The Teddy Bear and the Puppy
How to be friends.36 total reviews
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Sandra
What delights I miss out on when I miss your postings. It is great you can keep up some writing, hopefully brings you some happy time.
It is remarkable you have no training and just so natural. You do make this kind of poetry look easy. I have done rhyme poems ... yet I find them much more difficult than free verse. You have written a children's poem which is interesting and enjoyable for adults ... after all we are the ones who read them a billion times over. lol I like the inserted message of friendship and to not pass over old friends for new ones. Fantastic presentation and selection of image.
"Teddy/tiny/tear-drop/trickled", "world went wrong", some strong alliteration combined with loads of assonance and consonance which all makes a delightful resonance and echo effect throughout. Lovely work. I have enjoyed immensely. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxox
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
  |
Hi Sandra
What delights I miss out on when I miss your postings. It is great you can keep up some writing, hopefully brings you some happy time.
It is remarkable you have no training and just so natural. You do make this kind of poetry look easy. I have done rhyme poems ... yet I find them much more difficult than free verse. You have written a children's poem which is interesting and enjoyable for adults ... after all we are the ones who read them a billion times over. lol I like the inserted message of friendship and to not pass over old friends for new ones. Fantastic presentation and selection of image.
"Teddy/tiny/tear-drop/trickled", "world went wrong", some strong alliteration combined with loads of assonance and consonance which all makes a delightful resonance and echo effect throughout. Lovely work. I have enjoyed immensely. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxox
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
-
Aww, what a lovely review, Thank you so very much, Lovi, you have made my day! :) Sandra xsx
Comment from Akanksha Mahajan
Very sweet poem. There is a lot of things to be learned from this teddy bear that even if someone trouble us(picked him up and found his ear to chew!) we should be good and be friends with all.
Nice rhymes. No other picture would be suitable for this poem.
Thank you for sharing!!!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
|
Very sweet poem. There is a lot of things to be learned from this teddy bear that even if someone trouble us(picked him up and found his ear to chew!) we should be good and be friends with all.
Nice rhymes. No other picture would be suitable for this poem.
Thank you for sharing!!!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
-
Thank you so much, Akanksha, for you lovely review. Yes, I was really pleased to find that illustration, it was just perfect. :) Sandra
Comment from mfowler
This is a good child's poem underpinned by an excellent message about friendship and respect. The puppy and teddy bear are such appealing characters for kids that you were on a winner from the start. Combining the puppy's naughty behaviour with the emotions of the teddy brought out a wonderful emotional response from the characters.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
|
This is a good child's poem underpinned by an excellent message about friendship and respect. The puppy and teddy bear are such appealing characters for kids that you were on a winner from the start. Combining the puppy's naughty behaviour with the emotions of the teddy brought out a wonderful emotional response from the characters.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
-
Thank you so much, for your really nice words about my poem! I haven't read this one to my grandson yet, he is my 'worst/best' critic! LOL. xsx sandra
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. This is a super wee ditty for kids. Well, and for adults like me who still have a bear on their bed! My dog knows which toys are hers and which bears are mine. She loves hers to bits, literally, she does not chew, she cleans then...poor wee things
The lively little puppy dog looked at the teddy bear.
He smiled at him and promised to always treat him with care.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
|
Hello. This is a super wee ditty for kids. Well, and for adults like me who still have a bear on their bed! My dog knows which toys are hers and which bears are mine. She loves hers to bits, literally, she does not chew, she cleans then...poor wee things
The lively little puppy dog looked at the teddy bear.
He smiled at him and promised to always treat him with care.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
-
Thank you so very much for your lovely review. I am pleased I am not the only one to have a teddy (or more) on my bed! LOL. :) xsx Sandra
Comment from Uniqusatya
Yeah a good message expressed so softly.Makes a good children's read.I remember I too had written with the same theme,think I had posted here too,yes"Friendship"...
Happy writing.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
|
Yeah a good message expressed so softly.Makes a good children's read.I remember I too had written with the same theme,think I had posted here too,yes"Friendship"...
Happy writing.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
-
Thank you so much for your lovely review. It is a good way to teach children how friendship can make you happy. I will look for your one. xsx Sandra
Comment from persevere
A charming tale related in flowing verse.A puppy being friendly with a teddy bear is not all that unrealistic. I have seen orphaned wild animals being given stuffed toys to which they have become firmly attached.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
|
A charming tale related in flowing verse.A puppy being friendly with a teddy bear is not all that unrealistic. I have seen orphaned wild animals being given stuffed toys to which they have become firmly attached.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
-
Thank you so much for your lovely review, Persever. We had a cat who pinched a little girls stuffed giraffe, (she let him keep it) he took it everywhere with him, the neighbours would laugh when they saw him coming along with it in him mouth. If he dropped it, his mum picked it up and gave it back to him. I could tell some stories!!! Thank you again, for your lovely review. xsx Sandra
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
Now, cuddly little teddy bear is puppy dog's best friend.
They go together everywhere and will do till the end.
And does the little girl still want them like she used to do?
Of course she does; she loves her teddy, and the puppy too! [ ok this is pure and genuine work, and i adore the style adopted in this one)
K
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
|
Now, cuddly little teddy bear is puppy dog's best friend.
They go together everywhere and will do till the end.
And does the little girl still want them like she used to do?
Of course she does; she loves her teddy, and the puppy too! [ ok this is pure and genuine work, and i adore the style adopted in this one)
K
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
-
Thank you so very much, Kashif, for your wonderful review! I am delighted you enjoyed it. :) Sandra
Comment from IndianaIrish
An adorable, heart-warming poem about friendship, Sangra. I bet kids will love the emotion of the words. And I agree that the artwork is perfect!
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
|
An adorable, heart-warming poem about friendship, Sangra. I bet kids will love the emotion of the words. And I agree that the artwork is perfect!
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
-
Thank you, Karyn, for your sweet words, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra
Comment from heyjude
Sandra, what a cute poem. I love your children's
stories and poems. What a sweet picture you
found to go along with your poem.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
|
Sandra, what a cute poem. I love your children's
stories and poems. What a sweet picture you
found to go along with your poem.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
-
That is such a nice thing to say, Judy, thank you so very much! :) Sandra xsx
Comment from 24chas
This was very enjoyable, sandramitchell. I really enjoy a story in verse form like this. I know children would really enjoy it. Nice job.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
|
This was very enjoyable, sandramitchell. I really enjoy a story in verse form like this. I know children would really enjoy it. Nice job.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
-
That is no nice of you, Chas, thank you so much! :) Sandra