The Strand
Four line poem about the sea20 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is excellent in every respect--skillfully written in iambic tetrameter with good mono-rhyming and very descriptive of a lovely time of relaxation.
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Your poem is excellent in every respect--skillfully written in iambic tetrameter with good mono-rhyming and very descriptive of a lovely time of relaxation.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thanks so much, Janice. I am so longing to go to a sunny beach somewhere. This COVID thing is so restricting. Ugh! I appreciate your comments!
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Dreaming of sea and sand Melissa? Holidays seem to be something of a dream these days. A fine well rhymed poem for the contest and I felt the wet sand between my toes here, love Dolly x
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Dreaming of sea and sand Melissa? Holidays seem to be something of a dream these days. A fine well rhymed poem for the contest and I felt the wet sand between my toes here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Hi Dolly... yes, I am dreaming of the sea, sandy beaches, and warm breezes.. I know that is a daily occurrence for you and I am so jealous. ;). Thanks for the comments.
Melissa
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The weather here is cold just now, the skies are grey and we have had a lot of rain! Temperatures around 19 Celsius x x x
Comment from Mrs. KT
Pick me!
Pick me!
I'll leave my "sheltering pines" and join you, Melissa!
How I wish I could zoom off somewhere warm - if only for a few days. I love my snow, but my body and soul could use a bit of warmth.
Very well-executed!
Thank you for sharing, Melissa!
diane
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Pick me!
Pick me!
I'll leave my "sheltering pines" and join you, Melissa!
How I wish I could zoom off somewhere warm - if only for a few days. I love my snow, but my body and soul could use a bit of warmth.
Very well-executed!
Thank you for sharing, Melissa!
diane
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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yes, I pick you, Diane, to go to the beach with me and soak in the warmth and the soft breezes. Now wouldnt that be so fun!! Thanks so much!!
Melissa
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Bucket List!
🙃💕
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, it seems you really like the ocean beachfront. Thanks for the fun mono-rhyme quatrain poem about the joys of being on the beach! Best wishes in the contest!
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Ah, it seems you really like the ocean beachfront. Thanks for the fun mono-rhyme quatrain poem about the joys of being on the beach! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Hello Helen. Thank you, sweet friend, for your lovely comment. So glad you enjoyed the sunny beach theme. :)
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
Very lovely entry into this contest, Melissa. I like the idea of the sand being a hand, and it most definitely can.
Wishing you much luck in the booths with a most inventive 4 line rhyme. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Very lovely entry into this contest, Melissa. I like the idea of the sand being a hand, and it most definitely can.
Wishing you much luck in the booths with a most inventive 4 line rhyme. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you Gloria. I am using so many member dollars that I have started looking to the contests in hopes of gaining more through that avenue. My first love is to just write and hang the consequences... LOL but, it does take money. :). So appreciated!!
Melissa
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
What a lovely way to think of spending January, whilst we are suffering from the cold and snow (extremely unusual 30 cm fall in Spain today I saw on the lunchtime news). I like the idea of the setting of your poem.
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What a lovely way to think of spending January, whilst we are suffering from the cold and snow (extremely unusual 30 cm fall in Spain today I saw on the lunchtime news). I like the idea of the setting of your poem.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
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Oh, I wish I could sail away to the beach and sunshine.. alas, it is just a dream. Thanks so much, Katherine.
Melissa
Comment from Every_Dia
Lovely poem! My recommendation on the first line would be to just add a comma. I like how you personified the ocean breezes and continue that into the 4th line. Well done :)
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Lovely poem! My recommendation on the first line would be to just add a comma. I like how you personified the ocean breezes and continue that into the 4th line. Well done :)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, I will definitely check out the comma situation. :). So glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
This reminded me of one of the many riddles in the traditional version of the old song, Scarborough Fair - tell him to find me an acre of land between the salt water and the sea sand. The answer being between the low and high tide marks.
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This reminded me of one of the many riddles in the traditional version of the old song, Scarborough Fair - tell him to find me an acre of land between the salt water and the sea sand. The answer being between the low and high tide marks.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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I love that old song and think I will listen to it again to gain some inspiration... also, I have been listening to The Bee Gees song I started a Joke... by Robin Gibb and it seems to be feeding the imagination too. We will see. Thanks, Jim.
Comment from Mistydawn
You painted a beautiful, relaxing picture using so few words. I could hear the ocean waves, the seagull's cries, the children laughing, having fun as I relax under the hot summery sun. My trip to the beach won't end with a sunburn for once. Your poem is well-written, very descriptive, thanks for taking me with you.
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You painted a beautiful, relaxing picture using so few words. I could hear the ocean waves, the seagull's cries, the children laughing, having fun as I relax under the hot summery sun. My trip to the beach won't end with a sunburn for once. Your poem is well-written, very descriptive, thanks for taking me with you.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
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Oh, I wish I could go to the beach on a warm sunny day... somewhere, anywhere. :). Thanks so much, Misty.
Melissa
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You and me both. A sexy Jamacian waiter by the name of Rohn will be serving fruity drinks, putting lotion on my back. I better stop at that before I get into trouble.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a beautiful poem about one of my favorite subjects and places: ocean.
I love the last line: as I recline beneath its hand.
Well done and I wish you best luck in winning the contest. I think you will.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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What a beautiful poem about one of my favorite subjects and places: ocean.
I love the last line: as I recline beneath its hand.
Well done and I wish you best luck in winning the contest. I think you will.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Hello Sweet Lisa... thank you for your encouraging review. It made my day!!
Melissa