Inception
a 5-7-519 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
Lovely presentation. That's beautiful artwork. Great thought for this 5-7-5 contest and best of luck. Aptly expressed. Once the day's done that's it. There are no do-overs. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Lovely presentation. That's beautiful artwork. Great thought for this 5-7-5 contest and best of luck. Aptly expressed. Once the day's done that's it. There are no do-overs. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thanks, Judi
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You're very welcome, and I'm looking for this to be in the winners circle. judi
Comment from Mark D. R.
Bill,
This my favorite poem style. You used a good illustration to illustrate your message for this contest. It is a takeoff on: Today is yesterday's tomorrow.
Of course, we always have control to change how we act.
Mark
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Bill,
This my favorite poem style. You used a good illustration to illustrate your message for this contest. It is a takeoff on: Today is yesterday's tomorrow.
Of course, we always have control to change how we act.
Mark
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thanks, Mark
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is a great poem. It is full of meaning and it is very clever. Your line "today departs yesterday" took me a while to understand and made me ponder about time.
Exceptional and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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This is a great poem. It is full of meaning and it is very clever. Your line "today departs yesterday" took me a while to understand and made me ponder about time.
Exceptional and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Lisa, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Sunrise is an inspirational time of day, as is sunset. The colors vary as well. Such beauty we are treated to without traveling to find it. A daily message to look forward to. This is a great presentation.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Sunrise is an inspirational time of day, as is sunset. The colors vary as well. Such beauty we are treated to without traveling to find it. A daily message to look forward to. This is a great presentation.
Ralf
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Ralf.
Comment from Jay Squires
I never stop being amazed at how the choice of one (multisyllabic) word can bring a poem, like a haiku, or a senryu to life. Of course in this case the word is irreversible. I don't know what your luck has been with these types of contests, but my thought is that this one has a good chance of bringing home the gold.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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I never stop being amazed at how the choice of one (multisyllabic) word can bring a poem, like a haiku, or a senryu to life. Of course in this case the word is irreversible. I don't know what your luck has been with these types of contests, but my thought is that this one has a good chance of bringing home the gold.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Jay. After a dozen years I've gone from straight zeroes to one in ten.
Comment from BethShelby
If a poem is going to that short, it has to make sense to me, and this one does. We all know the truth of this statement, but I don't think we let it sink in. By putting the words into a poem, it makes you stop and think. The chance to do all those things we thought we would do yesterday, is gone forever. To many yesterdays leads to a life of little accomplishment.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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If a poem is going to that short, it has to make sense to me, and this one does. We all know the truth of this statement, but I don't think we let it sink in. By putting the words into a poem, it makes you stop and think. The chance to do all those things we thought we would do yesterday, is gone forever. To many yesterdays leads to a life of little accomplishment.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thanks, Beth, for finding the meaning here.
Comment from Anne Johnston
"at dawn's inception
today departs yesterday
irreversibly."
I like the thought you have expressed in these few words. We cannot go back and change yesterday, so we are reminded to enjoy today.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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"at dawn's inception
today departs yesterday
irreversibly."
I like the thought you have expressed in these few words. We cannot go back and change yesterday, so we are reminded to enjoy today.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Anne.
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You are welcome
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
this is beautiful, and moving. it brought tears to my eyes (i kid you not). i very much like the image that your words bring to me of fission yeast, where time would be budding off in small fragments from a common stock.
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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this is beautiful, and moving. it brought tears to my eyes (i kid you not). i very much like the image that your words bring to me of fission yeast, where time would be budding off in small fragments from a common stock.
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Katherine.
...fission yeast, where time would be budding off in small fragments from a common stock.
Wow!
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it's what your words conjoured up with this idea of separation
Comment from lyenochka
That's so true. We can't go back to yesterday even if memories stay with us. I like the forward-focus of this poem and the positive feeling of making the most of today. Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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That's so true. We can't go back to yesterday even if memories stay with us. I like the forward-focus of this poem and the positive feeling of making the most of today. Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you, lyenochka.
