Soaring
Short 15 Syllables28 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
What a wonderful meshing of artwork and words. It has almost a religious feeling to it. I can see why it took second place in the contest. Congrats.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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What a wonderful meshing of artwork and words. It has almost a religious feeling to it. I can see why it took second place in the contest. Congrats.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Hi Joan. Thank you very much for this encouraging review!!
Melissa
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Don't mention it.
Joan
Comment from tempeste
Last year I captured the sun , a red orange disc at dusk between a bunch of trees ..sadly the photo didn't capture the intensity of the sun.
This photo instead captures all the beauty of that moment ... a serene moment which your words suggest so effectively.
I love searching for eye catching pics but I still lack the skill to describe in so few words the emotions that such visions evoke in me.
I love this entry.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Last year I captured the sun , a red orange disc at dusk between a bunch of trees ..sadly the photo didn't capture the intensity of the sun.
This photo instead captures all the beauty of that moment ... a serene moment which your words suggest so effectively.
I love searching for eye catching pics but I still lack the skill to describe in so few words the emotions that such visions evoke in me.
I love this entry.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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I am so glad this verse spoke to you, tempeste. I love the sea at dusk and can feel its calming influence. Thank you so much.
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Wow. What can I say? Your words take my breath away. :) Not bad, Melissa. I wish I could express myself with a limited number of words. The picture gives your poem meaning. It is beautiful. This is a veery good entry for the 15 syllables Poem contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Wow. What can I say? Your words take my breath away. :) Not bad, Melissa. I wish I could express myself with a limited number of words. The picture gives your poem meaning. It is beautiful. This is a veery good entry for the 15 syllables Poem contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Hi Jose!! Thank you for the lovely words and review. I am sincerely glad you like it.
Melissa
Comment from Mark D. R.
beautifully written and illustrated AND in only 15 syllables !
peaceful embrace is the feeling one gets at dusk by the waterside
best wishes for your contest entry
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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beautifully written and illustrated AND in only 15 syllables !
peaceful embrace is the feeling one gets at dusk by the waterside
best wishes for your contest entry
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much, Mark!!
Comment from Pantygynt
This is very good indeed. Quite often this shortform pieces, other than haiku and tanka, while sticking to the correct syllable count, utterly fail to be poetic. This one expresses what you wish to say very poetically, creating a abeautiful image in the mind of the reader. This could do well in the contest. I hope it does.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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This is very good indeed. Quite often this shortform pieces, other than haiku and tanka, while sticking to the correct syllable count, utterly fail to be poetic. This one expresses what you wish to say very poetically, creating a abeautiful image in the mind of the reader. This could do well in the contest. I hope it does.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Jim. I hope it gives the reader a peaceful feeling. I try to write so that the reader can feel something. Hope this succeeds. :)
Melissa
Comment from zanya
It's a little gem this fifteen syllable poem expressing the sheer beauty of this moment of the day when dusk falls and the world enters stillness mode - such a beautiful pic
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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It's a little gem this fifteen syllable poem expressing the sheer beauty of this moment of the day when dusk falls and the world enters stillness mode - such a beautiful pic
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much, Zanya! I am so glad you liked this little verse.
Melissa
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great image and
nice presentation, Melissa.
-The syllable count is good
and the imagery is vivid
and creates a good word
picture of the scene.
-You also create a
very peaceful, soothing mood.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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-Great image and
nice presentation, Melissa.
-The syllable count is good
and the imagery is vivid
and creates a good word
picture of the scene.
-You also create a
very peaceful, soothing mood.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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I appreciate you taking the time to comment and review, Pam.
Melissa
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You are welcome, Melissa.
Comment from CD Richards
A lovely, beautifully descriptive short poem, Melissa. You've chosen a perfect artwork for it as well. I'm sure this will be right up there in the judges' minds come time to choose a winner. Well done, Craig
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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A lovely, beautifully descriptive short poem, Melissa. You've chosen a perfect artwork for it as well. I'm sure this will be right up there in the judges' minds come time to choose a winner. Well done, Craig
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Hi Craig! Thank you for your lovely comments and review. I like to write about the moon...
Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A very cool and calming offering for the contest, Melissa -- you gather the reader up off the shoreline and soar into the breezes then gently embrace them as night falls... great job! :) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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A very cool and calming offering for the contest, Melissa -- you gather the reader up off the shoreline and soar into the breezes then gently embrace them as night falls... great job! :) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 19-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Hi Yvette. Thanks a lot for your comments. I felt like I was soaring along side of you. :). Much appareciated.
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
What an amazing picture, and you managed to capture its essence in your short poem. I feel more serene for having read your 15 syllables! Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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What an amazing picture, and you managed to capture its essence in your short poem. I feel more serene for having read your 15 syllables! Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 19-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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Thank you Joan. I enjoy writing about the peacefulness of the moon. I am glad you felt the serenity in the words!!
Melissa
