thoughts and feelings in poetry
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Comment from barleygirl
Beautiful family sentiments & poignantly related back to the one important person who's missing from the family picture. Your poem is so clear & your missing him pervades every line with a bittersweet tone. Great job! Good luck!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Beautiful family sentiments & poignantly related back to the one important person who's missing from the family picture. Your poem is so clear & your missing him pervades every line with a bittersweet tone. Great job! Good luck!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank You!
For your sweet review.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! What a great poem! The author did a great job conveying a wish that is extremely thought provoking.
The reader was able to identify with this poem. The reader's Dad died at age 51. This poem as well written.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Excellent Poem! What a great poem! The author did a great job conveying a wish that is extremely thought provoking.
The reader was able to identify with this poem. The reader's Dad died at age 51. This poem as well written.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Thank you for your review I do wish my dad was here
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer stays consistent with the aabb rhyme scheme. The rhyming is good. The piece flows well as the rhymes are not forced. The writer delivers a message that touches the heart of the reader. This piece grabs my attention from the start and holds it to the end.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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The writer stays consistent with the aabb rhyme scheme. The rhyming is good. The piece flows well as the rhymes are not forced. The writer delivers a message that touches the heart of the reader. This piece grabs my attention from the start and holds it to the end.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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thank you for your review,I appreciate
your comments
Comment from Liz Dunbee
This is a lovely wish. I sometimes wish the same. In the line 'how mush the tree has grown.' Correct the spelling of mush to much. Your rhyming is good and the poem flows well. I would take out the word added in the second line. It will not change the meaning in any way. See if it works for you. You have a wonderful big family. You are very lucky.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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This is a lovely wish. I sometimes wish the same. In the line 'how mush the tree has grown.' Correct the spelling of mush to much. Your rhyming is good and the poem flows well. I would take out the word added in the second line. It will not change the meaning in any way. See if it works for you. You have a wonderful big family. You are very lucky.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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thanks for your review and I will try to find a way to correct my mistakes I am not very good with the computer skills yet i make alot of booboos.lol
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhymes
good use of enjambment to keep your ideas flowing from line to line
typo - how MUSH the tree has grown
What a wonderful family your father started :-) Your love for him and feelings of loss are thoughtfully expressed. I just bet that somewhere he is feeling so proud of all of you :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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solid rhymes
good use of enjambment to keep your ideas flowing from line to line
typo - how MUSH the tree has grown
What a wonderful family your father started :-) Your love for him and feelings of loss are thoughtfully expressed. I just bet that somewhere he is feeling so proud of all of you :-) Brooke
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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thank you i know he would be.
Comment from joneau2
My, this is a wonderful tribute to your dad, and expressed so well. You obviously have a talent for writing and expressing yourself. I enjoyed it.
One observation: ... how mush the tree has grown.
mush s/b much
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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My, this is a wonderful tribute to your dad, and expressed so well. You obviously have a talent for writing and expressing yourself. I enjoyed it.
One observation: ... how mush the tree has grown.
mush s/b much
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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thank you for your review and my missed typed word I am better at pen and paper than I am with this keyboard takes me thirty minutes to type what I can write in five.I do love writing thanks
Comment from DanielEkine
What a beautiful dressing. Great job from the author.
"With ten grandchildren,eleven great grandchildren
and room for more,we need a bigger table to sit thirty four.
Oh how I wish my dad could see
all the new faces on our family tree. " my best part.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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What a beautiful dressing. Great job from the author.
"With ten grandchildren,eleven great grandchildren
and room for more,we need a bigger table to sit thirty four.
Oh how I wish my dad could see
all the new faces on our family tree. " my best part.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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thank you as for room for more my son and his wife are expecting another child in Feb. we are blessed
Comment from Steve Pantazis
That's quite a prolific family you have. Your dad would have been blown away by the proliferation of his kin. Nice tribute to him.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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That's quite a prolific family you have. Your dad would have been blown away by the proliferation of his kin. Nice tribute to him.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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thank you my dad was a wonderful man him and my mother taught us that nothing was more important than family
Comment from zanya
My heart breaks reading this -the wish expressed here is heartfelt.The family tree is a precious commodity and seeing it grow is one of life's greatest joys.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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My heart breaks reading this -the wish expressed here is heartfelt.The family tree is a precious commodity and seeing it grow is one of life's greatest joys.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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thank you we were raised to know that family is the most important thin in life
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
All thirty four members live under the same roof so lovably and historically if father had seen the family tree, a family feeling and belongingness in love colour and relation is nicely exalted. 10/801
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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All thirty four members live under the same roof so lovably and historically if father had seen the family tree, a family feeling and belongingness in love colour and relation is nicely exalted. 10/801
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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thank you for your review we don't all live in the same house but we see each other all the time just to get together and spend time having fun