A Tangle of Wildflowers
...could hope be?36 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
An excellent entry for the Penning Hope competition. You have done a very fine job with this beautiful expression. So many great words composed -
"A tangle of wild flowers given away.
Hope is air beneath tattered wings
Hope is a song my heart still dares to sing"
Love these lines. So descriptive, moving and hopeful. Bravo and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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An excellent entry for the Penning Hope competition. You have done a very fine job with this beautiful expression. So many great words composed -
"A tangle of wild flowers given away.
Hope is air beneath tattered wings
Hope is a song my heart still dares to sing"
Love these lines. So descriptive, moving and hopeful. Bravo and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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You are so kind with your review, Poemsof DD. Your words mean so much, thank you.
Senyai
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It was my pleasure ~DD
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is so good, a great contest entry for 'hope'. It is well written and you have asked questions and even answered them in that your heart still dares to sing, we all have hope for better tomorrows, it is far better than giving up. Well done, and good luck! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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This is so good, a great contest entry for 'hope'. It is well written and you have asked questions and even answered them in that your heart still dares to sing, we all have hope for better tomorrows, it is far better than giving up. Well done, and good luck! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Why, thank you Sandra. I appreciate your kind words and review on my work :)
Senyai
Comment from Autumn Splendour
I think no matter how cliched,
hope is air beneath tattered wings
No matter how my life is played
hope is song my heart still dares to sing
The whole poem pivots on the last stanza. Yes, it is hope we cling to when all seems lost and hopeless.
I love the diction, the cadence and the flow. Beautiful
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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I think no matter how cliched,
hope is air beneath tattered wings
No matter how my life is played
hope is song my heart still dares to sing
The whole poem pivots on the last stanza. Yes, it is hope we cling to when all seems lost and hopeless.
I love the diction, the cadence and the flow. Beautiful
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Thank you Autumn. You have made my day with the gift of six. Your kind praise is truly appreciated :)
Senyai
Comment from Writeling
Hi, This is a competent answer to the task. I particularly like:
'I think no matter how cliched,
hope is air beneath tattered wings'
When I was reading the last line, I automatically put a 'the' before 'song'. Does it scan better?
With best wishes, Writeling
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Hi, This is a competent answer to the task. I particularly like:
'I think no matter how cliched,
hope is air beneath tattered wings'
When I was reading the last line, I automatically put a 'the' before 'song'. Does it scan better?
With best wishes, Writeling
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Hi, Writeling, I appreciate your fine review and suggestion. I had a bit of trouble with that line and tried several wordings but think I will leave as is.
Thanks again for the excellent rating.
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
How true your words are. I think you raise a lot of important points because there is always hope to be found in an attitude of grace and discovery.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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How true your words are. I think you raise a lot of important points because there is always hope to be found in an attitude of grace and discovery.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Hi Giddy. Thank you very much for your generous review. Your words mean so much. :)
Senyai
Comment from jusylee72
Beautiful entry in the Penning Hope prompt. Picture was perfect. I think you gave some great examples of searching for hope. Questioning life is sometimes what we have to do.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Beautiful entry in the Penning Hope prompt. Picture was perfect. I think you gave some great examples of searching for hope. Questioning life is sometimes what we have to do.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Hi Jusylee,
What a wonderful review. I appreciate your thoughts so much.
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
Comment from Sandisan
A good poem. It has a good flow to it and a good sense of rhyme.
I like that searching for hope you never give up totally about
finding hope. It is written very well and I can find nothing to change
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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A good poem. It has a good flow to it and a good sense of rhyme.
I like that searching for hope you never give up totally about
finding hope. It is written very well and I can find nothing to change
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Hi Sandisan,
Thank you for your review and kind words. So happy you found it said something to you.
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
Comment from Bill O'Bier
I enjoyed this poem and it is a great contest entry. I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. One stanza truly resonates with me at this time:
I think no matter how cliched,
hope is air beneath tattered wings
No matter how my life is played
hope is song my heart still dares to sing
Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you all the best-
Bill
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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I enjoyed this poem and it is a great contest entry. I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. One stanza truly resonates with me at this time:
I think no matter how cliched,
hope is air beneath tattered wings
No matter how my life is played
hope is song my heart still dares to sing
Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you all the best-
Bill
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you Bill, I truly appreciate your thoughts and generous review.
Have a great weekend:)
Senyai
Comment from Spitfire
Whoever wrote this bespeaks my state of minds these days.
So fatigued with playing it off the cuff
I need the glint of better tomorrows
a crisp answer to uncertainty
While this could be about so many things: a broken marriage, the death of a loved one, etc. in my case the lines work for me as a caregiver for my husband.
hope is air beneath tattered wings
Yes, finding it harder to fly every day.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Whoever wrote this bespeaks my state of minds these days.
So fatigued with playing it off the cuff
I need the glint of better tomorrows
a crisp answer to uncertainty
While this could be about so many things: a broken marriage, the death of a loved one, etc. in my case the lines work for me as a caregiver for my husband.
hope is air beneath tattered wings
Yes, finding it harder to fly every day.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you Spitfire, I truly appreciate your thoughts and generous review. (I fell your pain...it is so hard to care for the one who made your heart skip a beat, picked you up in his arms, supported you and now all has changed but only in the physical. The heart still holds the flame but the legs are just tired... but take heart, somehow it will all work out. God bless.)
Senyai
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Picking the wildflowers as a symbol of hope is genius. Your poem flows the way that breath can breathe in hope and breathe out faith for a better future.
Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Picking the wildflowers as a symbol of hope is genius. Your poem flows the way that breath can breathe in hope and breathe out faith for a better future.
Well done.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016
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Thank you Nancy, I truly appreciate your thoughts and generous review .Your words made my day :)
Have a great weekend:)
Senyai