Skies unfurled
5-7-5 poem15 total reviews
Comment from MelReyn
We've already had some snow, so I feel like fall lasted two weeks and then was gone. But that subtle change in the air, it always seems to hit me. Makes me want to go on an adventure or something. But adventures are code for trouble. Lots of trouble. So I guess I'll just have to get my gas fireplace in working order so I can enjoy a cozy fire and some hot tea instead. That's the safer option. ;)
I like your play on words here... the leaves summer behind part. I see the Virgo September lady sweeping a broom around... or maybe a paintbrush... but the 'leaves' makes me think of the changing leaves too.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013
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We've already had some snow, so I feel like fall lasted two weeks and then was gone. But that subtle change in the air, it always seems to hit me. Makes me want to go on an adventure or something. But adventures are code for trouble. Lots of trouble. So I guess I'll just have to get my gas fireplace in working order so I can enjoy a cozy fire and some hot tea instead. That's the safer option. ;)
I like your play on words here... the leaves summer behind part. I see the Virgo September lady sweeping a broom around... or maybe a paintbrush... but the 'leaves' makes me think of the changing leaves too.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013
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Snow????? Yikes. I start to panic when the temp hits 60. Thanks for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from ann marie mazz
good morning gretchen
the format is true to form and count
the presentation is lovely
the words describe september
this is a grand time of year
thank you for sharing
enjoy the day
ann marie
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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good morning gretchen
the format is true to form and count
the presentation is lovely
the words describe september
this is a grand time of year
thank you for sharing
enjoy the day
ann marie
Comment Written 08-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from amahra
Leaves summer behind. Great play on words. Just the right touch for this little poem with the great meaning. Loved the art work. Great stuff.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Leaves summer behind. Great play on words. Just the right touch for this little poem with the great meaning. Loved the art work. Great stuff.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hey Gretchen,
That was a great play with the word leaves. Here in Houston we are still having summer weather. A/C still buzzing away. I miss autumn.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Hey Gretchen,
That was a great play with the word leaves. Here in Houston we are still having summer weather. A/C still buzzing away. I miss autumn.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review. Good luck with the electric bill. LOL. Gretchen
Comment from Titanx9
The picture and the 5/7/5 poem go together. It's unfortunate for some that summer is gone with all it greenery, but, for me, autumn is the most picturesque time of the year. It's my favorite time. All the beautiful autumn colors are from G-d's own palette. This is what your poem depicts for me. Great job!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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The picture and the 5/7/5 poem go together. It's unfortunate for some that summer is gone with all it greenery, but, for me, autumn is the most picturesque time of the year. It's my favorite time. All the beautiful autumn colors are from G-d's own palette. This is what your poem depicts for me. Great job!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Joy Graham
I enjoyed this 5-7-5 poem. Your syllables are all fine. I enjoyed your use of words. "leaves summer behind". This is a refreshing change from all the falling leaves poems we usually see on site. Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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I enjoyed this 5-7-5 poem. Your syllables are all fine. I enjoyed your use of words. "leaves summer behind". This is a refreshing change from all the falling leaves poems we usually see on site. Well done!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from teafor2
GWHARGIS--Personified observation made in line #1; imagery
expanded in line #2: elightenment provided for both pre-
vious lines by line #3. Human attributes given to seasons
via scribe's vivid imagination and witty creativity. Timely
post showcasing mother nature's seasonal rotations. teafor2
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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GWHARGIS--Personified observation made in line #1; imagery
expanded in line #2: elightenment provided for both pre-
vious lines by line #3. Human attributes given to seasons
via scribe's vivid imagination and witty creativity. Timely
post showcasing mother nature's seasonal rotations. teafor2
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the unique and helpful review. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
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U R welcome. I am glad you found my response
helpful. Excellent use of the senses to
take advantage of what is readily available.
Keep reading, reviewing and writing. :)
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Gretchen,
Your 5-7-5 is an interesting reminder that fall is here and things are destined to change. It is not my favorite time of the year only because winter follows.
Curtis
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Gretchen,
Your 5-7-5 is an interesting reminder that fall is here and things are destined to change. It is not my favorite time of the year only because winter follows.
Curtis
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the great review. I'm with you on the onset of winter. The nights are pretty and the winter sky is beautiful, but I don't like the cold. Thanks, again. Gretchen
Comment from edde1969
Dear friend,
A reason why YOU are here is, you were put here to inspire me--and others--to keep on writing. I have chosen to take on a seemingly impossible task of writing a book about a person's view of what they see in the letters, L-I-F-E.
Your practically perfect writing PROVES to me, that I am not alone in my quest of finding intelligent people, who are looking for more to L-I-F-E than just occupying space, and consuming oxygen.
There are three kinds of people in America--if not the world:
1. Those that MAKE it happen.
2. Those that WATCH it happen.
3. Those that wonder, "What HAPPENED?"
A REASON for me to be here, is to tell YOU, that YOU belong to Group Number One, so, please, keep on keepin' on!
Carry on my wayward one,
There'll be peace when EW* are done,
Lay your weary head to rest,
Don't you cry no more.
Love, Peace, Freedom,
EDDE
eMail: edde1969@hotmail.com
PS If you have the time and are interested, my story link is: http://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=647888
*East/West
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Dear friend,
A reason why YOU are here is, you were put here to inspire me--and others--to keep on writing. I have chosen to take on a seemingly impossible task of writing a book about a person's view of what they see in the letters, L-I-F-E.
Your practically perfect writing PROVES to me, that I am not alone in my quest of finding intelligent people, who are looking for more to L-I-F-E than just occupying space, and consuming oxygen.
There are three kinds of people in America--if not the world:
1. Those that MAKE it happen.
2. Those that WATCH it happen.
3. Those that wonder, "What HAPPENED?"
A REASON for me to be here, is to tell YOU, that YOU belong to Group Number One, so, please, keep on keepin' on!
Carry on my wayward one,
There'll be peace when EW* are done,
Lay your weary head to rest,
Don't you cry no more.
Love, Peace, Freedom,
EDDE
eMail: edde1969@hotmail.com
PS If you have the time and are interested, my story link is: http://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=647888
*East/West
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much, but I have a confession. I am in the wondering What the hell just happened category a whole lot. LOL. Glad you enjoyed my work and hope to get a look at yours soon. Thank you again. Gretchen
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Question, Gretchen, is this your "work" or is writing your PASSION? Just wondering.
Best always,
EDDE
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I don't think I could live without writing. Exist maybe, but not live as God intended. Did that answer your question?
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written you have used the limited form well to paint a picture of summer departing well done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Yes my friend this is well written you have used the limited form well to paint a picture of summer departing well done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and the great review. Gretchen
