Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Fine work--characters and dialog ring true. Lovely alliterative imagery--purple posies painted prairie!

seeing things come to life from the bottom up [comma] providing the clouds were not too fickle to give us rain.

war between the Indians=between tribes [war WITH the Indians]

hornets nest=>hornet's

hyphenate dove-painted

I recognized [him] from a portrait

held my mouth - if it could had been corralled (spaces surround dash)

Intro--Jane widowed--why did you omit the phrase you had in prior chapters "now remarried"?

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 Comment Written 06-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020

Yes, my intro left out critical part. I always appreciate any editing help. Thanks for the encouraging words! Making changes too!

Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.

Excellent

This is a great chapter and a joy to read. Jane is indeed a spitfire and full of gumption. This story has grown on me so much that I am wishful that there is more when I come to the end.

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 Comment Written 06-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020

Thanks, Rebecca. I'm humbly grateful.