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3 total reviews
Comment from grammy3
I enjoyed every minute reading this, stopping only to refresh my coffee. You have done a spectacular job.
I found myself getting angry with the doctor, thinking of him as an egotistical and pathological liar.
The dialogue is intense. keeping me glued to every word.
This would make a great screen play. I would not be surprised at all if Law and Order would consider it. Love it, love it!!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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I enjoyed every minute reading this, stopping only to refresh my coffee. You have done a spectacular job.
I found myself getting angry with the doctor, thinking of him as an egotistical and pathological liar.
The dialogue is intense. keeping me glued to every word.
This would make a great screen play. I would not be surprised at all if Law and Order would consider it. Love it, love it!!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Grammy____Thank you, thank , thank you. I'minspired and encouraged. Appreciate the six stars
Comment from Bill Schott
Riveting! I can't believe that you had me reading this through. I kept thinking the lawyer had him. Fun dialog and inner monologs. There, as you noted, several revision needs for minor mechanics.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Riveting! I can't believe that you had me reading this through. I kept thinking the lawyer had him. Fun dialog and inner monologs. There, as you noted, several revision needs for minor mechanics.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Bill---Thanks for great review. I'm inspired. I'll review it for content and typos.--Thanks again----Doug
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was excellent. Wonderful pacing. I love the details such as when he took the pill. He didn't just take it - you describe the process. I wonder if he would want to be more discreet? I think that would add some suspense and conflict. Take advantage of any opportunity. The entire scene before the judge was wonderful. A terrific chapter. Great job.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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I thought this was excellent. Wonderful pacing. I love the details such as when he took the pill. He didn't just take it - you describe the process. I wonder if he would want to be more discreet? I think that would add some suspense and conflict. Take advantage of any opportunity. The entire scene before the judge was wonderful. A terrific chapter. Great job.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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Michael---Thanks for wonderful review. I've been struggling with this chapter for weeks. Intend to submit part 2 to fanstory in a week or so. Thanks for inspiration. Doug