Silent Witness
a nod to poet e e cummings -44 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
Your poem brings out the feeling of the vastness of the trees shoulder to shoulder shall we say, leaving the hundreds of years combined known by the hidden rings. Leaving them untouched in the vast darkness. Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
Your poem brings out the feeling of the vastness of the trees shoulder to shoulder shall we say, leaving the hundreds of years combined known by the hidden rings. Leaving them untouched in the vast darkness. Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Hi Patty,
Oh thank you for such a delightful review and amazing thoughts. I love your reference that the trees stand ?shoulder to shoulder? :-) Beautiful! They are alive and beings of a sort that we don?t completely understand. There is so much mystery about these massive forest trees.
Thank you again for very perceptive thoughts.
Have a great week!
Senyai
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Hi Patty,
Oh thank you for such a delightful review and amazing thoughts. I love your reference that the trees stand ?shoulder to shoulder? :-) Beautiful! They are alive and beings of a sort that we don?t completely understand. There is so much mystery about these massive forest trees.
Thank you again for very perceptive thoughts.
Have a great week!
Senyai
Comment from Patty Palmer
Your poem brings out the feeling of the vastness of the trees shoulder to shoulder shall we say, leaving the hundreds of years combined known by the hidden rings. Leaving them untouched in the vast darkness. Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
Your poem brings out the feeling of the vastness of the trees shoulder to shoulder shall we say, leaving the hundreds of years combined known by the hidden rings. Leaving them untouched in the vast darkness. Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Hi Patty,
I just got two identical reviews by you, lol. Did you mean to send me two? Thought I?d ask ?
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Hi Patty,
I just got two identical reviews by you, lol. Did you mean to send me two? Thought I?d ask ?
Comment from VJWild
I love the feel of this poem, it matches that of the picture/art you chose, as well. I love the line trees breathe-silent standing, I'm a sucker for alliteration, but you so perfectly described something we don't normally think about once the sun goes down. Good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
I love the feel of this poem, it matches that of the picture/art you chose, as well. I love the line trees breathe-silent standing, I'm a sucker for alliteration, but you so perfectly described something we don't normally think about once the sun goes down. Good luck!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Hi VJWild,
Oh my! Thank you for your warm thoughts and most generous review. You are very kind to bestow the gift kf six for my free verse. I am indebted to you, very appreciated! You have made my evening ❤️
Have a great week, VJ :-)
Senyai
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Hi VJWild,
Oh my! Thank you for your warm thoughts and most generous review. You are very kind to bestow the gift kf six for my free verse. I am indebted to you, very appreciated! You have made my evening ❤️
Have a great week, VJ :-)
Senyai
Comment from VJWild
I love the feel of this poem, it matches that of the picture/art you chose, as well. I love the line trees breathe-silent standing, I'm a sucker for alliteration, but you so perfectly described something we don't normally think about once the sun goes down. Good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
I love the feel of this poem, it matches that of the picture/art you chose, as well. I love the line trees breathe-silent standing, I'm a sucker for alliteration, but you so perfectly described something we don't normally think about once the sun goes down. Good luck!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Hi, VJWild,
Thanks again ❤️ :-)
All the best,
Senyai
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Hi, VJWild,
Thanks again ❤️ :-)
All the best,
Senyai
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gorgeous! An elegant stunner, rich in startling imagery. I am not familiar with his poetry; regardless, this is spectacular in itself. Do you mean trees BREATHE vs breath?
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
Gorgeous! An elegant stunner, rich in startling imagery. I am not familiar with his poetry; regardless, this is spectacular in itself. Do you mean trees BREATHE vs breath?
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Hi Elizabeth,
Thank you! I am so glad you liked this one:-). No, I did mean breath-silent. e. e. cummings was an American poet who used idiosyncratic spellings, phrases and positioning in his free style poetry. I was kind of writing in his vein, if that makes sense.
Thank you as always for your astute reviews and thoughts, Elizabeth. I am always glad to hear from you :-)
Have a great week,
Senyai
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Hi Elizabeth,
Thank you! I am so glad you liked this one:-). No, I did mean breath-silent. e. e. cummings was an American poet who used idiosyncratic spellings, phrases and positioning in his free style poetry. I was kind of writing in his vein, if that makes sense.
Thank you as always for your astute reviews and thoughts, Elizabeth. I am always glad to hear from you :-)
Have a great week,
Senyai
Comment from Gloria ....
This gorgeous with rich imagery. Standing on the edge of a forest at night is breathtaking.
Most original and poetic wording. I really enjoy the idea of massive trunks wrapping up time in quiet rings.
So very good, Senyai it's like being there.
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
This gorgeous with rich imagery. Standing on the edge of a forest at night is breathtaking.
Most original and poetic wording. I really enjoy the idea of massive trunks wrapping up time in quiet rings.
So very good, Senyai it's like being there.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
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Hi Gloria,
Glad to hear from my British Columbian friend. Are the fires abating any? So hoping they are.
Thank you for a wonderful review as I always welcome what you think:-). So glad you like this little free verse. I love nature and forests and sky. Wish I lived near a true forest, I would gleefully walk in it every day. But my wooded neighborhood will have to do for now.
Have a great week,
Senyai
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Hi Gloria,
Glad to hear from my British Columbian friend. Are the fires abating any? So hoping they are.
Thank you for a wonderful review as I always welcome what you think:-). So glad you like this little free verse. I love nature and forests and sky. Wish I lived near a true forest, I would gleefully walk in it every day. But my wooded neighborhood will have to do for now.
Have a great week,
Senyai
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your notes helped me understand the rings and of course the trees life is counted in rings on its trunk, a poignant write and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
Your notes helped me understand the rings and of course the trees life is counted in rings on its trunk, a poignant write and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hi Dolly,
Thank you for a succinct review and interesting thoughts. Much appreciated, Dolly :-)
All the best,
Senyai
Comment from Raul1
This is a well crafted poem. I did understand it. Worthy of a six star rating. Exceptional work! Thank you for sharing! No mistakes. Best wishes in the contest. Good job.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
This is a well crafted poem. I did understand it. Worthy of a six star rating. Exceptional work! Thank you for sharing! No mistakes. Best wishes in the contest. Good job.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hi Raul,
Oh my! Thank you very much for your phenomenal review. I am so happy you liked my free verse. Your gift of six stars has made my day!
Thank you :-)
All the best,
Senyai
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You're welcome!
Comment from karenina
I'm no expert, but I do love e.e. cummings work and you do him proud with this poetic offering! Free verse is anything but free... To write it very well (as you have) is to take away all the usual poet's tools (rhyme, alliteration, simile, meter) and to dive deep into your own soul to find the essence of your truth...
Excellent. I bet Theodore loves this one!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
I'm no expert, but I do love e.e. cummings work and you do him proud with this poetic offering! Free verse is anything but free... To write it very well (as you have) is to take away all the usual poet's tools (rhyme, alliteration, simile, meter) and to dive deep into your own soul to find the essence of your truth...
Excellent. I bet Theodore loves this one!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hi Karenina,
So good to hear from you! Hoping rehab is going well and you?re making progress. Sending hugs and prayers every day 🤗
You are such a unique person, Karenina and your words are worthy of framing and putting upon my virtual wall. Where they will stay so whenever I need a lift I will fix my gaze upon them.
Thank you, you are generous and kind ❤️
Always,
Senyai
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I mean every word!
Karenina
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Thanks, Karenina ❤️
Comment from LisaMay
(You could knock down the 2 capital letters as well I think, to emulate e e cummings even more.)
'draped-heavy' and 'breath-silent' are beautifully evocative phrases as is 'a pall bearer's gown wrapping up time' - very effective imagery. The poem carries a weight of sadness. We only get to see the 'quiet rings' when the tree is dead... probably old-growth forest chopped down by man's exploitation of wilderness.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
(You could knock down the 2 capital letters as well I think, to emulate e e cummings even more.)
'draped-heavy' and 'breath-silent' are beautifully evocative phrases as is 'a pall bearer's gown wrapping up time' - very effective imagery. The poem carries a weight of sadness. We only get to see the 'quiet rings' when the tree is dead... probably old-growth forest chopped down by man's exploitation of wilderness.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hi LisaMay,
Yes, I tried to find my words after I turned them white to show up on the black background - to do just that ? but can?t find them to turn them black to make the change.
I hope that makes sense. Will try again to do this. There?s issues with highlighting and the format @#$&
Thanks for a great review. Much appreciated!
All the best,
Senyai