Phone Calls from Caroline
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Planning A Funeral"A cousin calls her younger cousin to rant.
27 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Judy love the conversation, I must admit when I die, I'm not really going to care how my hair is or what clothes they bury me in, am I? I love this dialogue only entry dear Beth, rather brilliant I think, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Judy love the conversation, I must admit when I die, I'm not really going to care how my hair is or what clothes they bury me in, am I? I love this dialogue only entry dear Beth, rather brilliant I think, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and the comments. It won't matter to me either but some people find it something that occupies their mind. I hope you got a good laugh from this. I have to admit that Caroline is modeled after a real person I know.
Beth
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I did indeed Beth
Comment from LJbutterfly
I really enjoyed this hilarious dialogue only story that reminded me of my elderly aunt. I especially liked the way you distinguished the speakers by using bold and regular print. Your use of grammar made the characters seem more familiar, like people we know. This is a well written story.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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I really enjoyed this hilarious dialogue only story that reminded me of my elderly aunt. I especially liked the way you distinguished the speakers by using bold and regular print. Your use of grammar made the characters seem more familiar, like people we know. This is a well written story.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. The character of Caroline is that of a real person who calls me regularly. She actually said some of the things I wrote. She would be quite capable of saying all of it. LOL
Betj
Comment from nancy_e_davis
God, Spare me from ever getting that persnickery. LOL
Cremation is the best way, no worries and a whole lot cheaper. This was a hoot, Beth. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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God, Spare me from ever getting that persnickery. LOL
Cremation is the best way, no worries and a whole lot cheaper. This was a hoot, Beth. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you Nancy, I enjoyed you comment and I glad you got a laugh.
Beth
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Beth, this really isn't a funny subject but I can't help laughing. Could it possibly be a true story? I can't imagine what I would do if some cousin phoned me wanting to plan their funeral. It is a good entry for this contest. Good luck!
Ralf
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Beth, this really isn't a funny subject but I can't help laughing. Could it possibly be a true story? I can't imagine what I would do if some cousin phoned me wanting to plan their funeral. It is a good entry for this contest. Good luck!
Ralf
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you Ralf, It is based on a real cousin and half of the stuff on there she has actually said. The only thing that is true about the funeral is that I'm to make sure her daughter knows she wants to be sent back to Mississippi and buried our grandmother.
Beth
Comment from Omar sb
Cousin Caroline is a hoot!
I love her moxie. She's likes things her way. Frankly, having lived 95 years onward, she deserves it!
Truly enjoyed reading this humorous fiction dialogue.
Thanks Beth.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Cousin Caroline is a hoot!
I love her moxie. She's likes things her way. Frankly, having lived 95 years onward, she deserves it!
Truly enjoyed reading this humorous fiction dialogue.
Thanks Beth.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you Omar. I glad you liked this. She is based on a real character whose phone calls are much like these. LOL
Beth
Comment from Mary Vigasin
This was funny especially where Caroline talks as if she will be aware of her surroundings when she is dead. I would not suggest any grammar changes because this is the way your characters talk.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards
Mary
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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This was funny especially where Caroline talks as if she will be aware of her surroundings when she is dead. I would not suggest any grammar changes because this is the way your characters talk.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards
Mary
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you Mary. i really appreciate the review and comments. I glad you like the humor.
Beth
Comment from Sankey
Haha, this was so funny. Well done. Not a spag anywhere this time around. Thoroughly enjoyable read. Was expecting your chat with your late husband but this was good. Wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Haha, this was so funny. Well done. Not a spag anywhere this time around. Thoroughly enjoyable read. Was expecting your chat with your late husband but this was good. Wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and I glad you liked it. There is a chat with my late husband that you missed. It is still paying. Called How do we go about this move?
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is very funny. Caroline is considering her funeral and burial as if she's going to be a living, breathing person, able to feel temperature, have allergic reactions and interact with those around her, post mortem. I hope this was purely imaginary and not based on an real conversation with an actual relative, because I don't think I would have been able to keep it together.
Here are some suggested revisions:
I'm 95-years-old....I've been going down hill for twenty years.
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I'm 95 years old. I've been going downhill for twenty years.
She won't listen.to me.
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She won't listen to me.
You've got to come over here, and tell her what I want. and see to it that she does it.
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You've got to come over here, and tell her what I want, and see to it that she does it.
Yes, I remember. You've told me at least twenty times,.
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Yes, I remember. You've told me at least twenty times.
I never could sleep on that other side.....
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I never could sleep on that other side...
I'm allergic to mums. ...
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I'm allergic to mums...
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You picked a good photo. That sure looks like one crabby lady -- on a phone that has a cord!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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This is very funny. Caroline is considering her funeral and burial as if she's going to be a living, breathing person, able to feel temperature, have allergic reactions and interact with those around her, post mortem. I hope this was purely imaginary and not based on an real conversation with an actual relative, because I don't think I would have been able to keep it together.
Here are some suggested revisions:
I'm 95-years-old....I've been going down hill for twenty years.
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I'm 95 years old. I've been going downhill for twenty years.
She won't listen.to me.
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She won't listen to me.
You've got to come over here, and tell her what I want. and see to it that she does it.
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You've got to come over here, and tell her what I want, and see to it that she does it.
Yes, I remember. You've told me at least twenty times,.
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Yes, I remember. You've told me at least twenty times.
I never could sleep on that other side.....
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I never could sleep on that other side...
I'm allergic to mums. ...
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I'm allergic to mums...
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You picked a good photo. That sure looks like one crabby lady -- on a phone that has a cord!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments and help. Caroline is based on a true cousin. Some of that stuff she has actually said.
You haven't read the last chapter to my book "How Do You Go About This Move."
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You're very welcome, dear Beth. Your cousin "Caroline" sounds like quite a character! The story must have popped up somehow, and I read it before your most recent book chapter, which I don't want to miss. Thank you for letting me know :-)
Love, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
With all due respect, hahaha. I enjoyed your contest entry, Beth. This sounds so real. You did a great job with the dialogue. Also, I could picture both women as they talked. You have their characteristics down pat.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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With all due respect, hahaha. I enjoyed your contest entry, Beth. This sounds so real. You did a great job with the dialogue. Also, I could picture both women as they talked. You have their characteristics down pat.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Well the reason it sounds real is because they are real. I took some liberties with some of the conversation. LOL
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Yes, I knew it was real.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Hilarious! This conversation has the "ring" of truth--hope not. I never cite grammar errors in dialog--hopefully no one will ding you for the speakers' mistakes!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Hilarious! This conversation has the "ring" of truth--hope not. I never cite grammar errors in dialog--hopefully no one will ding you for the speakers' mistakes!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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I'm glad you liked. Names changed but the lady's my cousin and some the conversation is real.
Beth
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I can't recall what you told me back when-- what are the titles of your two stories pertaining to your hurricane miracle?
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I didn't too creative with the names. Tornado, Too Hot for February, and The Storm.
