All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "She Turns the Page"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend t reads well with so much feeling incorporated in to the poem and finishes so smoothly I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend t reads well with so much feeling incorporated in to the poem and finishes so smoothly I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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thx so much Jill! :)S
Comment from prayingpoet
Oh how true. Life comes and life goes out. (Against our Mistress Time they'll not prevail.)
Great imagery and artwork as well as word pictures. Good flow, content and progression.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Oh how true. Life comes and life goes out. (Against our Mistress Time they'll not prevail.)
Great imagery and artwork as well as word pictures. Good flow, content and progression.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Unfortunately it is true, isn't it pp? GRR! :)S
Comment from Bill Schott
I like the Shakespearean sonnet format and the message of time's page-turning prerogative. You put the turn in just right at line nine, and the couplet summed it all up nicely.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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I like the Shakespearean sonnet format and the message of time's page-turning prerogative. You put the turn in just right at line nine, and the couplet summed it all up nicely.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Thx so much Bill! :)S
Comment from MelReyn
This makes me want to shake my fist at Time and curse her out. It also reminds me to be present, to cherish what I have now, for it will be gone tomorrow. That is a great message and one well worth sharing. Great work!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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This makes me want to shake my fist at Time and curse her out. It also reminds me to be present, to cherish what I have now, for it will be gone tomorrow. That is a great message and one well worth sharing. Great work!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Then you've definitely got the message of my piece Mel - thank you very much for your perceptive reading! :)S
Comment from huyba
Here is a good poem and I love it. It reminded me more love and care to parents and everyone in my family., less costly spend a lot of time and money that is wasted and not mean anything.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Here is a good poem and I love it. It reminded me more love and care to parents and everyone in my family., less costly spend a lot of time and money that is wasted and not mean anything.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much huyba! :)S
Comment from robina1978
Excellent picture you chose to complement this poem. It is such a well written Sonnet. A twist and lovely ending couplets. Best wishes for the prompt.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Excellent picture you chose to complement this poem. It is such a well written Sonnet. A twist and lovely ending couplets. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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thx so much robina! :)S
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most welcome
Comment from J. Dark
This is a remarkable sonnet. I am no expert on it's form but it looks and reads perfectly to me. You've got some wonderful alliteration "sky is skimmed", "birth our babes" and "days defying", for example. I love the phrasing of rose-filled candlelight and Mistress Time.
A top work and a very pleasing sonnet. Your final line is brilliant and gives wonderful closure. I wish you lots of luck for the competition, Sharyn.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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This is a remarkable sonnet. I am no expert on it's form but it looks and reads perfectly to me. You've got some wonderful alliteration "sky is skimmed", "birth our babes" and "days defying", for example. I love the phrasing of rose-filled candlelight and Mistress Time.
A top work and a very pleasing sonnet. Your final line is brilliant and gives wonderful closure. I wish you lots of luck for the competition, Sharyn.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Bless you Julie - I'm so glad you enjoyed this one - sonnets are the absolute DEVIL to write but ... go figure ... I must have been in the mood for some mental masturbation, right? :)))S
Comment from 9999pool
As we birth and then die, life will continue to the next generation,
We will lament at how fast things are moving forward. Our love for our parents continue its journey even past the passage of time in death.
We will still celebrate our lives with glee and believe that it was a life worth living to the end.
All we could do now is smile and turn another page, another chapter of our short journey homewards bound.
Thanks for sharing.
Good imagery of love and old age and the loss we all feel when the time comes a-calling.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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As we birth and then die, life will continue to the next generation,
We will lament at how fast things are moving forward. Our love for our parents continue its journey even past the passage of time in death.
We will still celebrate our lives with glee and believe that it was a life worth living to the end.
All we could do now is smile and turn another page, another chapter of our short journey homewards bound.
Thanks for sharing.
Good imagery of love and old age and the loss we all feel when the time comes a-calling.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Bless you Ritchie! :))S
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You have a blessed day too. Ritchie :))).
Comment from KatieKennedy
So very true and great descriptions and imagery of the passage of time. I love the way Time laughs and turns the page at the end! A good read. Thank you. Katie
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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So very true and great descriptions and imagery of the passage of time. I love the way Time laughs and turns the page at the end! A good read. Thank you. Katie
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Katie! :)S
Comment from Rondeno
Brilliant, Sharyn. You follow the sonnet brief to the comma, even including the third-stanza pivot, and your iambic pentameter is smooth and flawless ... but, beyond all that, this poem speaks about something important. (Give us mere mortals a chance, will you? Move to an island with no internet connection!)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Brilliant, Sharyn. You follow the sonnet brief to the comma, even including the third-stanza pivot, and your iambic pentameter is smooth and flawless ... but, beyond all that, this poem speaks about something important. (Give us mere mortals a chance, will you? Move to an island with no internet connection!)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Bless you Michael - just had a sonnet bug today - incurable - internet or no dear! So glad you enjoyed this one! Hmm ... no internet connection ... on second thoughts ... that sounds rather nice ...