Comment from adewpearl

Good

I personally like your use of rhyme, but for the purpose of the tanka in general and for this contest in particular, rhyming is not allowed.
I like the storm imagery and the very thoughtful message of faith you deliver. Brooke

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Brooke sorry it has taken me so long to respond to your review Seems like forever Hope to start reading and writing again soon Thanks for the review and pointing out my mistake Blessings

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

This has spot on syllables and strong spiritual message.
Only thing I can offer, try to minimize filler words like; in / a / so/ the :)
Otherwise well done and good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

"My life's in a storm 5
It feels like a hurricane 7
No matter its form 5
There is peace in Jesus name 7
So I'll trust him just the same." 7

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Maureen, sorry it has taken me so long to respond to your review,I haven't had time to write and read any thing in a while I am going through some tough times right now and don't have a chance to get on the computer often. Hope to get some time soon to get back into reading and writing Have a bless day Sandy

Comment from Liz Dunbee

Excellent

You have written an excellent poem. It is skilfully crafted following the rules of the contest. The content is lovely moving from a storm to peace. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Thanks for your review

Comment from Nishy81

Exceptional

Simple yet profound. These five lines speaks volumes.The various storms we face are indeed like various categories of hurricane, some pass through with minimal damages but others are life changing. No matter the storm there is indeed peace in the name of the Lord, so all we have to do is trust him in spite of. Really great piece, I can truly identify with it.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

thank you for your review

Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel

Excellent

I have never tried to write a Tanka, but it seems like an exacting form. You manage to wrangle your central message well and keep it from being lost in the mechanics of the form.

This is not part of the poem, but in your author's notes : "This to (too) will pass."

Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Thanks