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Comment from goompa
A very sensitive poem with an important message to keep on keepin' on. YOur piecehighlights the notion that tings tend to balance out if we don't give up
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
A very sensitive poem with an important message to keep on keepin' on. YOur piecehighlights the notion that tings tend to balance out if we don't give up
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thanks goomoa. Right on!
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is very good poem written in quatrains. It has great aabb rhymes that are not forced. The flow is very smooth.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
This is very good poem written in quatrains. It has great aabb rhymes that are not forced. The flow is very smooth.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much Teresa.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Trodden shadows in the snow Great line
Fleeting things that come and go
Tiny whispers on the breeze "
Autumn FALLS upon the trees USE 'leaves' 2x
Footprints will THEN melt away Flows better
Shadows fade at end of day
Promises might not be kept evocative
Fallen leaves get raked and swept love the 'eh' sounds
Often we must rearrange
Things once touched by winds of change
Dwell not on morbid sorrow
ANTICIPATE tomorrow
A few suggestions only. Loved the piece.
Regards:
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
Trodden shadows in the snow Great line
Fleeting things that come and go
Tiny whispers on the breeze "
Autumn FALLS upon the trees USE 'leaves' 2x
Footprints will THEN melt away Flows better
Shadows fade at end of day
Promises might not be kept evocative
Fallen leaves get raked and swept love the 'eh' sounds
Often we must rearrange
Things once touched by winds of change
Dwell not on morbid sorrow
ANTICIPATE tomorrow
A few suggestions only. Loved the piece.
Regards:
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you Stephen. Good suggestions.
Comment from Jackarrie
I enjoyed reading this lovely poem, the messages in it are sound. the image is just great and is so apt to your work.
Often we must rearrange
Things once touched by winds of change
No time for morbid sorrow
Look forward to tomorrow
I loved the whole poem but the conclusion is superb
Well done Mary
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
I enjoyed reading this lovely poem, the messages in it are sound. the image is just great and is so apt to your work.
Often we must rearrange
Things once touched by winds of change
No time for morbid sorrow
Look forward to tomorrow
I loved the whole poem but the conclusion is superb
Well done Mary
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you Mary, for reviewing and commenting.
Comment from robina1978
An excellent photo you made to complement this poem. I enjoyed the last two lines best. I try to do that at the moment. Good rhyme and flow. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
An excellent photo you made to complement this poem. I enjoyed the last two lines best. I try to do that at the moment. Good rhyme and flow. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you Ine.
Comment from MoIronE13
Rhythm & flow are must wonderful here
The season come and go as we should flow with them
Often we must rearrange
Things once touched by winds of change
***This is my favorite thought***
Just blowin' in the wind - just don't spit!!!! LOL
Thanks for sharing that longest night of the year.
Brighter longer days are ahead NOW..
Peace brother
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
Rhythm & flow are must wonderful here
The season come and go as we should flow with them
Often we must rearrange
Things once touched by winds of change
***This is my favorite thought***
Just blowin' in the wind - just don't spit!!!! LOL
Thanks for sharing that longest night of the year.
Brighter longer days are ahead NOW..
Peace brother
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you MolronE , Peace!
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From the Heart!
Comment from Devon Phipps
Tomorrow is always a better day. No matter how bad our days are going, we must always stay positive and focused. I couldn't find anything wrong in your poem. I just love how inspirational it is
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
Tomorrow is always a better day. No matter how bad our days are going, we must always stay positive and focused. I couldn't find anything wrong in your poem. I just love how inspirational it is
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much Devon.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I loved the message because you are absolutely right. Nothing stays the same and what is here today might be gone tomorrow. Who we had dinner with today might not be here tomorrow. Tomorrow is never promised. Great job with this friend.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
I loved the message because you are absolutely right. Nothing stays the same and what is here today might be gone tomorrow. Who we had dinner with today might not be here tomorrow. Tomorrow is never promised. Great job with this friend.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much ExoeriencingLiphe.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is an exceptional poem. It resonates with me. It has excellent rhyme and flow and a good rhyme scheme. It is written in beautiful figurative language.It portrays facts of life that we all must live. Hope you had a good Christmas.
Preston
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
Hi, Treischel,
This is an exceptional poem. It resonates with me. It has excellent rhyme and flow and a good rhyme scheme. It is written in beautiful figurative language.It portrays facts of life that we all must live. Hope you had a good Christmas.
Preston
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you Preston. I certainly did. I hope you did too. I appreciate your continued support and this award recognition.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A lovely sentiment to express and I, too, hope to experience better tomorrows.
Your have plotted and created step by step to unveil another poetic gem.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
A lovely sentiment to express and I, too, hope to experience better tomorrows.
Your have plotted and created step by step to unveil another poetic gem.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much Shirley. I'm glad you liked it.