Flurry from a Field
Crows take flight -43 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Flurry from a Field
by Senyai
Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poem contest. I love the Wheatfield with Crows by Van Gogh'. Great imagery and alliteration.
For short 5/7/5s and haiku I always connect lines grammatically to improve the flow.
What I mean is something like this....
flurry from a field
as murder of crows takes flight --
damp earth smells of musk
Good luck!!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Flurry from a Field
by Senyai
Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poem contest. I love the Wheatfield with Crows by Van Gogh'. Great imagery and alliteration.
For short 5/7/5s and haiku I always connect lines grammatically to improve the flow.
What I mean is something like this....
flurry from a field
as murder of crows takes flight --
damp earth smells of musk
Good luck!!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi Gypsy,
Oh, thank you so much for your detailed review. I appreciate your great suggestions and will consider an edit. Yes, I think I need to start joining the Haiku Club to perfect my poems :-)
I have always loved Van Gogh's paintings and this is one of my favorites. So full of emotion.
Have a great week, Gypsy :-)
Senyai
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Hi Gypsy,
Oh, thank you so much for your detailed review. I appreciate your great suggestions and will consider an edit. Yes, I think I need to start joining the Haiku Club to perfect my poems :-)
I have always loved Van Gogh's paintings and this is one of my favorites. So full of emotion.
Have a great week, Gypsy :-)
Senyai
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Van Gogh was definitely an interesting person. I am sure people have had many debates on some of his meanings. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It causes the reader to pause and think. That's a good thing. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Van Gogh was definitely an interesting person. I am sure people have had many debates on some of his meanings. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It causes the reader to pause and think. That's a good thing. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi Barbara,
Thanks for the superb review! Yes, Van Gogh was one of a kind for sure. I have always liked his painting, ?Wheatfield with Crows?. It is so haunting with its stormy skies.
I appreciate your time to read and critique my work.
All the best :))
Senyai
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I only recently learned this definition of "murder." You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables to describe that sudden flurry of joint movement.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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I only recently learned this definition of "murder." You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables to describe that sudden flurry of joint movement.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi Janice,
Oh, thank you kindly for an amazing review and encouraging comments!
Both are truly appreciated.
Have a great week, Janice :))
Senyai
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Van Gogh will be smiling from wherever he has parked himself!:) Loevely Haiku! Crows have a very unique position in all religions. In the Indian context, they play a large part in myths and rituals for the dead. I enjoyed your lovely short poem. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Van Gogh will be smiling from wherever he has parked himself!:) Loevely Haiku! Crows have a very unique position in all religions. In the Indian context, they play a large part in myths and rituals for the dead. I enjoyed your lovely short poem. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi Seshadri,
Wow, interesting! Crows and ravens are associated with death and bad omens coming to pass. You have such interesting comments! I love it.
Thank you, Seshadri!
Have a fantastic week:))
Senyai
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Hi Seshadri,
Wow, interesting! Crows and ravens are associated with death and bad omens coming to pass. You have such interesting comments! I love it.
Thank you, Seshadri!
Have a fantastic week:))
Senyai
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very fun poem about a murder of crows taking flight from a cornfield. leaving behind a musty smell. Liked the discussion of the various group names for birds. Did not know they went back to the middle ages. Interesting that murder of crows came about because of how crows "murder" the prey so to speak.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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very fun poem about a murder of crows taking flight from a cornfield. leaving behind a musty smell. Liked the discussion of the various group names for birds. Did not know they went back to the middle ages. Interesting that murder of crows came about because of how crows "murder" the prey so to speak.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi Jake,
Nice to meet you, sir! Yes, a group of crows is called a murder. Who knew?
I have always known a flock of Larks is called an exaltation but murder for crows? LOL
Thank you for an interesting review and thoughts :))
Always,
Senyai
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Hi Jake,
Nice to meet you, sir! Yes, a group of crows is called a murder. Who knew?
I have always known a flock of Larks is called an exaltation but murder for crows? LOL
Thank you for an interesting review and thoughts :))
Always,
Senyai
Comment from RGstar
Wow...I learned something today about "the murder of crows as a collective nown...and how well you projected this 5-7-5.
Strong imagery, almost Hitchcock-like, it delivers, as should, even before reading your very interesting and great set of notes. Bravo.
This should be battling for the win, I liked it very much.
As usual, you never disappoint.
My best wishes.
Have a beautiful week.
RG
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Wow...I learned something today about "the murder of crows as a collective nown...and how well you projected this 5-7-5.
Strong imagery, almost Hitchcock-like, it delivers, as should, even before reading your very interesting and great set of notes. Bravo.
This should be battling for the win, I liked it very much.
As usual, you never disappoint.
My best wishes.
Have a beautiful week.
RG
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi RGstar,
Oh, I?m glad you like my strange 5-7-5! I always like to know what you think as your skill is unsurpassed.
Thank you as always for your kind comments and interesting take on my work. Brightens my day so much!!
Take care and have a wonderful rest of your week, too RG :-)
Senyai
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Hi RGstar,
Oh, I?m glad you like my strange 5-7-5! I always like to know what you think as your skill is unsurpassed.
Thank you as always for your kind comments and interesting take on my work. Brightens my day so much!!
Take care and have a wonderful rest of your week, too RG :-)
Senyai
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Meant to say 'noun' :0 sorry Senyai...have a good week...always good to hear from you. Good luck with this.
Comment from lyenochka
Great ekphrastic poem using van Gogh's painting. It does feel ominous and the "murder of crows" is apt. I especially liked the alliteration such as "flurry, from, field" and engaging the sense of smell. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Great ekphrastic poem using van Gogh's painting. It does feel ominous and the "murder of crows" is apt. I especially liked the alliteration such as "flurry, from, field" and engaging the sense of smell. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi Lyenochka,
Oh, thank you for an amazing review and encouraging comments! I am glad you liked my little poem. I have always loved this painting by Van Gogh so thought I?d write about the feeling I got from it ?
I appreciate your well wishes, too .
Have a wonderful rest of your week, Lyenochka :))
Senyai
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Hi Lyenochka,
Oh, thank you for an amazing review and encouraging comments! I am glad you liked my little poem. I have always loved this painting by Van Gogh so thought I?d write about the feeling I got from it ?
I appreciate your well wishes, too .
Have a wonderful rest of your week, Lyenochka :))
Senyai
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Startling use of murder--I saw that once before. Brilliant 5-7-5--stunning use of imagery and four-way alliteration in FL/FL/F/F. A tangy closer for the olfactory buds!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Startling use of murder--I saw that once before. Brilliant 5-7-5--stunning use of imagery and four-way alliteration in FL/FL/F/F. A tangy closer for the olfactory buds!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi Elizabeth,
Oh, what a wonderful review! Amazing comments as well. Yes, the Van Gogh painting looked like the earth was damp after a rain and the wheat is damp too so ?voila! Tangy musky smell arose :-)
Have a great week, Elizabeth:))
Senyai
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Hi Elizabeth,
Oh, what a wonderful review! Amazing comments as well. Yes, the Van Gogh painting looked like the earth was damp after a rain and the wheat is damp too so ?voila! Tangy musky smell arose :-)
Have a great week, Elizabeth:))
Senyai
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
A lovely painting for a very wonderful poem. Great write. I enjoyed reading. Wishing you the very best wishes in the contest.
Blessings, now and always!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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A lovely painting for a very wonderful poem. Great write. I enjoyed reading. Wishing you the very best wishes in the contest.
Blessings, now and always!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi Precious,
I appreciate your lovely review and thoughts! Thank you kindly.
Have a wonderful week :))
Always,
Senyai
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Hi Precious,
I appreciate your lovely review and thoughts! Thank you kindly.
Have a wonderful week :))
Always,
Senyai
Comment from Gloria ....
This Van Gogh is definitely a vigorous painting, and you have captured the stunning beauty very well.
When birds, and particularly crows are startled into flight they truly do take the scent of the earth into the air with them.
A fine entry into this contest, and I wish you great luck with the Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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This Van Gogh is definitely a vigorous painting, and you have captured the stunning beauty very well.
When birds, and particularly crows are startled into flight they truly do take the scent of the earth into the air with them.
A fine entry into this contest, and I wish you great luck with the Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Hi Gloria,
Oh thank you so much! Always a treat to hear from you. I have always liked this painting ?Wheatfield with Crows? by Van Gogh. It makes me have strong emotions, a sadness somehow.
I really loved your comment about the birds carrying the scent of the field up with them ?yes, they do that especially on damp days. The painting looks like it had just rained.
Thanks again for a quite memorable review :-)
Have a great rest of your week,
Senyai
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Hi Gloria,
Oh thank you so much! Always a treat to hear from you. I have always liked this painting ?Wheatfield with Crows? by Van Gogh. It makes me have strong emotions, a sadness somehow.
I really loved your comment about the birds carrying the scent of the field up with them ?yes, they do that especially on damp days. The painting looks like it had just rained.
Thanks again for a quite memorable review :-)
Have a great rest of your week,
Senyai