CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 146 "Warmth Lies Dormant"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Gramma Kathy
Brrr! This is a lovely haiku. It's brief - as necessary - but colours a large canvas of emotion.
I'd never thought of winter "consuming autumn's colors," but it makes perfect sense.
Beautifully written.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Brrr! This is a lovely haiku. It's brief - as necessary - but colours a large canvas of emotion.
I'd never thought of winter "consuming autumn's colors," but it makes perfect sense.
Beautifully written.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Hi Kathy, So glad you feel reeeeal cold right now after reading my haiku. Means I got to ya! ha! Thanks for highlighting those words. Means a lot. And thank you for your very generous review! With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from rmdelta
sixteezkid,
I've seen a lot of these poems and I never can understand them. I know what the words say, but not what the overall meaning of the poem is. In this case, your poem is so clear, so clean there is no disguising what it says. It is beautifully written, thank you. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Reggie
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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sixteezkid,
I've seen a lot of these poems and I never can understand them. I know what the words say, but not what the overall meaning of the poem is. In this case, your poem is so clear, so clean there is no disguising what it says. It is beautifully written, thank you. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Reggie
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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You can't decipher them? YOU?? Mr. Detective? HA!!!!! Just having a go at ya! That is such a cool compliment! Now, I'm blushing.....
It means so much to me to hear that you really liked it AND got something from it. Thank you so much for your very generous review and uplifting comments! With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sixteezkid...this is a great haiku. You have fulfilled all the requirements of haiku. Just one suggestion I would make either autumn or color singular..perhaps 'autumn colors' would be best. Just a thought as this is a fine haiku as it is. Good luck in the contest...blessings....chey
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Hi Sixteezkid...this is a great haiku. You have fulfilled all the requirements of haiku. Just one suggestion I would make either autumn or color singular..perhaps 'autumn colors' would be best. Just a thought as this is a fine haiku as it is. Good luck in the contest...blessings....chey
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Chey, a very fine suggestion! I REALLY wanted it to be as naked as possible of punctuation when I wrote it. This is a great idea. I do not know if you can change your works while in a contest, though. Never entered one before. Will check it out.
Thanks SO much for your very generous review and your very constructive comments. Warmest regards, Sue
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Yes you can change it even tho it is entered in a contest. I do it all the time so don't worry! Glad you liked the suggestion and were not offended by it....chey
Comment from SteveI
Short and sweet and to the point. That says it all and the pictuire is a gentle reminder.
Excellent poem.
Steve!
LOL They sent me back to say some more but my review fit your poem I dont know what else to say but more?
Good poem.
still Steve!
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Short and sweet and to the point. That says it all and the pictuire is a gentle reminder.
Excellent poem.
Steve!
LOL They sent me back to say some more but my review fit your poem I dont know what else to say but more?
Good poem.
still Steve!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
Comment from fastdigits
Your words that you use in
your Haiku paint the picture
of the gray, white winter bleaching
the vivid colors of Autumn and the
ground waiting again for spring to
come around and the cycle starts all
over again.
Well done
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Your words that you use in
your Haiku paint the picture
of the gray, white winter bleaching
the vivid colors of Autumn and the
ground waiting again for spring to
come around and the cycle starts all
over again.
Well done
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, this is great. One of the best haiku's I have read on this site.
You captured three seasons in 17 syllables! I love this!
I hope not to miss the voting for this contest. Will the winner be chosen by the Fanstory committee or the members?
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Wow, this is great. One of the best haiku's I have read on this site.
You captured three seasons in 17 syllables! I love this!
I hope not to miss the voting for this contest. Will the winner be chosen by the Fanstory committee or the members?
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
Comment from jamar2
Haiku is usually not my thing at all, but this one I did like as it covered the subject well, and the pic helps greatly, good luck with the entry.
jamar
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Haiku is usually not my thing at all, but this one I did like as it covered the subject well, and the pic helps greatly, good luck with the entry.
jamar
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
Comment from Rar22
Wonderful haiku. Love the use of 'blanches' and 'consuming.' The black and white color scheme is effective, as it goes nicely with the image of consuming color. Good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Wonderful haiku. Love the use of 'blanches' and 'consuming.' The black and white color scheme is effective, as it goes nicely with the image of consuming color. Good luck!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Rar, thank you so much for your very generous review and lovely comments. So glad you highlighted the words you liked! So much appreciated and with warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Adam Smith
Terrific! This is very expressive of this time of year. The image that you bring forth with these words is powerful and a great example of a winterscape, and the effects of winter on the land. Wonderful! Adam
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Terrific! This is very expressive of this time of year. The image that you bring forth with these words is powerful and a great example of a winterscape, and the effects of winter on the land. Wonderful! Adam
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Adam, I am so pleased you like it! Thank you very much for your most generous review and lovely comments! Yes....'tis the season! With regards, Sue
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
I think this is a strong title! it caught my eye! very good Haiku; since this is a contest entry though, I think I would give it a background (first editor) and use a white font (although when you do that, you no longer see it in the editor unless you highlight it)
well done! best wishes in the voting booth!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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I think this is a strong title! it caught my eye! very good Haiku; since this is a contest entry though, I think I would give it a background (first editor) and use a white font (although when you do that, you no longer see it in the editor unless you highlight it)
well done! best wishes in the voting booth!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for your very generous review and uplifting comments! I had someone suggest the photo, which I was pleased that I did afterall. But, when I tried to do some background, could not find it on the editor. Will attempt again. Again, many thanks. Warmest regards, Sue
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well then you must be using the advaced editor; on that one, change of background & text is the T icon on top; forget right now what the background is, but it's right text to the T; put your mouse over it and it will show you what it is :-) Blessings, Tricia
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You are a GENIUS!!! Go have a look at what it looks like now!!!!
...bowing....bowing.....most humbly! Ha! THANKS!