Comment from Ben Colder

Good

This is good and the thought is even better. Never stop dancing. I gave you four stars hoping it might help concerning some things I have learned here on F.S. Separate your stanzas for a more easer read. Critics love poking corrections at you for not doing it but if it fits your thoughts who cares if you leave it the way you have it.

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 Comment Written 16-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013

Thanks! I appreciate your thoughts.

Comment from 4tun81

Excellent

This poem captures a moment that I hope many grandparents have. I happen to have a photo of me with my newborn son (36 years ago). When my grandson was born my son, by coincidence, had a photo taken of himself with his son in the exact same position. I have the photos sitting side by side - remembering when...

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013

That's lovely. Thank you for your comments. :)

Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel

Exceptional

I don't know, but something of the wisdom and love of this piece just touched me. You know to appreciate magic when you see it, love when you fell it - and that is no small thing. Well done.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013

Thank you so much, it is one of my fondest memories.

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

such a wonderful gift to behold the joy in its happiness like your little piece of heaven holding your heart in such beauty lovely piece

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013

Thank you.

Comment from EMB

Excellent

So I'm guessing single mom, since there's no mention of dancing with the husband and father. This is a lovely poem, filled with the love of a grandmother. Very nice. :)

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013

Actually no. I don't know of many husbands who will go babysit with their wives. If you have one, hold onto him! LOL Thanks for your comments.

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

This is lovely. I can just see your
daughter dancing with her baby in
the soft light of the moon and then you
join them.
Three generations dancing as you remember
your own baby. so sweet. I loved it.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013

Thank you for your lovely comments.

Comment from donaldww

Excellent

The speaker has taken on her grandchild for baby sitting, while her daughter goes out dancing. As a result of the moment, the speaker decides to dance as well.

cheers,
DW

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013

Thank you. :)

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

The birth of a new baby is such a great influence on everybody. It's a reminder of why we're here. Your poem is full of life, and like how it spreads to you. The joy is overwhelming. Thanks for sharing. Les

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013

Thank you! :)

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This poem poignantly depicts three generations linked by love. I can easily see my own wife and daughter here.
I like how the "camera" records this scene in a non-stop manner as one line tumbles into the next. "This child's mother was that little girl of mine" speaks volumes. So easy to relate to this moment in time. RodG

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013

Thank you. :)

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

This is a tender write giving tribute to generational universal appreciation and experience. How we still see the world anew in the eyes of our children not matter the age. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013

Thank you for your lovely comment.