A Transport of Delight
A 20-syllable poem for the contest51 total reviews
Comment from Taurus the Elder
Very good. Short sweet an to the point, good presentation and supported by good art work. A solid rhyme included. Good contest entry. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Very good. Short sweet an to the point, good presentation and supported by good art work. A solid rhyme included. Good contest entry. Great job.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thanks very much for taking the time to review this short poem. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from juliaSjames
A clever play on the meaning of omnibus as well as an apt anology for life. We climb on and when we reach our final destination we get off. But the bus goes on its merry way.
Love the pic of the iconic red double decker. It brought back a host of memories of London and the many times I rode the bus.
Great title too, another play on words.
The rollicking metre simulates the rocking movement of the lumbering bus.
What do you think about eliminating "so" and starting the write with "This" ? Just a thought!
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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A clever play on the meaning of omnibus as well as an apt anology for life. We climb on and when we reach our final destination we get off. But the bus goes on its merry way.
Love the pic of the iconic red double decker. It brought back a host of memories of London and the many times I rode the bus.
Great title too, another play on words.
The rollicking metre simulates the rocking movement of the lumbering bus.
What do you think about eliminating "so" and starting the write with "This" ? Just a thought!
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thanks very much for taking the time to review this short poem, Julia. Appreciated. Glad it brought back happy memories.
I like your suggestion and will take it up. I was ambivalent about 'so'. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your twenty syllables in this warmhearted, uplifting poem. Your simile and metaphor blend to convey your moving message about the oneness of humanity.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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You have made excellent use of your twenty syllables in this warmhearted, uplifting poem. Your simile and metaphor blend to convey your moving message about the oneness of humanity.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thanks very much for taking the time to review this short poem. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from w.j.debi
I like the optimistic tone of you verse and the way it welcomes everyone to climb on board the omnibus of life. We must all make the journey, so why not enjoy it and the passengers along the way.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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I like the optimistic tone of you verse and the way it welcomes everyone to climb on board the omnibus of life. We must all make the journey, so why not enjoy it and the passengers along the way.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thanks very much for taking the time to review this short poem. Appreciated. All good wishes, WJ
Tony
Comment from Roberta Liszcz
So much. Amazing what a few words can do. I've always wanted to ride a double decker through a city, and now I feel like I have. Well written. Thank you for driving.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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So much. Amazing what a few words can do. I've always wanted to ride a double decker through a city, and now I feel like I have. Well written. Thank you for driving.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thanks very much for taking the time to review this short poem. Appreciated. Glad you enjoyed the ride! All good wishes, Tony
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Amazing how 20 little words could transport me to Jolly Old and my ride on a double decker. I enjoyed your thought, and accept your invitation. - Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Amazing how 20 little words could transport me to Jolly Old and my ride on a double decker. I enjoyed your thought, and accept your invitation. - Wendy
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thanks for your review of this micro-poem, Wendy. Good of you to drop by. Glad it brought back some happy memories for you. All the best, Tony
Comment from June Sargent
Oh - what fun it was to ride a double decker bus in a London years ago - heading for Piccadilly circle to see Richard Kiley in Man of La Mancha! Your poem brought back these wonderful memories . Thank you!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Oh - what fun it was to ride a double decker bus in a London years ago - heading for Piccadilly circle to see Richard Kiley in Man of La Mancha! Your poem brought back these wonderful memories . Thank you!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thanks for your review of this micro-poem, Wendy. Good of you to drop by. Glad it brought back some happy memories for you. All the best, Tony
Comment from strandregs
Hi Tony
Celebrating life is definitely in vogue and should always be.
Good subject for the contest
Fishes and plastic dishes
Big fat hen
And big boynging Ben.
:-))Z.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Hi Tony
Celebrating life is definitely in vogue and should always be.
Good subject for the contest
Fishes and plastic dishes
Big fat hen
And big boynging Ben.
:-))Z.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thanks for your review of this micro-poem, Z. Good of you to drop by. Your echo of Big Ben brought a smile! All the best, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
'POass further down the car!'The title harks back to that wonderful duo, Flanders and Swan and their ditty about the London omnibus. They were referring to the earlier RT model rather than the Routemaster RM pictured here. Those were the days when you could literally catch a bus by running along behind it and leaping aboard between stops, and every one had a conductor who sold you your ticket. 'Hold very tight please! [ting, ting!]'
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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'POass further down the car!'The title harks back to that wonderful duo, Flanders and Swan and their ditty about the London omnibus. They were referring to the earlier RT model rather than the Routemaster RM pictured here. Those were the days when you could literally catch a bus by running along behind it and leaping aboard between stops, and every one had a conductor who sold you your ticket. 'Hold very tight please! [ting, ting!]'
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Ah! Those were the days! A rack of proper tickets, too - not the ones the conductor rolled out of a machine like a length of pygmy toilet paper. I couldn't resist stealing the title from Flanders and Swann.
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And those tickets were all different colours too.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL Yes this contest entry hit the nail on the head. LOL I remember when we visited England, while stationed in Germany how I enjoyed seeing this double decker bus. I'd never seen on before. I enjoyed reading your poem and wish you the best of luck,
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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LOL Yes this contest entry hit the nail on the head. LOL I remember when we visited England, while stationed in Germany how I enjoyed seeing this double decker bus. I'd never seen on before. I enjoyed reading your poem and wish you the best of luck,
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thanks for your review of this micro-poem, Barbara. Good of you to drop by. Glad it brought back some happy memories for you. All the best, Tony