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Comment from jenintorre
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I really like this Haiku poem and the perfect artwork that you've chosen. I think it has a very good chance in the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 31-May-2019


reply by the author on 31-May-2019
    Thank-you very much Jen, for your review and best wishes. Cheers, Kev.
Comment from evesayshi
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In my opinion, a thoroughly charming write - the entire presentation is warm and moves smoothly in gently rhyming verse - complies fully with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...

 Comment Written 30-May-2019


reply by the author on 31-May-2019
    Thanks Eve for your review and kind comments. Cheers, Kev.
reply by evesayshi on 31-May-2019
    You're very welcome, Kev, my pleasure...Eve
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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You have made excellent use of all your syllables in this appealing haiku. Nature's creatures are putting on a show for us observers, who are in amazement over them.

 Comment Written 29-May-2019


reply by the author on 30-May-2019
    Thank-you so much for your review and comments.
    Cheers, Kev.
Comment from Gail Denham
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Nice poem. Neat picture. Amazing different animals and birds in Australia. Always liked the sound of this bird's name. They're kind of cute. Thanks for sharing some of your wildlife.

 Comment Written 29-May-2019


reply by the author on 29-May-2019
    Thanks Gail for your review and comments, much obliged, cheers, Kev.
Comment from lyenochka
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What a great poem about the Kookaburra! As a child, I learned a song about this interesting bird. Enjoyed your haiku, which you formatted nicely in lowercase. Loved that picture!

Another form that I've been taught here is that the title should be the first line like this:
haiku (staring roving eyes)

 Comment Written 29-May-2019


reply by the author on 29-May-2019
    Thanks M8, for your review and comments. I like to try new ways of writing poetry, main thing is to have a go. Cheers, Kev.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed your poem. Your art choice plus well-chosen words pair nicely. I like the alliteration of 'w'. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 28-May-2019


reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Thanks so much Jan for reviewing my poem, much obliged. Cheers, Kev.
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Great to watch nature to inspire your writing!

I especially like the 5-7-5 Haiku format.

Minor nitpick that does not change my review: IMHO this bird name does not need to be capitalized. It is your poetic choice to insert a comma or not after 'worms' or change to: "the prize: wiggly worms!" Otherwise, when we parse the sentence wriggly is the noun and worms becomes the verb LOL

 Comment Written 28-May-2019


reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Thanks Mark for previewing and your kind advice, cheers, Kev.
Comment from Rmocruz
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I am not familiar with the native birds from down under, but the ones here
In the USA prize the worms as well. Great job in writing this worthy contest
entry. Best wishes!

 Comment Written 28-May-2019


reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Thanks very much M8, cheers, Kev.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem. There is nothing else that birds want than a worm and a warm cozy nest to sleep at night. That is their only need in their lives and for the rest they trust God to provide for them.

 Comment Written 28-May-2019


reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Thanks Sandra for perusal of my poem and your comments. If only our lives were so simple, cheers, Kev.
Comment from royowen
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You only get these birds in Australia, (at least in the Wild) laughing jackass is another name. This is an excellent haiku as an entry in this haiku poetry contest, well done, good luck, blessings Roy,

 Comment Written 28-May-2019


reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Thanks Roy, old M8 and you are correct in the name alternative for the kookaburra and in Australia there are many types of jackass and they all have different color and beaks. Cheers, Kev.
reply by royowen on 29-May-2019
    Most welcome