Football - A Novel
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Comment from Sankey
This was a wonderful fully emotional and appropriate post in the right place. Thanks for a good read once more. Keep 'em coming. I am enjoying this story, as I do all your stuff. Not a spag anywhere!
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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This was a wonderful fully emotional and appropriate post in the right place. Thanks for a good read once more. Keep 'em coming. I am enjoying this story, as I do all your stuff. Not a spag anywhere!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from seaglass
Ah yes, stories need bridges. But actually we do see. Personality development in this piece. Looking forward to the discipline for Frost. The old fossil probably has tenure. I remember how the bad teachers always did. Remind me again what part of Texas we're in, please.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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Ah yes, stories need bridges. But actually we do see. Personality development in this piece. Looking forward to the discipline for Frost. The old fossil probably has tenure. I remember how the bad teachers always did. Remind me again what part of Texas we're in, please.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, all stories have bridge chapters, otherwise it would never go anywhere. Have you ever read a book that doesn't? I haven't. I uses it all the time as my story spans several decades.
I like your story a lot. This is not a high action nor a crime story that needs action on every other page. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Hi Barbara, all stories have bridge chapters, otherwise it would never go anywhere. Have you ever read a book that doesn't? I haven't. I uses it all the time as my story spans several decades.
I like your story a lot. This is not a high action nor a crime story that needs action on every other page. Ulla xx
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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I appreciate your review.
Comment from judiverse
Great post. Gabriel would do well to keep his distance. He could be adding to Katherine's problems of they appear too cozy. Maybe Frost's plan was to undermine her confidence so she won't be able to succeed. I'm curious to see what HR will do about him. He's probably discriminated against women before. She has the support of the other math teachers. They don't think much of Frost, either. I'm thinking that if Frost receives any kind of punishment, he'll make things that much harder for Katheirne. judi
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Great post. Gabriel would do well to keep his distance. He could be adding to Katherine's problems of they appear too cozy. Maybe Frost's plan was to undermine her confidence so she won't be able to succeed. I'm curious to see what HR will do about him. He's probably discriminated against women before. She has the support of the other math teachers. They don't think much of Frost, either. I'm thinking that if Frost receives any kind of punishment, he'll make things that much harder for Katheirne. judi
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. It looks like Katherine's first year of teaching will be very interesting. It helps that she has the other math teachers on her side. judi
Comment from royowen
Poor Katherine being accused of sleeping around isn't very good, but the truth has been wearing another coat in this instance. Having spoken with the potential perpetrator she's gone to face the music. A deliciously different pathway than your previous stories, this is a goodie. Well done Barbara, great scribing, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Poor Katherine being accused of sleeping around isn't very good, but the truth has been wearing another coat in this instance. Having spoken with the potential perpetrator she's gone to face the music. A deliciously different pathway than your previous stories, this is a goodie. Well done Barbara, great scribing, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, while the readers absolutely hate Mr. Frost. I can see some confusion for readers (outside of FanStory). What year does this novel take place? That would help the strangeness of what is happening with the characters and their responses.
notes:
Gabriel watched her walk. That's one strong lady.
- This is an odd line, considering the reader hasn't seen her do anything strong.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Hmm, while the readers absolutely hate Mr. Frost. I can see some confusion for readers (outside of FanStory). What year does this novel take place? That would help the strangeness of what is happening with the characters and their responses.
notes:
Gabriel watched her walk. That's one strong lady.
- This is an odd line, considering the reader hasn't seen her do anything strong.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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I will consider that line. Some of this stuff happens now. I've seen it in the past few years. Once a teacher has tenure it's almost impossible to get rid of them.
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Yes, It does, that's why I was wondering about the year. I don't recall it being mentioned anywhere. With #Meetoo thing, Frost's actions seem weird.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't know why it always seems there are people looking for any chance to bring others down to their own levels. Jealousy is bad enough, but envy is pure evil. You have me just waiting for Katherine's chance to prove her detractor's intentions. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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I don't know why it always seems there are people looking for any chance to bring others down to their own levels. Jealousy is bad enough, but envy is pure evil. You have me just waiting for Katherine's chance to prove her detractor's intentions. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Frost is the kind of person after school I would beat the tar out and swear up and down I saw a train hit him.
Keep it rolling
No doubt your teaching profession is a great help in writing this story.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Frost is the kind of person after school I would beat the tar out and swear up and down I saw a train hit him.
Keep it rolling
No doubt your teaching profession is a great help in writing this story.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
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I am spoiled to the Confederate, your first I read. This one is not your best. Good but just not you.
Comment from BethShelby
It seemed to me there was a lot happening. Katherine was reassured that no one would believe Frost and she found the strength to go back to her meeting. It seem everyone is on her side and Frost isn't very popular. The story is excellent and the dialogue helps us learn more about Gabriel and that isn't confident he knows how to handle women. I look forward to your next post.
Beth
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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It seemed to me there was a lot happening. Katherine was reassured that no one would believe Frost and she found the strength to go back to her meeting. It seem everyone is on her side and Frost isn't very popular. The story is excellent and the dialogue helps us learn more about Gabriel and that isn't confident he knows how to handle women. I look forward to your next post.
Beth
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. In some previous posts that a lot of action wasn't happening, I got gigged for it, so the comment.
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
I don't know any guys who carry sunscreen in their pockets - or that run to get water for anyone. That sounded a little off to me - for the Southern boys I was born and raised with. *smile*
--> "It's been a difficult lesson, and one I fought it all the way,
--> delete the second 'it'
Thanks!
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Barbara,
I don't know any guys who carry sunscreen in their pockets - or that run to get water for anyone. That sounded a little off to me - for the Southern boys I was born and raised with. *smile*
--> "It's been a difficult lesson, and one I fought it all the way,
--> delete the second 'it'
Thanks!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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I deleted it. As a football coach who was outside constantly sunscreen is a necessity. Yes, he would. I've known some and he runs almost everywhere. LOl Thank you for the kind review.