A Stranger in the Dell
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Comment from Mastery
Hi Yvonne. Beautiful poetry here, dear friend. I like all of it, but especially these lines:
"darkness dropped its heavy drape
where all things woodland dwell.
A narrow path took me away -
a stranger in the dell."
Bless you. Great write. Bob
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Hi Yvonne. Beautiful poetry here, dear friend. I like all of it, but especially these lines:
"darkness dropped its heavy drape
where all things woodland dwell.
A narrow path took me away -
a stranger in the dell."
Bless you. Great write. Bob
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Oh, thank you so much, Bob. I appreciate the great review, and stars! 8-)
Comment from Sally Law
A beautiful walk amongst the pines in poetry fashion, dear Yvonne. A beautiful art illustration crowns your fine work so nicely. I miss the fragrant pine trees of my native Georgia. They are certainly pungent.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs....
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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A beautiful walk amongst the pines in poetry fashion, dear Yvonne. A beautiful art illustration crowns your fine work so nicely. I miss the fragrant pine trees of my native Georgia. They are certainly pungent.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs....
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Yes, they are. I have one next door to me that is huge, and I have a big cedar tree. Love the smells. Thanks, Sally. Hope you all are staying well and safe.
Comment from Ben Colder
Nothing wrong with this. I had a friend one time who wrote a poem similar. It was about a certain smell in he pines and how they caught him up into zeal when a stranger in black wearing a white strip down its back appeared.
The question while holding his nose. "Is that Pine?"
Good one. It brought a fond memory.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Nothing wrong with this. I had a friend one time who wrote a poem similar. It was about a certain smell in he pines and how they caught him up into zeal when a stranger in black wearing a white strip down its back appeared.
The question while holding his nose. "Is that Pine?"
Good one. It brought a fond memory.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I'm so glad it did. That's funny. Thank you for sharing that with me.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very peaceful poem you penned about A Stranger in the Dell. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings,Teri
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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This is a very beautiful and very peaceful poem you penned about A Stranger in the Dell. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings,Teri
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much.
Comment from aryr
What a wonderful picture, Yvonne. Your words truly brought the sense of peace, of tranquility and of freedom. There was indeed a stranger in the calm of the woods and the dell.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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What a wonderful picture, Yvonne. Your words truly brought the sense of peace, of tranquility and of freedom. There was indeed a stranger in the calm of the woods and the dell.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from zanya
A lovely ambiance in this space within the forest is created poetically here - a magical place wherein to dwell and experience life as it throbs and unfolds- exquisite imagery 'tiny czars' & 'darkness dropped its heavy drape'
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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A lovely ambiance in this space within the forest is created poetically here - a magical place wherein to dwell and experience life as it throbs and unfolds- exquisite imagery 'tiny czars' & 'darkness dropped its heavy drape'
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I'm glad you liked those phrases. Thank you so much.
Comment from Sugarray77
I like this poem and the small story it tells. Your rhyming and word choices are very good ... as well as the modified repetitive line. Great job, Yvonne!!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I like this poem and the small story it tells. Your rhyming and word choices are very good ... as well as the modified repetitive line. Great job, Yvonne!!!
Melissa
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thank you, Melissa. Appreciate that.
Comment from judiverse
This is lovely. It sounds so musical. The setting with the pines and furry creatures sounds peaceful, but a bit mysterious. "Emperor of the nighttime" is a great description. "The stranger in the dell" is excellent. This really establishes a mood. You might consider "and still no sound I heard" instead of "was heard." I think active voice works better. judi
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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This is lovely. It sounds so musical. The setting with the pines and furry creatures sounds peaceful, but a bit mysterious. "Emperor of the nighttime" is a great description. "The stranger in the dell" is excellent. This really establishes a mood. You might consider "and still no sound I heard" instead of "was heard." I think active voice works better. judi
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thank you for a wonderful review, and for the suggestion.
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You're welcome. This was truly lovely. judi
Comment from Susan Newell
This was a nice read. I liked the description of the dell and has how when nighttime fell you slipped into more figurative language. I really thought the moon and stars as emperor and czars was very original. Thanks for the read.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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This was a nice read. I liked the description of the dell and has how when nighttime fell you slipped into more figurative language. I really thought the moon and stars as emperor and czars was very original. Thanks for the read.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked that part.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine eerie write about walking in the dell and being spotted as an interloper. The only line I struggled with is this one:
''the emperor of the nighttime"
The stress is on (the) which seemed weak.
Perhaps: "the emperor of night and time" might work better. It's just a suggestion.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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A fine eerie write about walking in the dell and being spotted as an interloper. The only line I struggled with is this one:
''the emperor of the nighttime"
The stress is on (the) which seemed weak.
Perhaps: "the emperor of night and time" might work better. It's just a suggestion.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thanks, Dolly. I think it's because we tend to say 'empror,' really.
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Oh, I see x