gert
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest into the plot.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I was wondering about you. When I don't see your posts, I worry. I can't wait to get information about this sheriff. Anybody who doesn't like Garth is no friend of mine. I like this story, a lot.
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2021
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I was wondering about you. When I don't see your posts, I worry. I can't wait to get information about this sheriff. Anybody who doesn't like Garth is no friend of mine. I like this story, a lot.
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2021
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Thanks Barbara... things are tough at the moment, but I did manage to get a few hours to myself this morning. I feel so much better when I can write and even better when you enjoy it. Thanks so much!
Hugs, Carol