She Waits
It Springs Eternal13 total reviews
Comment from crybry67
Wonderful poem, rather sad. We feel her steadfast determination to never give up. I really enjoyed your example of the cinquain form. The artwork and background color chosen are the perfect complement.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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Wonderful poem, rather sad. We feel her steadfast determination to never give up. I really enjoyed your example of the cinquain form. The artwork and background color chosen are the perfect complement.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Sheik S. Peer
Nicely done Cinquin poem. Well presented with the photo and tells a sad story. Sad that women of past generations spent much time waiting when they could have loved themselves. As the clock ticks, snow falls and hair grays.... they didn't need to wait for love. thought provoking poem
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Nicely done Cinquin poem. Well presented with the photo and tells a sad story. Sad that women of past generations spent much time waiting when they could have loved themselves. As the clock ticks, snow falls and hair grays.... they didn't need to wait for love. thought provoking poem
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from WalkerMan
This is as good a use of the Cinquain form as can ever be expected, and a perfect match for the chosen illustration. What is most evident here is endless patience. The sadness is more in the eye of the beholder than on the face of this woman, whatever she may feel inside, for no indication of tearfulness or anguish shows in either picture or words. What she waits for cannot be expressed more clearly, nor can the three signs of the passage of time that she so stoically ignores. This post well deserves publication in anthologies of great love poetry, though you would need to establish clear rights to use of the picture. (It is all over the Internet, but no definitive source legally able to sell or grant rights is evident.) The poem alone is worth the Six, though the picture certainly adds to its
effect on the reader.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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This is as good a use of the Cinquain form as can ever be expected, and a perfect match for the chosen illustration. What is most evident here is endless patience. The sadness is more in the eye of the beholder than on the face of this woman, whatever she may feel inside, for no indication of tearfulness or anguish shows in either picture or words. What she waits for cannot be expressed more clearly, nor can the three signs of the passage of time that she so stoically ignores. This post well deserves publication in anthologies of great love poetry, though you would need to establish clear rights to use of the picture. (It is all over the Internet, but no definitive source legally able to sell or grant rights is evident.) The poem alone is worth the Six, though the picture certainly adds to its
effect on the reader.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thank you very much
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You're welcome. I like it. -- Mike
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is how it's done! Magnificent! You have taken this form and set the bar with your beautifully sorrowful poem, IMHO. I am filled with emotion as I read this, and it doesn't get more evocative than that! If I wasn't already so darn late reviewing that my six would do nothing to promote this gem, I would gladly slap my last one on it!
*********************OUTSTANDING!*************************
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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This is how it's done! Magnificent! You have taken this form and set the bar with your beautifully sorrowful poem, IMHO. I am filled with emotion as I read this, and it doesn't get more evocative than that! If I wasn't already so darn late reviewing that my six would do nothing to promote this gem, I would gladly slap my last one on it!
*********************OUTSTANDING!*************************
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much.
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It was my pleasure. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Cinquain poem. To wait for love to return can take a very long time. When the heart is broken that is all the Lady wants to do is wait.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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A very well-written Cinquain poem. To wait for love to return can take a very long time. When the heart is broken that is all the Lady wants to do is wait.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from Muffins
The Cinquain format is penned using imagery one would associate with this situation. The syllable count is correct.
The poem reads quiet spilling out loneliness all over the page. A sad understanding of someone waiting for another, who most likely, has moved on and found another to love.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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The Cinquain format is penned using imagery one would associate with this situation. The syllable count is correct.
The poem reads quiet spilling out loneliness all over the page. A sad understanding of someone waiting for another, who most likely, has moved on and found another to love.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much, Muffins.
Comment from Nika2016
Well..give up and get on with life...spilled milk..
It is a sad bittersweet poem...but evokes emotion and empathy.
picture perfect...
Nice.
xxxxxxx
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Well..give up and get on with life...spilled milk..
It is a sad bittersweet poem...but evokes emotion and empathy.
picture perfect...
Nice.
xxxxxxx
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much.
Comment from tfawcus
There's certainly a look of resignation on her face! A nicely written Cinquain that depicts the fate with some sympathy of one whose love has departed. You have created a melancholy atmosphere with your well-chosen words. I particularly like the use of ellipsis and enjambment in your second to last line.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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There's certainly a look of resignation on her face! A nicely written Cinquain that depicts the fate with some sympathy of one whose love has departed. You have created a melancholy atmosphere with your well-chosen words. I particularly like the use of ellipsis and enjambment in your second to last line.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Halfree
Damn good, Read it, liked it, reread it and liked it more, Great story told in a few words.
Think this is one of your best. The 6 says it all.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Damn good, Read it, liked it, reread it and liked it more, Great story told in a few words.
Think this is one of your best. The 6 says it all.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much.
Comment from reconciled
waited...
did she long age
anticipating love
known once perfect, Holy matchless
Jesus...
Hey Lance...-smile-
very well written. perhaps though she just honored a love known once and for all.hope you win Bro. love to you...michael
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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waited...
did she long age
anticipating love
known once perfect, Holy matchless
Jesus...
Hey Lance...-smile-
very well written. perhaps though she just honored a love known once and for all.hope you win Bro. love to you...michael
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much. Poetry is not my normal thing. This means a lot coming from you.
