Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Mind Uncoiled"Musings of an old man -2021
28 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
Its heartbreaking to witness dementia, and I can't imagine what struggles those who have it go through. I do know from working on as a nursing assistant on a dementia floor, that the families of these people treat their loved ones with loving care. Whether or not they remember them, they can still feel the love. Thanks for sharing.:)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Its heartbreaking to witness dementia, and I can't imagine what struggles those who have it go through. I do know from working on as a nursing assistant on a dementia floor, that the families of these people treat their loved ones with loving care. Whether or not they remember them, they can still feel the love. Thanks for sharing.:)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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BoogieNights, Thank you for your time taken to read and comment on this poem.
Comment from Patty Palmer
A well-written poem. Dementia is such a sad way to spend your golden years of life. I worked as a nurse in several nursing homes over the years. At one point when they first started this reality orientation thinking it would bring people back to reality who seemed out of touch. I had to tell a lady one night that her mother had passed away many years ago, She was hysterical insisting that someone must have killed her. Luckily, ten minutes later she had forgotten it all and was walking around looking for her mom. I told my supervisor that I will orient to time and place but I'm never going to cause pain like that to another person telling them that their parents died a long time ago. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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A well-written poem. Dementia is such a sad way to spend your golden years of life. I worked as a nurse in several nursing homes over the years. At one point when they first started this reality orientation thinking it would bring people back to reality who seemed out of touch. I had to tell a lady one night that her mother had passed away many years ago, She was hysterical insisting that someone must have killed her. Luckily, ten minutes later she had forgotten it all and was walking around looking for her mom. I told my supervisor that I will orient to time and place but I'm never going to cause pain like that to another person telling them that their parents died a long time ago. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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I agree 1,000%, thank for your wonderful sharing but more importantly thank you for your years as a professional care provider.
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You're welcome!
Patty
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, I hope you are proud of this poem, because you have created here a cascade of words and images that many of we elder folk really relate to, particularly the part about taking a nap. Indeed, I found myself nodding off, here in the middle of the afternoon. z z z (smile)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Dear JLR, I hope you are proud of this poem, because you have created here a cascade of words and images that many of we elder folk really relate to, particularly the part about taking a nap. Indeed, I found myself nodding off, here in the middle of the afternoon. z z z (smile)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Smiling back.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is such a terrible disease as it robs the person of their memories and they don't recognise their family which is so sad, your poem is gently delivered, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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This is such a terrible disease as it robs the person of their memories and they don't recognise their family which is so sad, your poem is gently delivered, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from damommy
I went through that with my mother. It was so sad to see her losing herself. She could remember eighty years ago, but not what she had for lunch. You've written a very good cascade poem about this awful disease. However, I sit and reminisce a lot. I have more past than future. 8-)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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I went through that with my mother. It was so sad to see her losing herself. She could remember eighty years ago, but not what she had for lunch. You've written a very good cascade poem about this awful disease. However, I sit and reminisce a lot. I have more past than future. 8-)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your honest response and comments.
Comment from Susan Larson
This poem is very touching, both in what you say about those experiencing dementia, but as a wake-up call to everyone that this could be us. I love this repetition: as my mind wanders over years gone past, then I nap.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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This poem is very touching, both in what you say about those experiencing dementia, but as a wake-up call to everyone that this could be us. I love this repetition: as my mind wanders over years gone past, then I nap.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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I appreciate your time and comments.
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
Such a lovely description of a moment or two of reflection as we age as shown in "I spent time today with winter, spring, summer, fall". I enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Such a lovely description of a moment or two of reflection as we age as shown in "I spent time today with winter, spring, summer, fall". I enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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I appreciate your time and comments
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your challenge poem for the club. I enjoyed reading it though it is poignant. Your repeated lines fit in nicely as they appear in the other verses. Your image is a nice pairing with your well-expressed words, too. Thanks for the notes and for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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You did a good job with your challenge poem for the club. I enjoyed reading it though it is poignant. Your repeated lines fit in nicely as they appear in the other verses. Your image is a nice pairing with your well-expressed words, too. Thanks for the notes and for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Thank you Jan for the challenge.
Comment from Leann DS
I really enjoyed reading your poem. Dementia and Alzheimer's disease affects so many individuals and therefore, so many families. I believe that many people will be able to relate to this topic. Your poem flowed very nicely, except for one line with which I had trouble, but this might just be me:
Looser is my retention about what I did yesterday
For some reason, I had trouble with this line. I had to reread it several times.
The person taking a couple naps is very realistic and reminded me of my grandmother before she passed on. while I was reading, I actually pictured her. Thanks for sharing this. Hugs.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. Dementia and Alzheimer's disease affects so many individuals and therefore, so many families. I believe that many people will be able to relate to this topic. Your poem flowed very nicely, except for one line with which I had trouble, but this might just be me:
Looser is my retention about what I did yesterday
For some reason, I had trouble with this line. I had to reread it several times.
The person taking a couple naps is very realistic and reminded me of my grandmother before she passed on. while I was reading, I actually pictured her. Thanks for sharing this. Hugs.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Thank you your comment are very welcomed and I agree that line needed changes.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent poem that treats dementia exactly as we see it in its early stages, a disease of gentle dislocation from what non-sufferers think of as reality. Later, dementia turns cruel, becoming a torture to the unrecognized family members and a prison to the confused sufferer.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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This is an excellent poem that treats dementia exactly as we see it in its early stages, a disease of gentle dislocation from what non-sufferers think of as reality. Later, dementia turns cruel, becoming a torture to the unrecognized family members and a prison to the confused sufferer.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Katherine, yes tis true!