The Last Shot
75 word flash fiction15 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The Last Shot
by Leann DS
Deep 75 words flash fiction entry for the Contest. I like the be metaphor of shooting hoops and shooting heroine. You did well with the flash fiction form. Good word count.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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The Last Shot
by Leann DS
Deep 75 words flash fiction entry for the Contest. I like the be metaphor of shooting hoops and shooting heroine. You did well with the flash fiction form. Good word count.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you! :-)
Comment from Liz O'Neill
**Goose bumps** This is very powerful. Your use of juxtaposition serves its purpose as their distance sadly grows. I have to give this A+. They do not come easily. But you've earned it.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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**Goose bumps** This is very powerful. Your use of juxtaposition serves its purpose as their distance sadly grows. I have to give this A+. They do not come easily. But you've earned it.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you so much! I humbly appreciate your review and six stars. Hugs!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Leann.
Life has become treacherous, and in many ways cheap, in parts of our society. In my day, two guys would get ready and "duke" it out. A bloody nose, knot on the head, or bruises were all that resulted, until the next round. The sad story is well told and I wish you good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Hello Leann.
Life has become treacherous, and in many ways cheap, in parts of our society. In my day, two guys would get ready and "duke" it out. A bloody nose, knot on the head, or bruises were all that resulted, until the next round. The sad story is well told and I wish you good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your comments and that you read my story. Hugs.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Leann,
This is an excellent story with a great message.
The sad reality of life in many places.
The only problem is the contest says "fiction" and
your notes indicate it is true story, thus non-fiction.
Best wishes.
Robert
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reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Hello Leann,
This is an excellent story with a great message.
The sad reality of life in many places.
The only problem is the contest says "fiction" and
your notes indicate it is true story, thus non-fiction.
Best wishes.
Robert
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Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Drat! Any advice on what I should do?
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Perhaps you have another story you could put in. You can edit at any time. Otherwise just take a chance the committee won't notice it.
Best wishes.
Comment from damommy
How sad. Killed while doing something good for the community. Those gang members don't want anyone messing with their possible recruits. I'm so sorry this happened.
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reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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How sad. Killed while doing something good for the community. Those gang members don't want anyone messing with their possible recruits. I'm so sorry this happened.
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Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you. It was a tragic and heartbreaking thing. Thank you for your comments.