Her Last Kiss
A little fun in 60 words13 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
A doozie of a kiss, I should think, to have all that power and control.
Good entry, and good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Hi,
A doozie of a kiss, I should think, to have all that power and control.
Good entry, and good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hmm, this was especially poetic prose, and highly enjoyable. I have one tiny suggestion - a comma, here - "If not mine in life(,) then in death." You fulfilled the prompt's requirements easily, even including rhyme - nicely done.
Hmm, this was especially poetic prose, and highly enjoyable. I have one tiny suggestion - a comma, here - "If not mine in life(,) then in death." You fulfilled the prompt's requirements easily, even including rhyme - nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A clever little piece -
a drama in so few words...
a good entry for the contest.
good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret
A clever little piece -
a drama in so few words...
a good entry for the contest.
good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from Tatarka2
I commend you for taking on this difficult challenge. This is indeed a complete story in 60 words. I just didn't exactly see how the characters developed, or in fact know who they were. It's a tough task in so few words, I know. I just thought this could have been a bit more complete, even within the word limit.
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
I commend you for taking on this difficult challenge. This is indeed a complete story in 60 words. I just didn't exactly see how the characters developed, or in fact know who they were. It's a tough task in so few words, I know. I just thought this could have been a bit more complete, even within the word limit.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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May I ask? Are you in this contest too? If so, how many other entries did you mark down? What do you think that looks like?
Comment from humpwhistle
Hmmm, a story disguised as a poem, or a poem disguised as a story? In my opinion (not binding), it's more a poem, as it lacks some of the key elements of a story.
Just an opinion.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Hmmm, a story disguised as a poem, or a poem disguised as a story? In my opinion (not binding), it's more a poem, as it lacks some of the key elements of a story.
Just an opinion.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from Walu Feral
OOPS! G'day mate. That is very well done. It is hard to tell a complete story in 60 words when my poems take between 480 and 600 words to do the same thing. Good luck in the contest, you have a big chance with this one. Cheers fez
OOPS! G'day mate. That is very well done. It is hard to tell a complete story in 60 words when my poems take between 480 and 600 words to do the same thing. Good luck in the contest, you have a big chance with this one. Cheers fez
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from scd41
The fantasy 60 word story raised more questions than it answered. When one is not sure if the woman is a witch or fairy, why should he make a vow to marry her? An knowingly why should one go for the kiss of death? Anyway, best of luck for the contest.
The fantasy 60 word story raised more questions than it answered. When one is not sure if the woman is a witch or fairy, why should he make a vow to marry her? An knowingly why should one go for the kiss of death? Anyway, best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from Jacob Collins
A well written piece of writing. I thought that you responded to the contest task well with this piece. I couldn't find anything to critique about your work. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
A well written piece of writing. I thought that you responded to the contest task well with this piece. I couldn't find anything to critique about your work. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from giraffmang
Hello there,
This is an interesting piece for the competition. A bit different. Nice fantasy element.
Good luck in the contest.
GMG
Hello there,
This is an interesting piece for the competition. A bit different. Nice fantasy element.
Good luck in the contest.
GMG
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
Comment from rjuselius
never underestimate a woman scorned is what i have experienced lately. dating a man whose ex can't handle it and makes our life miserable. this piece of literary art conveys the same message.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
blessings!
rebekka x
never underestimate a woman scorned is what i have experienced lately. dating a man whose ex can't handle it and makes our life miserable. this piece of literary art conveys the same message.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015