Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Football Chapter 14 part 2"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, poor Katherine she had sex just five times and then when she got the boys. No wonder that she acts like a shy teenager around Gabe. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Wow, poor Katherine she had sex just five times and then when she got the boys. No wonder that she acts like a shy teenager around Gabe. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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There will be more information about Katherine coming out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
What a stunner! Didn't see this coming--brilliant dialog--you masterfully render their intense interaction. Will there be more backstory as to why only FIVE times (four kids)--what's the deal with the neglectful George--I earlier you implied that she was a trophy wife--did she know that going in? Will this be slowly revealed or is it not improtant to the story?
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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What a stunner! Didn't see this coming--brilliant dialog--you masterfully render their intense interaction. Will there be more backstory as to why only FIVE times (four kids)--what's the deal with the neglectful George--I earlier you implied that she was a trophy wife--did she know that going in? Will this be slowly revealed or is it not improtant to the story?
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
my what an emontial scene you wrote about when Katherine told
Gabriel of when Katherine broke down with tears in her eyes
told Gabriel "I was married for sixteen years. You're not going to believe this, but I've only had sex five times. I've never really seen an adult male partly dressed." Before Gabriel could speak she added, "I've never been in an adult relationship and you're incredibly..."
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Hello Barb
my what an emontial scene you wrote about when Katherine told
Gabriel of when Katherine broke down with tears in her eyes
told Gabriel "I was married for sixteen years. You're not going to believe this, but I've only had sex five times. I've never really seen an adult male partly dressed." Before Gabriel could speak she added, "I've never been in an adult relationship and you're incredibly..."
Gert
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
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You are so welcome Barb
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Great chapter, barbara!
What Katherine said could seem unbelievable to anyone who has only known warm, loving relationships. My husband has three siblings - I would guess that his parents did not have sex very often - but, at least 4 times, right? She was the coldest woman I'd ever met. I am sorry that Katherine has not known love. She deserves better.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Great chapter, barbara!
What Katherine said could seem unbelievable to anyone who has only known warm, loving relationships. My husband has three siblings - I would guess that his parents did not have sex very often - but, at least 4 times, right? She was the coldest woman I'd ever met. I am sorry that Katherine has not known love. She deserves better.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
WHAT??! What kind of dude was she married to? That is so bizarre. I'm sure it happens, but we mostly hear about things going the OTHER way. I'm really glad Gabe is such a sweet guy and good listener. This was a really nice chapter. Thanks!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Barb,
WHAT??! What kind of dude was she married to? That is so bizarre. I'm sure it happens, but we mostly hear about things going the OTHER way. I'm really glad Gabe is such a sweet guy and good listener. This was a really nice chapter. Thanks!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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More information about Katherine will come out. I promise. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Although I want more, I actually like the way that you are letting this relationship develop slowly. It will be more meaningful and with no regrets when it does happen. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Although I want more, I actually like the way that you are letting this relationship develop slowly. It will be more meaningful and with no regrets when it does happen. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from Jay Squires
It looks like Gabriel, through his persistence, has just about cracked through Katherine's tough exterior. Seems like he's always capable of creating one more gaff (talking to the principal behind her back to get her to go to the football game) to end the evening on a low note.
One small point:
Katherine remained in Gabriel's arms, until her confidence return. [... until her confidence RETURNED.]
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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It looks like Gabriel, through his persistence, has just about cracked through Katherine's tough exterior. Seems like he's always capable of creating one more gaff (talking to the principal behind her back to get her to go to the football game) to end the evening on a low note.
One small point:
Katherine remained in Gabriel's arms, until her confidence return. [... until her confidence RETURNED.]
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I must have been correcting that as you were reviewing. I just went back and rechecked. It's corrected. There will be a lot more about Katherine coming out, slowly. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yeah, the problem with my reviewing is in the timing. I download them as soon after Saturday Midnight (EST). But my time is so structured that I don't get to the reviewing until after 7 PM Sunday Night. By then, many SPAG notifications have been already corrected.
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Not a problem. It never hurts to say something. I often correct and forget to save,
Comment from AJ McCall
Wow. I'm very surprised at this chapter; at Katherine. Poor Kathrine! I never would've imagined that she went through that. And at seventeen? That's what I am now. I'm glad Gabriel was there and is kind and gentle and sweet. I want to see what happens in the next chapter!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Wow. I'm very surprised at this chapter; at Katherine. Poor Kathrine! I never would've imagined that she went through that. And at seventeen? That's what I am now. I'm glad Gabriel was there and is kind and gentle and sweet. I want to see what happens in the next chapter!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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There's a lot information about Katherine that we are still to learn. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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I'm sure! You're welcome.
Comment from nomi338
If ever two people belonged together, it is these two. I do not want you to rush things, but I am just a bit anxious for Katherine to come to the eventual realization that this man is not one she should risk losing.. The story is progressing at a decent rate. Me, being the helpless romantic that I am, I am having difficulty waiting for the hoped for outcome.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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If ever two people belonged together, it is these two. I do not want you to rush things, but I am just a bit anxious for Katherine to come to the eventual realization that this man is not one she should risk losing.. The story is progressing at a decent rate. Me, being the helpless romantic that I am, I am having difficulty waiting for the hoped for outcome.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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We have more information to learn about Katherine's marriage, but I can promise she's warming up a little to Gabriel.
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Good. That makes me happy. I sympathize with Gabriel. I married a divorcee and had to win not only her over, but her 4 year old daughter and her relatives as well. That was 46 years ago.
Comment from Sankey
I really loved this chapter. I feel like you were getting deep in writing this as well. Dunno why. Well done again! Suggestion and one spag. before my eighteen(th??) birthday.
until her confidence return(ed).
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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I really loved this chapter. I feel like you were getting deep in writing this as well. Dunno why. Well done again! Suggestion and one spag. before my eighteen(th??) birthday.
until her confidence return(ed).
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I will fix that.
